- Making hazard icons a different colour than room titles would be helpful and/or making them letters instead of numbers to differentiate better from room numbers.

- Map needs a key!

- Would be helpful to have hardpoints mentioned in room descriptions too.

- Only some rooms mention the doors in and out. Probably should be consistent. Or let the map (once it has a key!) convey doors and locks.

- Does condition 4 mean double disadvantage on saves? To be clear, maybe word it "additional [-] on saves" or similar.

- What's the condition in the vents? Adjacent rooms are not always matching.

- Repetition of Sun Gremlin stats seems unnecessary?

- Footnote for Drago would be better in the same panel (at least the same page) as where it appears. Should footnote also appear on other mentions?

- Would appreciate an incentive to save the crew beyond 'it's the right thing to do'.

- Gremlins could stand to be more horrific or sanity-testing.

(errors: "as a massive" = "a massive", " Recover the ship, Retrieve" = "Recover the ship. Retrieve", Crew Quarters [5] = Crew Quarters [6])

Great design, clear writing, and phenomenal art. Cool concept too, but I was left with a few questions. I assume the ship skipped through time - essentially missing 137 years - but I couldn't find whether that was explicitly stated. For me, the sun gremlin's playful drawings and nature sort of goes against the themes I expect with MoSH; it's not wrong to add the Gremlins into an Aliens movie, but it does change the vibe. I also couldn't see where the escape pod was, or an explanation for why the captain didn't go along on it, and I feel like players need that information to be able to make the choice of whether they save the ship or the escape pod. Overall, just a few tweaks and I think you'll have something really special!!

Great premise. I do however have two major criticisms regarding the map. Having the (good looking) map being on the other side of the pamphlet compared to the map key seems like a big blunder. Secondly it seems to me like the big dilemma is between recovering the ship and rescuing the crew. The focus on the map makes it seem like the crew option does not exist at all and the exciting moral dilemma is replaced by a regular (less exciting) map exploration scenario.

I really enjoyed reading through this and I think it'll be blast to run!
I know it was stated earlier but I do agree with I feel there would be alot of back and forward (flipping pages/pamphlet) while running to get the location and hazards right. I would likely build myself a little cheat sheet before running to avoid this issue and have to try and cover all the stacked environmental effects on the fly.

Minor - probably more personal quibble: I found the NPC illustrations actually took me away from the module itself as for me, they're very clearly contemporary aircraft (contemporary used lightly for Marie). 

Art: Full marks. I think maybe the cover art/logo doesn't sell the rest adequately, because it looks a bit basic, but then the rest of the visual presentation is a pleasant surprise. 

Writing: I think it's a good story and there's nothing in the writing that's particularly distracting or confusing. There's maybe too much repetition for a format where space is at a premium. E.g. the "what's really going on" repeats a lot of information from the front of the pamphlet, when you could use that space to go into more detail about the Sun Gremlins. As an editor, I also feel like there are some places where you're reaching for a fancy word and not quite using it right, when a simpler word would be just fine. E.g. it doesn't make sense to say the Ikkari was "jettisoned" past the light barrier... the ship was thrown out of itself? Thrown, hurled, catapulted, launched would all be fine.

Game Design: I love the idea of using the environment itself as an enemy. It almost doesn't even need the Sun Gremlins if there were more timed mechanics, raising the heat level as the scenario progresses. One thing I'm not clear on is what protection the players have. The section on Module Conditions suggests you're just automatically taking damage every round in a Condition 5 location, but the Drop Zone suggests players have hazard suits that will buy them a few minutes. And then the back panel has stats for Cryosuits? Were you originally going to do this on the cold side of the planet and forgot to change the suits?

Theme: I was going to give this part marks because it seemed like the only mythology was around Markham's "legendary" flight. But I twigged at the last minute that "Ikkari" is probably a reference to Icarus. Might be better to just be overt and call it the Icarus.

Layout: It looks clean, but there are some things that appear twice and probably don't need to.  The Sun Gremlin stats also appear in two places, as do the rules for attaching cables to the hardpoints. Probably don't need to put the goals in two different places either (even though they're redacted in one of those places). Finally, I think it's pretty important to have the map and the location descriptions on the same side of the page if at all possible, as flipping back and forth constantly is going to be a pain.

Utility: Could be turned into a 5/5 easily post-jam if you address the map issue and clarify what kind of protection the players have and what, if anything, triggers heat levels to increase.

Favorability: Conceptually, easily one of my favorites of the jam so far. I get the sense that most of the issues I have with it are probably related to running out of time and rushing at the end? Anyway, love it, full marks for favorability, and hope you'll tighten the screws after the jam.

Great design and very cool mechanics. I like the ticking clock and effects of heat. I'm assuming the ancient myth is gremlins, right? They're a fun way to raise the stakes. 

Presentation is good but it's dense and I was lost a couple of times. Since the module conditions key and map is on a different page than the descriptions, I was having to flip back and forth to try to piece things together. I also forgot that the numbers in diamonds were for module conditions and not for the map locations. Maybe it would help if they were a different color?

Does the blue Special Rules header mean that the rest of the headers on that panel are part of it? Maybe Module Conditions and Installing Cables etc could be smaller subheaders to make that clearer. 

It's jam-packed with gameplay. I think this would be a blast to run.

On theme: I read a lot more Prometheus in the sense of scientific advancement and self-sacrifice than Icarus overall, but I think it's a novel angle if maaaaybe a bit too 'historical' than 'mythological'?

That said, everything content-wise rips very hard! Supremely readable layout, the map pops, I love the Condition keying and the time pressure/choice to save the ship or the crew. I also think the sun gremlins are an excellently chaotic wild card!  I'd potentially recommend futzing with the placement of the one NPC's portrait that overlaps the inside fold line, and consider moving the map to the outside-left panel so the Warden doesn't need to flip the pamphlet over back and forth to read the map and the room descriptions! Huge wins overall, would have a blast running this!