This is really fun! I could definitely see myself running this one! Here is my feedback:
+ Layout is clean, and the formatting works well!
+ concise descriptions of the events and situation.
+The timeline is clear and concise, and the formatting of the escalation is well done.
+ Leans into the theme well.
- helping hands section is a bit too small, manageable with zoom, but if it was physical it would be awkward to read.
- I feel like some NPC 'bad actors,' which are implied, should probably be defined. This would take some mental load off the Warden.
- The yellow in the 'map' draws the eye a bit too strongly, making the descriptions a bit hard to parse.
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Hiya, thanks for your thoughtful comments! I was worried that the timelines might not read well so it's nice to hear you appreciated them. I definitely wish I had given some more love to the characters section (both layout-wise and narrative-wise), that's usually where i start writing stuff like this but this time I worked backwards (and didn't leave myself enough time or space). And re: the yellow -- didn't occur to me at the time but I definitely see what you're talking about! Appreciate you pointing it out.
Working my way through them all in reverse alphabetical order for some reason, so I'm looking forward to reading yours soon!