Thanks for the feedback! We didn't want this to be too prescriptive so things like the timeline are certainly flexible. I also wanna add that while Alien(s) is definitely a touchpoint for MoSh, it's not really a touchpoint for this particular scenario: the sun gremlins are an environmental layer to an already distressed environment, more than they are a big bad roaming around the crashed ship. The Pod Coordinates show its location is in Close Range to the ship; a Captain goes down with her ship; and I disagree, the where/why the crew is not on the ship leaves it open for Markham/warden to explain (maybe it was a miscommunication/comms issue and they left before she could make it, maybe not all the crew made it on to the pod, the emergency landing was especially terrible for anyone in Engineering (2), etc). The revised version tightens up some of your other points.