Hey! We played your game on Twitch yesterday. I'm always glad to see narrative games in jams, it is too under-represented :'(
Great entry! I particularly like how each part feels disconnected with its own graphical style while still being part of the same story. IMHO it is well written. Even though some parts of the dialogues feel a bit academic, you obviously understand how to set a tone.
The fact the game kicks you back into the title screen at the end of each chapter is weird. Maybe you can find a different way of presenting the overarching story.
If there were some kind dōjinshi scene at the time, I'm pretty sure this could've been the kind of game we would've had. And it would've been quite cool.
Keep up the good work!