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Thanks for the read! Trying to get Grace and Redmond's relationship right was a little tough, but feels good for what I have. The ending is supposed to be hopeful, and I am glad that came through for you. 

What Purrka was thinking while writing this: I'm so meta, even this acronym. 

In all seriousness this one kinda flew over my head entirely. It is going to feel weird saying I didn't like this and have that feel like a meaningful addition to how this is viewed. It might be down to my lack of understanding of the material/works that inspired it, or maybe the translation at times not vibing with me. This just feels impenetrable in away that doesn't feel like its the fault of the work itself. I do suggest it since this is rather unique and those more familiar with what the team is trying to do will get more out of it than I.

-Cheers!

Glad I caught this on stream! Not much going on here admittedly, but it has a beginning, middle, end, and an arc for our main protagonist that is fully realized. It does well to explore it's primary concept and uses it as pretext to explore relationships. Liked what sexy stuff there is, which is rare in most VNs for me. So nice job on that!

Really liked this! It felt like an internet creepypasta coupled with a Furry Visual Novel. Sound was on point, and the background held such a vibe that was both informative and artistic at the same time. I am looking forward to how this one shapes up and shapes out.

Insightful as always, Fuze. The story went through a lot of iterations and the intentions could be more clear. I think the basic structure is where I want it, but some bits I plan to edit. While we don't find out what happens to Redmond with his final decision, I just wanted that choice to be the lynch pin. Like 2nd shift, the final choice is always going to be the more interesting part for me, rather than what happens from that.

Overall satisfied with what I have but know things could always be tighter. Glad the vague paranormal bits blended well enough into the background and vibe that they don't detract from the piece (unless they did). Learned that from last time. Cohesiveness under time constraints seems to be my biggest weakness. Things just change so much direction-wise during the creative process! 

Thanks for the read! Nice to have 

Thanks for the read! This one went through a lot of changes as the Jam went on. The original pitch focused much more on the Interchange, but adding a story as to why the MC was waiting was the better angle. I've been obsessed with the real life location the photos are from for a bit now. Digging down as to why I liked the space so much was fun to work through.

Adding my two cents for what its worth. I liked this. I really did. Having just gotten done with my first con at MFF and feeling a level of disappointment towards it, I related to swift. Not in the same way, but still. The pain of isolation, and feeling like you are missing out on something connected to the human (and furry) experience if potent here. 

I think this entry has a lot to say, but doesn't have any final thoughts or conclusions to make when it comes time to. Its is a collection of events that does leads our MC in a worse state, but with nothing learned. The bleakness is fine, but I never got a clear sense from the text on why Swift was unfit or didn't belong within that space (The narrative certainly thinks he doesn't). The team definitely has something here. I want to be clear on that. Needs more expansion and a clear decision on what the want the message to be. 

That makes more sense. My first run through I assumed the score was how the "date" was going and not Saul's internal perception.

Well, it is official. I may be "chopped" (nothing new here), I am for sure not "Unc". I see, for the most part, where the vibe, and tone of this VN wants to go, and applaud the author for leaning into it. Fresh blood for the VN gods and all.  At times though the more meme/slang humor does bite itself in the ass and detracts from the overall work rather than capture the young adult spirit of the world. There are some issues with establishing facts or even really knowing what parts are important or will be important. I did very much get swept up in this brief look into a young adult adventure with great music. I am a sucker for Midwest Emo, after all. I just think this work needs some idea bounced off others and refined before too soon.

Well, it is official. I may be "chopped" (nothing new here), I am for sure not "Unc". I see, for the most part, where the vibe, and tone of this VN wants to go, and applaud the author for leaning into it. Fresh blood for the VN gods and all.  At times though the more meme/slang humor does bite itself in the ass and detracts from the overall work rather than capture the young adult spirit of the world. There are some issues with establishing facts or even really knowing what parts are important or will be important. I did very much get swept up in this brief look into a young adult adventure with great music. I am a sucker for Midwest Emo, after all. I just think this work needs some idea bounced off others and refined before too soon.

I got a lot of thoughts. Since this seems like it's just an opening to a much larger story not a lot of the overall themes and broader ideas are really discussed on in any meaningful way. That being said there is a certain level of charm to the premise and art that made me enjoy it and keep reading. As someone (among others in this community) enjoys the idea of being some kind of animal person, I was hooked upon this exploration of what that change would en-"tail". The tail-penis joke actually got me. I can see where this is going with the metaphor to a degree, but hope it will say something more nuanced than where I think it is headed. I do feel like there is something there to someone being turned into an animal person and enjoying that and exploring why that disconnect is there. I think you have something here, but you need a bit more time to work on the metaphor.

