Insightful as always, Fuze. The story went through a lot of iterations and the intentions could be more clear. I think the basic structure is where I want it, but some bits I plan to edit. While we don't find out what happens to Redmond with his final decision, I just wanted that choice to be the lynch pin. Like 2nd shift, the final choice is always going to be the more interesting part for me, rather than what happens from that.
Overall satisfied with what I have but know things could always be tighter. Glad the vague paranormal bits blended well enough into the background and vibe that they don't detract from the piece (unless they did). Learned that from last time. Cohesiveness under time constraints seems to be my biggest weakness. Things just change so much direction-wise during the creative process!
Thanks for the read! Nice to have