Is there something you liked?
Let me know what you think! Is there something you're hoping to see?
I might just include it...~
really like how this is going!! honestly a pretty unique VN in its structure and presentation, and i really like the in-universe explanation for the focus on chubbier people. feels very positive and non-fetishitic in a way few games can manage. i'm also excited for the gameplay elements to be expanded, the hiring process seems intriguing and i'm interested in how the reputation systems will come into play. good good stuff, so underrated, keep it up :D
Oh goodness! That's an amazing feedback, thankyou so much for explaining, it really means the world to me!
Could you explain that first point a little bit more for me? <3 Regarding the structure and presentation, there's quite a few experiments that I had going on; and more to be seen in the future release (which is coming real soon, just finalising my uni hand-ins! <3)
Thank-you again for making my night Cyaneo. <3
glad i could make your day, haha! when i was playing i felt like the approach to the story, the way it's unfolding, isn't something i've seen a lot of in VNs! like, there are sections of focusing on the job, and sections of focusing on the characters, and that balance between the two sections makes me really interested to see more about both. it does feel experimental in that it differs from the single focus most VNs have, but i think it works really well so far for what you're making, and you're definitely pulling it off! and with the reputation system it almost feels like a ChoiceScript game with the addition of a visual element, which is really cool and something i haven't seen much of before :)
take your time with the next release, i know personally that gamedev in uni can be a pain, haha, don't overdo it!
Hello! Sorry for the late reply, my machine took a nosedive and I was out of action for a while haha!
Thankyou so much for the feedback; I can confirm I'm very much working on the project still and should be due a new patch release with a lot of stuff *very soon* so keep an eye out!
If there's stuff you were a particular fan of, I'd love to hear about it, same with any ideas of things you might want to see? Might make it into the game!
Again, thankyou- and many hugs!
-Munch
This is the first time I've reviewed a VN that's heavily focused on NSFW content, but I always like to give constructive feedback on projects where an author has put passion and effort into it.
For your first project and a demo I loved most of the writing, as it took me about an hour and a half to read the routes, interactions, and the partially hidden sections.
However, there's some spelling errors and the lack of music, which is one of the essential components to feeling the emotion of the moment in the corresponding scenarios.
But it's all appropriate for what you want to build and design in the story.
Regarding the characters, I still need to see more in future updates for them to be remarkable, but they fit the introductory function.
As for the visual novel, there's still a lot to polish, especially in the interfaces and code, as I've noticed a lot of bugs with the reputation system and the quick menu screens. I'll provide more details in the Bugs section later.
For the future plans I've read about, you'd have to first see if it's feasible to implement it within your novel, as there are certain mechanics that require more complex coding, not only using Renpy but also Python.
However, it's up to you as a developer whether you want to do it or seek help with that.
Great work, Munch!
P.S. I almost forgot, but do you think you could expand your visual novel to other platforms? I know Android can be very difficult to export, and you can do it later, but when it comes to Mac or Linux, it's easy to do since it uses the same process as the PC version.
This way, you can make your visual novel accessible to a wider audience without relying on just one platform.
Hello! Thankyou for many things, including thankyou for letting me be your first NSFW focused VN. <3
Yes! The lack of music is very much a big thing, originally I was looking at producing my own (albeit amateur) slow music; thinking about jazz vibes, soft synths that sort of agenda. At this point, I'm potentially looking at commissioning a freelancer to help make some tracks. I'd love to make it where each character has their own theme for casual moments one on one.
The bugs is a very good thing to know about; I've not heard too much on that front so that's a huge thing to learn, thank-you! Things like the reputation screens and the likes, I do plan to overhaul at some point. I started the project when I was very much new to coding, especially Python (This actually made me pursue changing it to my specialisation in university!) So in theory, most of the stuff in Future plans looks to be feasible. Currently, I've been looking at creating a little stripclub minigame within it that would require full python framework and that's a whole thing, think like Yakuza 0's club management system. Though, this is much more down the line once the game has received a lot more story based content. I do think I'd probably need another pair of eyes who does coding to look over it, limit test the code and help me as my specialisation went down more the 3D asset pipeline versus the coding production side (but looking to make that my masters.)
Regarding expanded platforms, the original release of VIP actually did include Linux/Mac too; but there was that wave where things were flagging up as a virus and it was something to do with Ren'py at the time, but removing that and changing a couple of things eliminated the false positive back then- Curiously though, I dont think I actually had any MAC/Linux users for the previous one. I wonder if i can check the statistics on that front. (I've had about 600-700 downloads currently, that much I know!)
Thankyou though again for all the feedback, that was really nice to read through and there was a lot of really good constructive critique there- I really appreciated reading this. :)
All the best! (And all the hugs too!)
-Munch.
I honestly am loving what's happening so far.