I got a lot of thoughts. Since this seems like it's just an opening to a much larger story not a lot of the overall themes and broader ideas are really discussed on in any meaningful way. That being said there is a certain level of charm to the premise and art that made me enjoy it and keep reading. As someone (among others in this community) who enjoys the idea of being some kind of animal person, I was hooked upon this exploration of what that change would en-"tail". The tail-penis joke actually got me. I can see where this is going with the metaphor to a degree, but hope it will say something more nuanced than where I think it is headed. I do feel like there is something there to someone being turned into an animal person and enjoying that and exploring why that disconnect is there. I think you have something here, but you need a bit more time to work on the metaphor.

Damn, there is a lot packed in here! Overall, a silly tale of one ape man's journey to find a partner. The animation used in the engine and sfx help augment the jokes and light tone of the VN excellently. The mid-way point challenges were fun and on a second run through (I forgot the answers during my playtest) were just as fun. There are a few more surprises in store here for those who complete the game. Art is on point, and the sprites look VERY good. A fun juant and worth your time if hunky deer men, or beefy ape men are up your alley

Damn, there is a lot packed in here! Overall, a silly tale of one ape man's journey to find a partner. The animation used in the engine and sfx help augment the jokes and light tone of the VN excellently. The mid-way point challenges were fun and on a second run through (I forgot the answers during my playtest) were just as fun. There are a few more surprises in store here for those who complete the game. Art is on point, and the sprites look VERY good. A fun juant and worth your time if hunky deer men, or beefy ape men are up your alley.

Makes total sense. I was ripping my hair out to get everything done for our team's project too. This Jams are tough to do, and not for the faint of heart!

Solid entry and polished to all hell. Finding this and your accompanying work is a huge surprise since I thought I was the only one with the genius idea of setting a FVN in a National Park. This definitely felt like a small peek into a larger world that I wish I knew more about. Art style and writing set the tone in a great way and was charmed by it usage of anime references. Voice acting struck that nice place of being used, but also not overly so. Having small stock lines to use was genuis and made the entire production feel so much larger than a 1 month project. You can tell the team had a lot of fun here.

HOLY SHIT! SOMEONE IS MAKING A VN WITH NATIONAL PARKS IN THEM?!?!

THIS IS MY NEXT READ!

Glad I pushed you to make this! Your art work and mood developed with it is fantastic. All of the visual short-hand works well to keep with the narration. There more I look the more little details I find. Did you all notice the pass due letter in the main living room? I, thankfully,  forgot what [redacted] looked like from early previews and it was incredible to see [redacted] in the all their horrible glory. Though it had changed a lot from its original pitch, I did like this little romp through horror tropes, cliches, and the like. What more can I say? Grab a bag of popcorn and enjoy, Channel 8.

p.s. You don't need to read Channels 1-7 to understand this one!

I have had some time to think on this one! I think we did a need a few more details on some aspects of the story. Not things that needed to be extensively detailed, but less gestured at if that makes sense. Overall I much more grappled with the b-plot of the MC thinking on their absolutely abysmal mental state and the prose's gesturing towards the MC being that one this game's tagline is talking about. Its a bleak existence for both, and few more details on both character's backstory/background could help make more sense of things. The very very last bit felt a little too abstract and non-committal, but I could easily be misreading it. Once I started focusing more attention on MC I think I got a lot more out of this one.  Art direction is solid and on point.  Check this one out, folks!

This one felt good. I liked the concept a lot once we got into the groove of it and everything was laid out. It felt a bit strange that choice "docked" you points even if they were benign choices (The food selection one being of them). It was hard to understand which ones would lead to not great outcomes at times. I guess I never got the handle on Saul being exceptionally bad at socializing, and just picked safer options instead of using my own lived experience as guidelines. A constraint when you are making choices as a wholly different person from yourself. I did end up refusing to use the coin, and only once did it to test out the mechanic. Glad the narrative vindicated my refusal in the end. A lot of solid choices that all blend well together. I am going to enjoy digging into the guts of this game for ideas and just exactly how you pulled this off.

