The color palette is sublime: evocative, draws the eye to detail, a striking balance of warm and cold. Cover art reminds of a 60s pulp magazine in the best way. Insectoid art is restrained; invites the viewer to form theories, but is not plainly protagonistic or antagonistic. I love using the chamber effect dice to build the obelisk; that creates very cool and clear mounting tension at the table level which could be represented in-fiction in a number of different ways. The premise is clear and invites a great variety of roleplaying opportunities. 

Some notes, though all of them are picking nits off of an overall solid adventure: 

CLARITY:

I was a little confused by the term “excav team” because it seems to be used for both the now-cultists as well as the human team of scientists. 

It’s possible I missed it, but the connection between opening the chambers and powering up the obelisk seems arbitrary. Perhaps this was the best way to ensure a slow-burning fuse on the obelisk, but I think the adventure would benefit from some more connective tissue between this pivotal player action and the dire consequence. 

The layout is a touch rough; I had to backtrack a few times for important context, and the font is smaller than it could be given how much white space you have left over.

MECHANICS:

The “gadget” should have a little more scaffolding around it, otherwise it feels like accidentally stumbling into a silver bullet without much strategy behind it.

I’m not sure what the “Oubliette” is there to do other than give the PCs nightmares. I’d suggest thinking about its function for the aliens and translating that to a few knobs and dials for the players to interact with.

Super cool! I LOVE the focus on in person play, the art and the design. Personally, I would prefer to less reliance on random encounters in each room with a few of the key things (especially the gadgets) placed in specific locations. The key thing for me in a game is choice - if something is random, players can't really choose to pursue it as effectively. I'd rather it be definite but come with a potential cost (maybe the former crew are all crowded around the gadgets and present an obstacle?). I think with a few tweaks this would be super simple and straightforward to bring to the table!!

The obelisk mechanic is very good and gives a good reason to explore. I am a little concerned the players will not understand that they are supposed to destroy the obelisk when it starts activating.

Great looking map! I am however not sure sentient mantis works great with the atmosphere of the mosh universe, at least at my table.

I love the design where the dice form actual physical representations of the obelisk, that's so creative. The art is amazing too. So far, I don't have much to suggest; it's very cleanly written and contains just enough info to be both very pick-up-and-play and versatile. Always a fan of some good eldritch horrors from the stars. 

As earlier comments have pointed out, this is a little more dice-driven, and the overall story structure is pretty clear. Personally, I don't think it's a problem, though. This module would work very well for players coming from Call of Cthulhu or video games (both of which I work with a lot). It provides suspense, flavor, interactivity and versatility, so imo this can likely become a good intro module. The dice balance system is a very creative design, though I can't tell how well it will work in-game. If I ever run this, I'll make a note to come back and leave a comment.

All in all this is a fantastic module, and I must stress how much I love the art. ty for the game!

This was fun to read through! I love the stacking dice mechanic and would love to see that utilized more into the horror. If I'm reading it right it's either activated or deactivated and I wonder if it could be interacted with more ways. The artwork is great, the stacked-dice diagram is spot on. Layout wise, always a process, I could see adding color to the star cultist on the back panel before print and refining the chamber boxes to have a little more spice to match the vibe of your map and art. Fun setup, with the suit's office console lighting up. Great work!

Art style is awesome. 

The setup and ecosystem are pretty good, a bit more story and reason to be there, time pressure, or links between the five chambers (reasons to go between them) would provide more interest and break up the potential linearity. 

I felt the hub map structure is a bit underused - if they keep returning to the center, then that's an opportunity for escalation and suspense. The chamber effects are getting there.

The stack of dice made me want to have a rotating puzzle. Here's an example of what you could do: For any given roll of five dice, I think (!) it should be possible to rotate them so that each side has 2 pairs. As a Strength Check, crew can rotate one dice and all above it. If the crew knock over the dice, something bad happens, you reroll the dice and stack them up again. 

