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You can change still update the details on your submission on an ongoing basis if you like.

Just go to your submission page, hit "Edit This Submission".

Great looking tabletop simulator mod! Good full width screenshots on the Press Kit.

Suggestions:

-- Highlight that it's a free mod for one of the world's largest tabletop simulators (which isn't free).

-- Cut all the non-core hashtags but add in #TabletopSimulator as that is a key hashtag for this mod

-- Add white space (blank lines), makes it much easier to read.

-- Redesign the press kit to match the game style.

I liked that line too and to be honest it made me click through.. I'd actually recommend keeping the line but also including the link underneath. 

Love the cover image. 

Suggestions:

-- Call To Action: Include the link and what you want people to do. You have a Demo but your page says "Game Demo: Coming Soon" which is confusing. 

-- Video: Upload direct to Twitter. YouTube links get penalised by Twitter's algorithm. 

-- Embed your link in your uploaded video using Twitter Ad Cards. Ask your team on our Discord how to do that if you're unsure.

-- If you're planning on releasing on Steam then you want to get your page up as early as possible to start collecting wishlists many many months before.

Good artwork and the Press Kit is nicely laid out.

Suggestions:

-- Flesh out your tweet. The pitch in your Press Kit is good and would work with a bit of tweaking:

A 2D mini-openworld action RPG that simulate a delinquent high school girls life and her vengeance story.

Female duo protagonist, multiple endings, beat'em up gameplay with strong RPG elements.

-- Get someone to proofread and edit your Press Kit and tweet before submitting to #PitchYaGame.

Note: Make sure you read the rules of PYG. You are only supposed to submit once to PitchYaGame during the designated day / time so your current tweet doesn't count.

• https://pitchyagame.com/how-to-pitch/
• NB: Posts made outside of official times will not count as an entry for consideration for an award.

Nice retro look and feel. Love the goblin premise.

We think you could legitimately call it "Untitled Goblin Game" and it would work permanently. 😉

Suggestions:

-- Recommend using an uploaded video for your Tweet for Pitch Ya Game, clips get much better traction.

-- You can set your video to use a link to your page with Twitter Ad Cards. Jump in Discord and ask your team if you don't know how.

Press Kit Link on this submission page is broken.

Link on Game Page works:

https://docs.google.com/presentation/d/1qrEck__abNYMEaS6NM_zQ4eZ8GqczJhu9xugkhrg...

Unique premise and cool art. 

Look forward to seeing your Tweet and Press Kit.

Love the look and feel of the game! And a very unique premise. 

Suggestions:

-- Polish the Trailer 

-- Flesh out the Itch page content

-- This quote from your One Pager may be a better hook than the current tweet? Maybe try A/B roadtesting for clickthroughs from both?

When The River Runs Dry is a narrative driven adventure game, complete with mystical water powers and a quirky collection of animal friends -- all to be found on a journey to the summit.

-- The One Pager Press Kit is really handy. Personally I think an easy to access Google Doc like the Indie Legion Press Kit Lite is really good for quick info gathering, with links to other content being very useful. I haven't verified this with Content Creators so it's just an opinion but if you have all your info anyway it can't really hurt to have that accessible.

Looks great! Definitely a stand out entry. Love the comic book world style, the trailer is good and the premise is unique!

Suggestions:

-- Tweet suggestion pasted below (as Realms Games). You have some more words so might be worth using it. (Although your video is great so shorter may be better. Try A/B testing to see which one gets more link clicks.)

-- Use Twitter Ad Cards to embed your Demo Link in your video so when people click they go straight to your page. Jump in our Discord and ask your team if you don't know how.

-- Call to Action should go to your demo not your Press Kit. 

-- Your Press Kit page should have the meat of the information presented neatly on the page. Your link should be for bulky files like video, high-res screenshots, etc

-- Recommend running through the https://feepresskit.com/ tool and updating your page.

Sounds like a very atmospheric game with lots of promise!

The visuals are striking and unique and the page captures the horror atmosphere really well.

Suggestions:

-- It's worth highlighting that this is Episode 2 which continues on from Episode 1 -- and provide a link to Episode 1 for people to download.

-- Recommended Tweet edit submitted as Realms Games.

