First of all, I’m a huge sucker for historical/literary references, and I think yours is one of the most impressive takes on the theme. The writing is phenomenal and I love the poetry.

Something about the graphic design isn’t quite clicking for me– I love the glitched out visuals, and I like that it seems you’re going for brass, but I’m not sure it quite sticks the landing. Maybe some texture and slight color tweaks would help with that, as well as adjusting the lettering. Maybe try embossing the lettering into the metal, like an inner shadow/reflection and silver or black inlay to keep it legible? I do like the drop shadow though, gives it a sense of depth and really separates it from the background. I like the icons too, but they feel a tad redundant/out-of-place here.

I think the warden’s advice section could be integrated into other sections, or into it’s own little section– I feel strongly that if you’re asking a question in a module, unless it’s for effect, you should either answer it or write it out. That being said, I understand the rhetorical purpose of this section is to get Warden’s, especially newer ones, thinking about how to answer those themselves as it comes up in play. So take this with a grain of salt.

Overall, this is an interesting and unique module, and looks like a blast to run!

Oh, and the Jinni manifestation table is so good lol. If my players don’t roll the brass vaccsuit thing, I’d be tempted to just make it happen. So, so evil.

Great execution on the theme. The poem is brilliant and serves a lot of functions in terms of tone and roleplay, great add to the "Art" category.

Not huge on the background images and the visual style is where there is the most room for improvement for me. The text boxes as the map is a great touch, though, adn the icon linking areas are awesome.

This is a cool adventure with a great take on the theme, super solid.

The layout is so clean I could eat off it. I think you could push the fonts a little bit more; I’m not saying devolve into kitsch, but I bet there’s a more evocative h1 you could use. I appreciate the subtle drop shadows, and I truly love your map. Well done!

PCs vaccsuit turns to brass is downright diabolical, I love it. Incredibly well-written and adapted myth, huge fan of this one overall! I wasn't super keen on the usage of "italics = things PCs know" just since text styling is used simply for emphasis everywhere else, but in practice it makes the timeline of events really sleek - switching between rapid-fire in entry 4-5 reads really cleanly. Graphic design and art I feel could be imbued with more sauce (headers especially) but that's super easy to muck around with post-jam and it's already in a very solid state.

Info hierarchy is good on the outside panels, great on the inside. I dig not having to search around for where I'd start the adventure, it's right there and the info flows from that point on! I feel I have a decent grasp of how to run this adventure without much prep, and it feels that it would only improve with time.

For critique: I feel like the space where the drone art is on the inside-middle panel might be better served with a side-on view of the Galland instead. The layout is clearly communicated from the room connections, I'd just love to have art to compare the PCs ship to for an easy "establishing shot" as they dock.

I also feel like the Warden Advice sidebar on the inside-right could work great as a more specific sidebar on 'what leverage do the NPCs have?' Just a quick overview of what Solomon and Qays can both offer and threaten for the PCs. It's good advice to ask the Warden to consider these things, but even better to just lay them out as you intend. Same effect just less Warden prep (and I'm a sucker for useability).

Overall, very very good entry that I hope ranks very highly! Great stuff!

Good module with fun concepts, descriptions, and interactivity. Information is well-presented and I liked the diegetic hints for players. Good job providing multiple ways to resolve the situation. 

I had some questions: Was the brass theme to evoke the lamp from the original myth, or was there something else to it?

Is there an in-game reason for Qays to decouple the PC's ship from Galland after Solomon dies?

Good job!

ART — The cover and drone design are evocative on their own and intrigued me to look deeper to find out exactly what they represented within the context of Mothership. In terms of graphic design all of the text boxes are nice and uniform, stand out well, and the icons are representative of the titles for a very utilitarian approach.

WRITING — I particularly enjoyed the writing here for its usefulness over a desire to write prose. It's appropriately terse where necessary and in the places where specificity or mood are needed, more descriptive. My own submission went with a similar approach and so other examples of the style are appreciated, well done here in Majnun.

GAME DESIGN — It occurs to me that lies and advice on using them is worthy of being called out as a mechanical choice and underpins a lot of the tension here. What the Crew does and does not know. Depending on the path taken the threats in the Drones might soften the crew up for what are pretty devastating end game foes. My gut feeling is that this would be a pretty high body count module but that is nicely dependent on the outcome of the social problem solving with Solomon. 

THEME — In my opinion, the use of "Ancient Myths" as a theme for the jam has a few possible interpretations. Instantly recognizable and well conceived uses of familiar ancient myths, really with or without a scifi twist, are big winners.  The Bottle and the Jinni together, plus their purposes are conceivable in both genres or time periods if you like. Full marks there.

LAYOUT — All very clear, readable, easy to navigate, and reference. I'd say its all serviceable without any surprises here which is good.

UTILITY — I think I'd identify this pamphlet as one that needs to be read through in its entirety and if any questions arise, a Warden should make a note. This is neither pro or con in the case of Majnun, it just happens that the structure of the module has a certain end and context is necessary which isn't uncommon at all with this approach.  To it's credit a Warden will get to spend most of their time on the map which is a big plus!