The art is so great and I think my personal favorite of the jam. I also have a deep love of bugs and praying mantises in particular as well as obelisks, ancient lost civilizations and some of the other tropes you've used.  Given that there are these familiar elements, I think it could have felt stale, but the art, the added dice mechanic, the solid writing and the easy playability all really elevate this adventure. There was an Brenan Lee Mulligan quote about how execution is everything and you really did a great job executing this one shot.  

I do think the Deactivation and Destroying the Obelisk (normally) endings could be punched up a bit. For example, even if they briefly see the Star Presence, that should come with a greater consequence than a stress point and  panic role, in my opinion. 

Great job! If I play it with my group I will send you a note on how it goes. 

Art: Full marks. The illustrations and map are perfect. The graphic design and typography are a bit boring in comparison, but it's functional and easy to read. 

Writing: Good on a technical level and does what it sets out to do, which is to provide an excuse for your mechanical creativity. That's fine as it goes, in that the writing isn't the selling point here. The setup of an alien artifact that turned everyone into monsters is a Mothership cliché, and you've hybridized that with a fairly off-the-shelf interpretation of Cthulhu mythos. Professor Warner hasn't been given any personality. 

Game Design: Stacking the dice is a clever visual gimmick and timing device, as is using it as a way to balance out the degree of luck. However, having to place them upside down is fiddly and I expect some groups will get it wrong. Since you're using tables anyway for the exploration phase, why not assign the worse/harder outcomes to the low numbers and make high ones better for the players, so you can just stack them as you rolled them without worrying about reverse sides? The scenario itself doesn't provide players a lot of options to tell the story they want. Either they're going to visit every room one by one and then deal with the obelisk, or they're not going to have a game. The keycard ending is bound to be anticlimactic and, for players not inclined to be good sports and just go with the flow, there's going to be a powerful desire to blow up the power generator and put an end to things as soon as they see what's going on.

Theme: Full marks. Cthulhu mythos is such a natural fit for Mothership that I'm surprised more people didn't use that as their mythology.

Layout: Full marks. All the information is where I'd expect it to be.

Utility: Full marks. Everything is here that you need to run the module as intended.

Favorability: Personally, I'm not big on scenarios where the story is largely being driven by dice rather than player decisions. There isn't much to do here except pick a random door, have stuff happen at you, and repeat until you get to the end. Players who have other desires are going to end up derailing the intended flow (e.g. trying to destroy the generator immediately as mentioned above).

I adore the art--the style, the colors, just fantastic. I definitely think we were on somewhat of the same wavelength--mythic verses (in haiku) of an ancient civilization, horrible universe-ending monsters. Good stuff. I also really like the Obelisk Dice mechanic--a visual representation of a ticking clock is just the kind of prop I like. 

I could use a smidge more flavor from the font, though I'll totally concede it's quite readable, and I think some of the text could use a light copy pass (for example, in the Star Presence section: "As it begins to take form all present would see pulsating veins and stygian viscera take shape before them." The repetition of take form/take shape felt like it could be streamlined). But all of those are nit picks. I really like this module, I'd love to run it, nice work.

Love this, it’s clean and fun and classic with a great archaeological/cosmic horror flavor! The tangible link between the past and future punches this up quite aways! I also really like the obelisk dice concept and would have a blast ominously stacking dice as my players demand to know what I'm up to!

I think my main pain point would be 1) Obelisk might be too tanky. Unless the crew finds the broken gadgets, there's not much they can roll on their loadouts that'll do the trick. I'd consider adding a couple Anti Armor weapons around (potential the Ancestral Sword?) to give them a fighting chance. 2) The rooms have fun lore and flavor but there's not a lot to keep PCs in each room for long. I'd recommend some traps, puzzles, or smaller encounters to break things up a bit before things really pop off.

All told though, super solveable problems and worst-case you just get to the star presence faster which isn't a bad thing. Really really keen on this one! Excellent work!