That is such a great story! Nuking the soviets turn one is a bold move for sure.
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Ben, you’ve done a fantastic job bringing Constance's world to life. The way you’ve tied her backstory into the narrative really adds depth to her character, and the ending was as grim and fitting as it gets. There’s some room for tightening up the pacing, but overall, you’ve created a gripping tale that stays true to the grimdark essence. Keep pushing those boundaries—this is solid work!
Hey dude! You've crafted a gripping and intense story that really captures the harsh reality of a grimdark future. I loved the psychological depth you gave to Darad and the way you portrayed the punishment battalion's dire situation. The tension was palpable, and the twist with Myles was heartbreaking. With just a bit more polish on the transitions, this story would shine even brighter. Keep up the great work—your knack for storytelling is clear!
Fred you’ve crafted an engaging and intense story with "Perseverance"! The pacing kept me on the edge of my seat, and I loved how you captured the sudden shift in leadership and the grim determination of the characters. While the setting and plot hit familiar notes, you brought them to life with vivid detail and strong dialogue.
Keep pushing those boundaries, and I’m sure your next piece will be even more impactful! Keep up the great work!
Hey Silver Wargaming!
You've got a thrilling concept here with some intense action scenes that really capture the grimdark atmosphere. The idea of a hive mind and a space bug hunt is always a fun ride, and you nailed the chaotic energy of a boarding assault. To take this story to the next level, try to focus a bit more on the flow between scenes to make it easier for readers to follow the action.
Also, a little more emphasis on the theme throughout the story could help drive home that feeling of things going off the rails. Keep up the great work—you're on the right track!
You’ve done a fantastic job of creating a compelling and immersive story! The dynamic between Novis and Elara, especially with the twist at the end, really pulled me in. I love how you managed to blend the scientific and the divine in a way that feels natural to the setting. Keep up the great work—I’m excited to see more of your writing in the future!
You've got a cool idea here, and I really liked the twist with the Ratmen showing up unexpectedly. It’s a neat way to throw a wrench in the works, and it definitely fits the theme. Some of the action was a bit tricky to follow, though—maybe just slow down a bit and let the scenes breathe. You've got something solid here, and with a little more polish, it could be even better. Keep at it!
It would be a good idea if the Human Inquisition put together some standard operating procedures for the proper sealing of lexidaemons. I think the "banana banana banana" protocol is a great recommendation. Maybe some guidelines about not taking notes from daemons and putting them in your journal as well.
Your story blends traditional high fantasy elements with a darker twist, making it an interesting read. The grim implications of the exploitation of the Wood Elf added a nice layer of complexity. The ending, though, felt a bit rushed and left me wanting a clearer resolution. Great job weaving in the themes!