The character progression is def. there, you can already see the growth from the MC as few days go by. How you gave us CGs is top-tier even though they are still WIP! I love exploring different options and testing what the game had to offer, horny/flirty/respect reputation is a fun mechanic to keep track of. I am looking forward to your next update already!
The only con if i had to give one is some dialogues did feel too stiff and long like that exchange between Duke and MC. It doesn't feel very casual and felt too "wordy".
Thankyou so much for the feedback. It was really nice to read through and definitely lets me know that I'm walking the right direction so far, phew!
I definitely intend to expand on the growth of the MC twofold, im currently designing a system where it should inform the game if you're like a top/switch/bottom and if you lean dom/sub (that way you can get like, service top, powerbottom, domtop, etc) and that can potentially reflect in the dialogue or actions the MC might take.
CG roles, (if/when the prompt is given) will always be flexible to pick so if someone whos normally a bottom decides "nah i wanna pound!" They can. :3c
I do agree that the dialogue does feel stiff in areas, funnily enough- that Duke dialogue qas one that i was looking at rehashing. I do think theres a character coming who's much more fitting for that kind of exchange- so I might move that bit to a different branch (who for them, business IS pleasure) and their ambience/attitudes rubs off on the MC somewhat. (I'd love to have it where each route romance, reflects in the club through the MC somewhat) but yeah, that part of the script was very early into development a couple if years ago, coming back to it- I have some, changes to reflect. <3
By all means, open invitation as well- if theres ever anything you wanna see/do in the game, let me know! Good chance it'll end up in there. ( Be that say like an Archie x Seb, or a MC x Calder or even like a stripclub theme, as theres gonna be themed clubnights ;) )
Thanks again for the feedback, hope the game keeps satisfying!
All the best, and all the hugs!
-Munch.
So I've recently found this vn and I'm liking it so far. Archie and the Boss are my favorites so far.
A few hiccups to point out though:
the save menu background is a bit much. the bright pink is blinding
The name text box could be changed? Names like Duke's couldn't be read.
Minor spelling errors here and there, but overall I liked what I saw and am interested in what happens next :D
Hello! Thankyou for your feedback- this is really helpful, and glad to hear you're enjoying it so far- a new patch should be rolling round soon too!
If it's not too much of a bother may I ask, regarding the legibility of the name text box- what made it difficult to see certain names? Was it perhaps that certain names were too bright or saturated- or were they too dark? (More or less, is there a particular adjustment you feel would make a general improvement on that field?)
Thankyou again, it's a pleasure to hear your thoughts. <3
So only Duke's was illegible. The combination of his name and the text box made it hard to see. I might have to replay it again but I believe it was when you first meet the trio in the street? His name was unable to be seen.
Happy to hear more progress is on the way. Looking forward to more :)
P.S. Forgot to mention about Archie's WIP screen. Now this is just me, but the bright tone hurts to look at sometimes. Might be too bright? Very noticeable playing in the dark
PSS. More boss flirting time please. hehe
Gotcha! I had a look; I think the issue might've been that Dukes headshot in the textbox actually covers his name slightly and that's a bit of an adjustment I need to make for sure- I've got that in my amend log, so I'll get to that soonish. <3
~Archie's WIP screen- as in the loading one? :D I'm wondering if I can maybe make a nightmode or a brightness adjustment slider... Thanks for giving me something to look into! <3
Boss flirting time is definitely coming, I do fully intend for Boss to have fully romancable path(s). ;3c
P.S. If you're interested, and I'm not being slow on this-- there's a public discord! I tend to slide quite a bit in the way of updates and the likes, but I'm pretty easy to reach there too. <3
https://discord.com/invite/tfUZSSMxNn
All the hugs!
I been playing visual novels since forever and i been playing gay furry vn for more time that i liked to admite and DUDE, this vn is already top 2 of my personal favorites. Everthing, the visuals, the texts, the vibe, everthing is so lewd and sexy in a way I never see before, i got rock hard from top to bottom of this experiencie, definily will keep following the updates.
Here's a small list of things that I loved:
Duke is my favorite by body type, very sexy and cute, the way he dresses all pink gives so ''fuck me'' vibes
Boss is my favorite in personality. He going to perv to business man its a charm so cool, def want to see more of him, in a bottom position, if possible,
Seb is my favorite in vibes, idk how to describe, but he's like so expansive and a annoying that makes a buildup of making he a whore bitch in the bed.
Here's a list of things that i hope to see in a future:
Stimuli from others senses, i want to know the texture, the aroma, the tempeture. Not just ''his tight wet hole'' or ''his masculine musky''. I want to know if the expensive cologne of Boss is woody with a hint of leather, If the shampoo that Seb used earlier in his bath was sweety or neutral. When i touch Duke hair i want to know if he brushed himself for the date. I want to know if Archie's voice gets higher or lower when he gets angry. This type of descripition gives so much imersion on the story, reallly want to see smth like this.
Everyone bottoming, pls
That's it, I absolutely loved your game, keep going, you got hands. stay safe. <3