Thank you for taking the time to give me some feedback, I really appreciate it.
This was the first rpg material I’d cooked up, written out and shared online-when I compare it with the other material entered into the jam I can see plenty wrong. You’re being kind, there’s much more that makes me wince! Still live and learn.
I’m delighted you got plague doc and owl, at least the art landed. I was trying to drop in something regarding the plague that started the whole mess and the animals which might attack PCs. To be honest, I wanted to break up the wall of writing with pics that meant something (to me at least) in the entry.
Regarding “depth”- I know what you mean. In hindsight, I could have just written about the witch and Death and focused just on the final approach to her cottage- set a clock for players to act against, failure meaning the unmortal state runs wild. The other locations, events and NPCs being set aside.
That’s kind of where I started; the three or four other versions I began were all tightly focussed on an event that created something for players to interact with. With this entry, Ive actually written the bones of the climax to a campaign I’m DMing- so I’ve got to fill in the blanks myself!
Thanks again for your thoughts.