I think this is really good. I agree with others that less text on each screen would be better. It's not the amount of reading that bothers me (I love to read, and read quite fast), but it just doesn't flow very well to stop and scroll in something like this. 

Didn't expect to see something like this in this jam. Good work! Keep it up.

Really like the concept and the art.

Really interesting story, tho some nice music on the background would be better. Also it will be better if you don't have to scroll to read all the text.

I think, after the voted period, I'm going to have to update this game with some music! Challenge accepted.

The concept behind this game is great, and fresh. The artwork is amazing! I did want there to be less text on each screen, though. I also wish there were music - it could've added a whole other layer to the story.

Great game, some music or sound effects would be great, I think. At first a really nice idea, something new, but then it started to get boring.

Good job and keep up the good work! :D

Clever adaptation. Gorgeous art.

I would have preferred if there could be a bit more branching in the paths. Granted that there is one end, but there might have been more ways to get there.

Interesting game!

Fun, this is the only text game that I have not just skipped to the end:)

Nice style! Great to see that someone else also implemented choices in their game! Keep it up!

nice story  and worked on pictures . i didn't know twine. I am artist too. keep the good work

not bad, very beautiful. it's a pity there is no music for full immersion