Great storytelling! Those NPCs look so gross and dangerous! I found the yellow text a little hard to read, but it is late and my old eyes are tired... Haha... A printer friendly version would be a great post-jam addition.

The labels on the map could be about 2X larger without obstructing anything, so consider making them bigger to improve readability at a glance. 

Good stuff!

"Random mysterious thing that drives most of the crew insane except the player characters" is a well-worn trope, but it does what it needs to. The Melded are my favorite part, without a doubt. That's a clever mechanic for determining HP, and the name and visuals are good. The NPC tiers seem like a design artifact from an early draft, and could probably be cut. I'd recommend swapping the stars with various numbers of points for alternate shapes for black and white printing friendliness. There is a lot of purple prose taking up space that could be better utilized, which seems to be a common theme across the submissions to this jam, but they add some nice flavor, so they get a pass here. The art and layout are good, but I can see this turning into a confused maze. The whole thing is basically "navigate a bunch of enemies to get the doors open to kill the captain and use his keycard" and I'm not really seeing the "Survive, Solve, Save" elements and this reads like a prose-heavy DOOM level more than I think it needs to. Overall, it's a fun little dungeon crawl, but I think it's missing that special something that makes it memorable. Final note, the setup does not account for players who already exist, and a quick note that any personal belongings or weapons are stored in the crew quarters or armory fixes this.

Very strong module! Excellent art and general aesthetic, fun hook, good integration of the myth. The NPCs are gnarly with the metallic implements melded into them - I also always love a bit of a ship-disaster scenario that integrates radiation, vacuum, and other environmental threats with a more straightforward horror!

My criticisms are definitely shorter strokes, but they're primarily to do with general readability:

• Is there a particular function to labelling NPCs as "Tier 1-3" when there's just one of each Tier? Seems like a place that could be condensed.
• The map keying was hard for me to read (blue/green against the grey, similar shades of of green/yellow). Each room on the map has a decent amount of space to make these potentially larger? I'd recommend much more distinct symbols just for contrast.
• How come different rooms are green and others are yellow? I feel like its to do with radiation levels but I couldn't find an explanation.
• I have to echo that the items table descriptions don't feel necessary. Some also reprint the mechanics for PSG items which is technically disallowed by our 3PP contracts. Making folks look at the PSG is far from a bad thing! Plus with the descriptions gone you'd be free to do a second column of items!
• Is the 45-minute timer mentioned in the last panel meant to be a real-world or in-game timer? Either way it feels like that countdown could be mentioned in the introduction so Wardens know to set up for it.

All that said, there are tons of positives besides! Really good direction on kicking the adventure into high-gear quickly, I think the Melded are a solid zombie-style enemy, the Demeter is a well-designed map to crawl through, and I really enjoy the variety you've got in the Friendly NPCs. High marks across the board with just a few tweaks to really bring it all home IMO! Good shit!

Great, immediate motivation and hook. I love the horror elements. This isn't really a criticism, but I would like to see them fleshed out a bit more. How do the sludge and Father of Suns relate? How does the sludge meld metal to flesh? Or rather, why are people touching so many metal things after seeing what happens? Do they become magnetic? That could be a cool explanation. Or does the voice tell them to touch metal? it may be a good idea to just drop the sun theme altogether and make the guy the Father of Iron or something metal themed. 

I really like the layout and a lot of the design. Great art. I can see what you're going for with the gradients, but I think all the different colors and the variety of methods for keying made it hard for me to identify when a color had meaning or not.

•  I think the brighter room text means there's a story item there, right? Since you already list the item, I don't think you need that. 
• Does the lighter shade of green used for the room text and one of the enemy colors in the key mean anything?
• I don't think you need the enemy tier system at all. You already have the associated symbol next to their names. You could remove the tier key at the bottom and even the lines extending from the enemy description boxes. I would even consider maybe giving all enemies the same symbol but in different colors. As it is, the symbols are hard for me to differentiate.
• Whatever symbols you do end up keeping and using, I would put every symbol in one box in a list. Having different symbols in different places makes it really hard to quickly get the information I would need as a warden.

All that said, there is a lot to like here! The design, layout, and art are great. The module itself is fun and well thought out. Overall, the biggest issue (in my opinion) is just that it's over-designed and could be pared back and streamlined to make it shine.