This one felt good. I liked the concept a lot once we got into the groove of it and everything was laid out. It felt a bit strange that choice "docked" you points even if they were benign choices (The food selection one being of them). It was hard to understand which ones would lead to not great outcomes at times. I guess I never got the handle on Saul being exceptionally bad at socializing, and just picked safer options instead of using my own lived experience as guidelines. A constraint when you are making choices as a wholly different person from yourself. I did end up refusing to use the coin, and only once did it to test out the mechanic. Glad the narrative vindicated my refusal in the end. A lot of solid choices that all blend well together. I am going to enjoy digging into the guts of this game for ideas and just exactly how you pulled this off.

I actually really liked this one. I think you lost a bit towards the ends when things got abstract, but I overall great. A re-read is gonna help clear things up on this on for sure. Depression and can rob us of so much. Make us feel less than human.

I think my only fault with this VN is how short it is. I think a longer script with more room to breath and let the ideas and dialogue come out more naturally would have lended to a better story. I like a lot of what you have here. The anxious father from a trans man's perspective is great. Love it. Just needs more time to let the ideas you have on this subject to be done naturally.

A little slow at first, but that is a given with how this story is meant to play. Once we get "there" things feels better and the music does a lot of help sell that. I think this game could use some polish and a bit more time with building the metaphor, but this was gripping towards the end. Great job here. I just wish we had more context to fully understand it.

Thanks for the read! Our artist did a real bang-up job on it

Oh, hey. I wonder what this game has in store for me...

I wish I had 5k more words! I have always been interested in the idea that any future society we will build in short term will still have those unwilling to change their ideology for the better. How do we feel and navigate with the people who do want to change but struggle and those who do not.

Thanks for the read! With so much going on the bf was really sidelined. I had more in mind for him but those parts had to be cut for time constraints. He might have fit in more of an epilogue scenario, but who is to say. The caller ID photo is actually something I drew! I love Bison! 🦬 

Thanks for the read! The twists were a joy to set up and hint at early on. Glad the characters personality came through all right!

Thanks for the read! It's an ambitious story for sure.

Thanks for the read! The whole team learned a lot from the experience! Looking forward to digging into your game!

Shit lots to dig into here.

Grime gremlin: Yeah this was not as well thought out as it should have been. Admittedly my mind just kinda thought up the leaving sludge behind part and just didn't think it through. There are SEVERAL spots that if you are a janitor or are at all familiar with the equipment then you know some scenes wouldn't work or they would have some flaws. Surprised someone caught something like that from the supernatural side and not the mundane side. The idea that they are in fact doing important work here kinda slipped my mind in that yeah the thematic dissonance is there. I see that now. I could maybe make the case that IRL sanitation jobs DO infact stop societal collapse as true. If you worked in sanitation to any degree you quickly see how FUCKY it all is. Just how much trash/waste a single person makes in one day is incredible. Regardless of fighting gods or just keeping things tidy the jobs are meaningful.

Cultural differences: One of our team members is Aussie! Wanted to throw in some things for fun. Wanted to add in milk bar too, and some of the photos show Australian traffic. Just wanted some fun. The red wolf thing is just referencing the species from North Carolina. It's an endangered species. Thought it was fun. The indigenous undertones legit escaped me. Wanted a wolf breed. Picked red wolves.

Trains: Another good one. Damn. You're right. Could have smoothed that out a bit. I think I wanted my cake and eat it to there. The confusion as to the usage of that as a dog whistle versus just unknowingly repeating shit (as some white bois do) could be added.

Theme: Its true everyone did their part to progress the MC ideologically. Zane was the one doing the tangible work of inviting MC and making space for him to exist. He might not have the theory down like others do, but he lives the values. He was the one initiating things. That is where I think Zane fits into the Light angle and My Wolf angle. 

Thank you for the constructive criticism. It was a challenge building something this large and yet keeping it this small. Always happy to see books length comments. Love engagement like this! Happy trails.

I think my favorite of the Jam so far. The anguish that comes with personally destroying the one place of solace you had. 

Enjoyed the laying down of rules for the fantasy world and how those rules hinted at the overall concept the VN was working with. Then using those rules to break the MC. I appreciate that fucked up thing happened and not everything turns out happy. I especially loved the section where MC compares himself to a god and comes to the realization that any creator being should have love for his creations. Creative way to have some deconstruct harmful parts of organized religion.

