Feels like there could have been more of a build up of tension, drama-wise, prior to the system messages, to sell the impending doom more.
Play book
A Bound of Honor's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Originality | #17 | 3.211 | 3.211 |
| Adherence to the Theme | #18 | 2.895 | 2.895 |
| Enjoyment | #19 | 2.474 | 2.474 |
| Overall | #19 | 2.860 | 2.860 |
Ranked from 19 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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I love letter feel of the log, I'd love for a log that said, "Escape shuttle launched"
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The Jester CircusOverall, pretty good. A little hard to follow at some points, but it's an interesting exploration of the knights family. Also, his mentality.
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Victory For HydraFirst titan entry so stands well on its own. As for grammar the way it’s consistent in application, is it possible that this story was Google translated into a English from another language?
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OPR Writing Jam#3-Threshold of DoomLove the last stand angle, and that ending was, oof. Granted my only gripe is a bit of grammar.
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Protect the Child at all Costs.I like what you were going for, and a heroic last stand is always a powerful and moving scene. At the same time, while the framework is solid, the writing needs to be polished for grammar in order for the story to land with the full power and impact it deserves.
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The Book of Nepenthe
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