Your submission for this PitchYaPitch would be the following:

-- Your Submission / Game Page: https://canaanthedoll.itch.io/einsamkeit-halwende-2nd-episode 

-- Your Tweet: https://twitter.com/DollCanaan/status/1450601915545530368

-- Your Press Kit: https://canaanthedoll.itch.io/einsamkeit-halwende-2nd-episode 

Feel free to click "Edit This Submission" and update.

It's also worth highlighting that this is Episode 2 which continues on from Episode 1 -- and provide a link to Episode 1 for people to download.

Suggested Tweet Edit:

#PuzzlingRealms: A brain teasing, casual puzzle platformer proving #GameDev dreams can come true.

Built on the beautiful SkyPalace map, handcrafted by the @InsertDragon Design Team.

Play the Free Demo:

https://realmsgames.itch.io/puzzlingrealms

#PitchYaPitch

Climbing the Tower of Babel in a Classic RPG Roguelike hybrid is a great premise! 

Suggestions:

-- Make sure you highlight your Unique Selling Points in your pitch tweet. 

-- Ask someone to proofread and edit for you. 

-- Avoid unnecessary hashtags as they limit space you can use to describe your game.

-- Your Trailer looks like a good start but would be better used to showcase Gameplay and Game Scenes for most of the time rather than panels of text.

Very clear and unique premise! 

Suggestions:

-- Recommended tweet edit posted below (as Realms Games)

-- Ask someone to proofread and edit your Press Kit for you. It will make life easier for Content Creators to pick up and share.

Game looks good -- Especially for early development stage! 

Key art is very retro D&D / Lord of the Rings.. We likey! 

Suggestions:

-- Rewrite the tweet to address both of your key target audiences: US and Europeans. (Americans probably won't react as well to the ultra dry humor style as Europeans.)  

-- Flesh out the details to include specifics of your world. There's not much beyond generic information and it would be great to hear about some of the lore, characters, places and heroes / villains.

-- Great start to the Press Kit. You can expand on the world detail as per above, make the screenshots larger (add in more slides).

-- Try to hone in on a Unique Selling Proposition: What is really unique and interesting about your game that distinguishes it from others in that category?

The game looks really cute! Love the setting and the animal characters. 

The premise of saving the day via psychotherapy is a really Unique Selling Point. 

Suggestions:

-- Tweet needs a Call to Action. For now this could be Play the Free Demo [Itch Link]

-- Press Kit: You may want to post a version using Indie Legion's Press Kit Lite as it covers key items in an easily digestible format. More accessible images, video, etc would be really handy for bloggers and other Content Creators.

-- Indie Legion Detailed Press Kit or FeePressKit is a good idea for more detailed version.

Recommended tweet edit submitted here as Realms Games.

Please click "Edit This Submission" and update your Tweet Link: https://twitter.com/IndieLegion/status/1454381616663437314

Tweet is good and the game looks great! You've ticked the boxes for suggested content and you've published a great game!  

Tweet Suggestions:

-- Need a Call to Action with Steam page link (your primary focus).

-- You can embed the link to your Steam page in your Trailer using Twitter Ad Cards. Jump on our Discord to find out how. 

Press Kit:

-- Great start. Flesh out some details and will be even better.

-- Recent grads can add in things like your game dev degree, university, big companies you may have worked on games for, even as a student

-- Redesign the front pages to match your own look and feel in the back. (The plain template is just for ease of sharing.)

-- Price: Commas are European punctuation not English.. It's 10.99 not 10,99 

-- Status: Early Access (Remove "In Development" as that implies it's not released)

Feedback submitted as Realms Games.

Great visuals and nice-looking trailer. You've done a great job with the Press Kit!

Suggestions:

-- Include gameplay in your trailer.

-- Set up a Call to Action link : This could be a Google Play page where people can Wishlist the game or a mailing list so they can get notified when it comes out. (Follow on Itch is probably not going to be very effective for a mobile game)

-- Could include a Minecraft meets XYZ game type description -- lot of people like this type of breakdown.

Stand out entry!  Love the premise of the game and the visuals are very atmospheric.

Great tweet, the Press Kit is nicely detailed and the Steam Trailer is visually stunning.

Suggestions:

-- Perhaps include more focus on your Unique Selling Point: we feel that building an army of the living dead is pretty unique so added it to the suggested tweet edit posted below (as Realms Games).

