Thanks for the read! Tone shift and pacing seems to be a general problem. I swear I was trying to sign post those elements early on ;.; ! The Zane story needed something to bring it to a nuanced point. Otherwise his seems less redeemed or changed than he actually is. Background music is by far the biggest regret I have. I feel like I have a better handle on it now.
Also yes! COMMUNITY!!! I seeded that aspect as the team was kind of the pseudo anarchist progressive group that took matters into their hands. The transformative nature of community as a light. I tried to have the visuals match the theme too. You only see "daylight" like once or twice?