I love the first page; the text is super flavorful and explains the goings-on well. I also love the style of the illustrations! (Though I’m not clear on what the owl / plague doctor represent.) I think the layout could use a bit more white space to make it easier to read. I also found the bolded text (death/unmortality/etc) to be a bit distracting; I think using the bold more sparingly would make it easier to understand when you’re introducing a new key concept which you’ll explain later.

I personally found the second page to be spread a bit too thin; there are so many locations that you don’t have enough room to provide more information about them. If I ran this, I know I would feel the need to do lots of extra work to flesh out the areas, but I can also see how someone else would enjoy that work! Regardless, I think it’s a great adventure hook and I think it would be a blast to play. Great little module.

There is a lot stuffed into two A4 (four A5) pages. Much like an overstuffed calzone, it’s ooooooooooooozing with goodness, but is also challenging to digest. This is, for sure, one of the entries that I’d love to see an expanded, fleshed-out version of.

The introduction is very atmospheric and set the mood really well. The emphasis on the words DEATH and UNMORTAL grabbed my attention and set a horror-like mood. The tables are extensive and give content for several sessions. I would love a third spread to spotlight some scenes, but wouldn't know what to cut. Guess I just want more :) 

I like the gothic horror feel; the situation is both sad and scary, and the addition of some factions and political intrigue is fun. I like the clue system with rumors as a nice easy way to world build. Overall, a good entry and a lot to play with. Personally I would make it clear that if Death is set free, the Unmortals are also freed to pass on (Thus if a player dies, they have an impactful choice to make). Great idea overall!

Love the clear objective and overall theme, and the sandbox-y feel of the world-slice described on these 2 A4-sized pages. There is some work left for the GM to fill in the gaps, so ideal to slot into an existing campaign or world, I think.

Also loving the unique art style!

Loved the setup and mechanics around that for an OSR game! Fun stuff. 

Would like to see more sentences about the NPCs and some of the encounters. I realize space was an issue bc mine was similar. (4 pages is a fun challenge but really right. )

Your writing is good. I also enjoyed the illustrations. 

You've got a fantastic premise and really packed a TON into the available space!

Solid approach to the prompt.  Ample gamified content and context.  In a small footprint, overflows with material (in other words "you did it to Death").

The tables to roll on are great and I like the included final paragraph on how to adapt to various genres, good addition. The freeing Death scenario makes it feel like a story from mythology, which I enjoy, and I think fits well for the Appendix N factor. 

As someone who has spent a lot of time looking at mythology, I always loved the stories of deals with death, games to avoid death, and other such concepts. I think you put a really fun spin on that trope here. 

Really love this idea! Writing is super clear and easy to follow, and I think this would be easy to slot into an existing campaign or run as a stand alone session (or two!)

An wonderfully fantastic premise re: Unmortality, in an absolutely jam-packed module!

I appreciated that the general vagueness allows for it to fit into any other setting with only some tweaking. I concur with many others here that I’d try not to kill the Witch, but also, I imagine my players wouldn’t allow Death to go free without something in return either

I really like your writing style. You strike a great balance of directness and detail so it's all super readable while being thematically appropriate. Awesome!

Very nice. I like the use of fonts and how organized everything is. Gives a Pratchettesque feeling from the start. 

I think that the final fate of the Witch should be an interesting aftermath to a game. Does she end up the last and only Unmortal? Does Death liberate her, because Death is nothing if not professional? Choices, choices! 

I don't know if it was the inspiration, but I saw a similar idea in a book by Saramago, Death with Interruptions. By the way, the book and your idea are spectacular. I'll definitely save it not only to play, but also to explore the possibility of making a Hexcrawl map (which I think would be perfect) for your adventure.

Wow this is great! Everything is very clearly laid out and the art compliments it well.

This is very fun! I got strong Pratchett vibes even before I saw your shout-out, and that’s about as good a compliment as I know how to give.

Really great minigame style feel to this. I'm not sure how much this follows Reaper Man, but the central conceit is excellent, and brilliantly aligns with the title. I can imagine running this with a small amount of work making NPC stats. Nice one.

This really maximises the amount of content you can fit on just one page. This is brilliant! Well done on creating such a feature rich cursed world. I like that you give just enough information to allow the DM to fill in the gaps.

Absolutly BRUTAL!!! Loved this cursed world. I'll definitely DM it with my players. I just wished it had more art, specially the map.