Adding my two cents for what its worth. I liked this. I really did. Having just gotten done with my first con at MFF and feeling a level of disappointment towards it, I related to swift. Not in the same way, but still. The pain of isolation, and feeling like you are missing out on something connected to the human (and furry) experience if potent here.
I think this entry has a lot to say, but doesn't have any final thoughts or conclusions to make when it comes time to. Its is a collection of events that does leads our MC in a worse state, but with nothing learned. The bleakness is fine, but I never got a clear sense from the text on why Swift was unfit or didn't belong within that space (The narrative certainly thinks he doesn't). The team definitely has something here. I want to be clear on that. Needs more expansion and a clear decision on what the want the message to be.