-- Trailer could start with action to grab attention and then cut to various other scenes. Include the Trailer here too.

Stand out entry! This looks like a stunning #WheresWally Visual Novel in a game. 

Great Press Kit! Love the Trailer and the visuals -- it's so cute! 

Suggestions:

-- The tweet needs work. We've suggested an option below (as Realms Games).

-- As your Steam page is your key focus, you could add a link with Call to Action on your Itch page. 

-- You can create an embedded link in your GIF using Twitter Ad Cards so that when people click the GIF they go straight to the Steam page. Our Discord has a How-To on this.

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Stand out entry! Cute game and recovering your body sounds like a unique premise! Tweet is well crafted and includes your link. 

Solid Press Kit which covers key information and includes great visuals and other media.

Suggestions:

-- Keep refining the tweet and the Press Kit -- getting lots of feedback from everyone around you -- until it's a finely honed weapon of mass downloadination.. ;-)

-- There isn't much about the gameplay itself. We've suggested a tweet edit (via Realms Games) that includes a couple of key gameplay features.

-- Publication Date is a very tricky one. From the perspective of a gamer, I'd like to get at least an idea of when it might be coming out, even just the estimated year. As an aspiring Dev, I feel like setting a target could also be good for motivation. (Might go the other way round too though.)

Suggested Tweet:

Nobody’s Quest is a relaxing sandbox RPG adventure in a mini pixelated world: Help a wandering soul recover its body and defeat LOATHE!

Explore, Craft and Farm to save Hubbington. You start with nothing, not even your body!

Free Demo:

https://store.steampowered.com/app/1574500/Nobodys_Quest/

#PitchYaPitch

Good tweet and solid press kit. Stand out entry!

Suggestions:

-- Include key details like Free Game and Available to play now on Web & Android. 

-- Needs a Call to Action: Include your #1 link and what you want them to do ie Play now on Web / Android. 

-- Video is great. You can use Twitter Ad Cards to make your video into a link. Join the Indie Legion Discord to find out how. 

Suggested Tweet Edit:

Cante is a Romantic Visual Novel where you explore The Ash Kingdom: a moldable world of imagination, with magical powers driven by emotions.

Will you take up the challenge of becoming a Ruler, a Traveler or even a Dragon Hunter?

https://altabestudio.itch.io/cante-customize-your-romance-visual-novel

#PitchYaPitch

Feedback provided as Realms Games. (see below)

Suggested Tweet Edit:

Enter the Realm of Divinos!

Adventure through beautiful landscapes and encounter captivating characters and fascinating monsters on your journey to become a revered hero, or a feared villain.

Wishlist on Steam today! (Ch.1 coming soon)

https://store.steampowered.com/app/1795710/Realm_of_Divinos/

#PitchYaPitch

Realm of Divinos looks beautiful! Love the visuals! 

General Pitch Suggestions:

-- Open your pitch with game specific content over generic blurbs. We don't know anything about the story, characters, history, etc so it's difficult to get emotionally attached or engaged. 

-- Reference your adorable mushroom characters, hunky love interests, etc to get people's attention and interest. See Kena Bridge of Spirits for an excellent example. 

Press Kit Suggestions:

-- Make links clickable (insert link)

-- Focus on the game visuals by expanding each screenshot image to a full slide

-- Wrap all of your content into a Press Kit pack (eg on Google Drive) and include a single downloadable zip file with everything 

A stand out entry! The game sounds great and the visuals are amazing! 

Suggestions:

-- Improve the clarity and consistency of your pitch.

-- Cut back on level of detail down to the core points.

-- Ensure there is an accessible Press Kit that doesn't require downloading and unzipping. Zip files should be saved for full kits including high res media etc.

-- Grab a copy of Press Kit Lite and start with that. It should help you to refine your pitch to key details. Sharing that will make it more accessible for most streamers, etc and they can then delve further for more information.

Indie Legion Press Kit Lite

Suggested Tweet edit:

Join Obligor on an epic journey to recover the Unbound Souls of The Spiritus Porta and return them to the Soul Keeper in this next-gen #Metroidvania.

Your actions matter -- across the whole Soul Universe!

Kickstarter launches 1 Nov!

[Kickstarter Link] 

#PitchYaPitch