This is one scenario that begs for more flavour and more detail. 

Down Bad has a fantastic premise and is a well organized scenario. The central conflict is well outlined, the timeline is dramatic, the external locations are well characterized. There just isn't enough of it. The NPC section, though useful, is compressed and disconnected from the rest of the action. How do those NPCs fit the different levels of the setting, specifically? The Sumu-7A Layout locations could use more texture. Maybe a small bullet list of unique things to find there or another sentence would bring them more in line with the Off-Site Locations in terms of usability. 

Overall, I really like the pamphlet and look forward to running it. I agree with a couple of the other reviewers that it is begging for adaptation into a larger zine format.

Liked this a lot! It’s really well outlined and makes me want to explore. I would say it might rely a lot on improvisation - part of the fun would be moving between and within the levels but I’m not sure how well I’d handle that as a GM without more space to think / to structure the activity. Perhaps mini-quests on different levels would help?

Also, the levels are repeated - once for outline, once for the reaction - perhaps this could be combined? And the key personnel is really useful but really tiny! And I wasn’t sure why the Deep Deep Down was spared the crushing / healing process. That’s quite mysterious and could be developed a bit more - is it safe for now, or for ever, or is something weirder happening?

Anyway on the whole I think this is great. Maybe a bit of development of the information design would improve it a bit, but the set-up and the writing is really evocative - I think you could probably make this a 12-page zine tbh!

Loved it, would write up a critique but essentially everything I would say has been said (and quite well i might add) by other reviewers. Really hope you take the time to do a post Jam version of this, it is great as is but with a little push it will be something truly excellent! Also I agree with one of the commenters below (can’t remember who) that this could easily be a prelude to a larger zine module or perhaps expanded itself into a Zine. I’d love to see some small reasons/hooks to come and “get to know” Sumu-7a so I could pepper it into a campaign a few times, make the PCs want to come back or be invested in some way (maybe they spent some money on a “get rich quick” diamond mine asset or something) and then run the ecological disaster scenario you have here…

anyway I’m rambling and I’ve got many more entries to rate, but I had to say your submission was great! easily amongst my favorites of the Jam!

Love it. One of maybe three so far I'd have a hard time picking between if we had to decide on our favorite.

The graphic design is very good. Maybe I don't super-duper love the colour scheme and maybe the NPC table is taking things a bit far in terms of tiny font size, but whatever. Minor nitpicks. It's clean, it's functional, the ordering of information makes sense, I had no trouble following the story and knowing where to refer back to when checking things. 

Likewise, the writing is clear and to the point, and lets the material shine on its own terms without pretense. Just the way this news editor likes things.

Not even a criticism, more an observation: this kinda falls somewhere in between a setting and module. I like that you gave the Warden freedom to decide what the setup is, while also making suggestions. The only downside to that is that there isn't a built-in reason for the players to stay long on the lower levels and risk getting swallowed up. Obviously at the tail end of things you get caught between a literal rock and a hard (radiation) place, but in the middle stages there might be a slow period unless the Warden comes up with a reason to get the players to go back down for something.

For that reason, if I run this, I'll probably do at least two scenarios in the same setting and let the players get used to SUMU-7A in its normal state before it starts trying to swallow them whole. That way I can let the plot naturally give them a reason to stay near the bottom as long as they can, or try to go back to rescue someone, or whatever.

I'm down bad for this one (had to I am so sorry)! God, this is a really sick premise. Putting the rich folks on the “lowest” level because its away from the radiation is really novel and gives a great ironic twist. I buy the vibe of desperation, panic, and horror pervading the whole thing!

The module explains itself as you go, making the eventual running really easy! I like the inclusion of some off-site locations for exploration/wrap-up, and “In the Crush” is excellent for making a fail-state interesting and horrifying. Losing is winning in Mothership after all!

While some elements feel prohibitively small (helping hands table) to be effectively useable, this is some great commitment to "under the surface" while working as both a unique shore leave destination and a super engaging "natural disaster" one-shot!

A well-done hub world with an escalating timer to turn their shelter into a tomb.

+ Excellent escalation and level destruction timeline, making it clear how the world evolves

+ Great list of NPCs to discover and help in exchange for valuable resources and assets for the escalating disaster. 

+ A simple yet easy to understand planet properties to dictate the law of the land

If you're looking for feedback, let me know and I can expand further.

I read through you jam entry. Here's my written commentary on your adventure content and layout:

---Interesting concept with the environment being the horror, cosmic radiation on the surface, and the wound slowly closing up

---Some of the reactions to the crisis seem a little unaligned to the timelines. Boarded up shops after 7 hours of in-game time may be quick

---The Layout and Mounting Panic tables could have been all on the back spread, perhaps with a map to give scale

---I like the NPCs, it would be good if they could be associated with a specific area or areas

---If the PCs are going to get caught in the trap, there could be more detail about the lowest and most luxurious levels

This is really fun! I could definitely see myself running this one! Here is my feedback:
+ Layout is clean, and the formatting works well!
+ concise descriptions of the events and situation.
+The timeline is clear and concise, and the formatting of the escalation is well done.
+ Leans into the theme well.
- helping hands section is a bit too small, manageable with zoom, but if it was physical it would be awkward to read.
- I feel like some NPC 'bad actors,' which are implied, should probably be defined. This would take some mental load off the Warden.
- The yellow in the 'map' draws the eye a bit too strongly, making the descriptions a bit hard to parse.

Looks great! I really like the escalating plot danger. I find the “Helping Hands” section to be a bit hard to read due to the small sized text.