No notes really. A tight script and clear messaging. The heavy parts hit heavy and all in all a devastating read.

If  I had a nickel for every time a young wolf left his home due to homophobia and was picked up by a bara gay wolf trucker I would I have two nickels. Which isn't a lot, but its weird that it happened twice.

You had me in the first half not gonna lie. The story of a wayward soul hits a little close to home, and the first half did a good job of building up the atmosphere. I was getting Echo vibes, and Americana wistfulness. I think that we lingered a bit too long on the MC kinda wandering with a lot of internal dialogue, but appreciated that aspect if not a bit overdone. The first lyrical song needed to be none lyrical. It kinda hurt the ability to read anything. 

Once we hit Cassidy things kinda take a tonal shift that obliterates the stronger first half. I enjoy sexy time don't get me wrong, but the lead into the last half could have gone a bit slower and "will they won't they" instead of just it being inevitable. The intimate moments take up so much time of the VN that much of the story feels secondary and cheapened as a result. The story of a young gay man trying to figure out shit while a mentor figure swoops in to provide support is not a BAD IDEA. Hell another entry does the same job. I think the sex they have is fine, but I wish it wasn't mostly sex lead up and sex. We don't get much resolution towards MC's goals and progression he just gets an ally.  

Music and presentation were on point for this kind of story. Envious of the song usage hoenstly.

Honestly was hoping some inter-play theme-wise between Mike and Cassidy, but we didn't really get that. Mike just feels like a character that sets up the past and nothing else thematically.

Lots of the ideas and concepts feel a little disparate and disconnected. We got such strong contemplative moments throughout, but no broader idea past "I have to keep going" which in fairness is fine, but I felt like you were on the tip of something more there.

Gonna tack on my comments to my team mates!

Loves the GBA RPG aesthetics. Brought me back to the fire emblem, FFTA, chrono trigger, etc. days. I am not sure if this Demo plans to be a filler narrative but I at least enjoyed that this chapter has a narrative arc for the MC to a degree. I think we could have gotten more expansion and definitive resolution to it, but constraints and all. 

Would have liked to see a bit more action and the contemporary language feels out of place but not bad. It isn't up its own ass with historical accuracy after all. The Italian is a fun bit. ITALIAN FURRIES!!! Truly a new era for the fandom.  I think I wanted just one more fun action scene where they used their abilities to solve some kind of problem. High marks on my end.

Thanks for the read! Tone shift and pacing seems to be a general problem. I swear I was trying to sign post those elements early on ;.; ! The Zane story needed something to bring it to a nuanced point. Otherwise his seems less redeemed or changed than he actually is. Background music is by far the biggest regret I have. I feel like I have a better handle on it now.

Also yes! COMMUNITY!!! I seeded that aspect as the team was kind of the pseudo anarchist progressive group that took matters into their hands. The transformative nature of community as a light. I tried to have the visuals match the theme too. You only see "daylight" like once or twice?

Tried to fit in as much set up as I could where I could. I worry I might have made that first "flag," a bit to obvious. But like IYKYK. Second reveal just didn't fit as much as I wanted but by the time I had made sure Zane was taken care of there was not enough space to make it feel earned.

Thanks for the read! Was quite the challenge overall.

The conclusion originally was larger and covered more of that final choice. Word and time constraints made me reconsider that. Overall the rest of the work is better off for the time well spent working on what was there. 

As a custodian I could not over look the technical aspect of the job. I felt like you needed to KNOW what the MC was dealing with. As tedium but also just how vital those jobs are to making the world operate. Unsung heroes, really.

Thanks for the read! Glad it could scratch that itch.

I appreciate the read! I wanted this may Wolf entry to be still about "my wolf", but platonic in nature. Something still deep,intimate, and burgeoning but not romantic. Forsyth 's appraisal of Zane was what I wanted to come across first and foremost for him. The entire story if expanded has the supernatural elements as more set up for the relationship between MC and Zane. I wanted the mundanity to contrast the more surreal moments. Fantasy as a tool to explore the human(furry) condition. 

Thank you! TFD's sprite work and Kai's sprite direction really bring the characters to life. The pacing and structure are weak points, but glad the mundane parts have charm. Tried my best to keep all the dialogue and stakes grounded for the heavier hitting bits. Genuinely curious which conversations had the charm vs others.

Thank you for playing and possibly rating!