A well-done hub world with an escalating timer to turn their shelter into a tomb.
+ Excellent escalation and level destruction timeline, making it clear how the world evolves
+ Great list of NPCs to discover and help in exchange for valuable resources and assets for the escalating disaster.
+ A simple yet easy to understand planet properties to dictate the law of the land
If you're looking for feedback, let me know and I can expand further.
Certainly. The module is overall really well fleshed out; I can see it being paired well with Pound of Flesh's colony generation tables. So, I have no main points of feedback. A couple minor points though:
Overall, this module has very little issues can serve as a strong foundation to build on with other modules.
Hiya, thanks for the in-depth feedback!
reading it back cold now, I definitely see what you're saying about the cover/truth overlap. they were written pretty far apart from one another in production, and considering how space is at a premium, I could've helped myself with an edit there! Stat blocks could have been good use, I also would have loved to get into those NPCs a little more with the extra space. Or even just more "illustrative" notes for wardens on the levels, as I've seen in other modules here -- sounds, smells, sights were not at the forefront of my mind when I was writing. Re the text on blue -- I could definitely see that, I'll pass it on to my layout teammate for if/when we do a second draft!
Thanks again, this is all great (& actionable) feedback! Cheers!
