This is really phenomenal, I'm super impressed by the density, clarity and flavor of all the information, y'all have really pulled off something impressive. The cover art and title are sick. It immediately makes me want to pick it up and dive in. I love the way you set up everything with the story items and timeline. Everything is super useful, looks great and is well thought out.
A few small notes:
1. I was a little confused by the back and forth between using Dr. Rollo and the Scientist. It made it seem like there were two separate people but I think after reading it is just one person?
2. I too have a villain with a syringe and scalpel finger in my adventure!
3. The ancient god tomb story hook isn't doing much for me personally. I know ancient myth is the theme and you did a great job integrating it, but just for my personal taste I would probably flavor it differently if I ran it.
4. I don't think the items table is worth the space (although I laughed at the descriptions!) but if you did want to keep it I would make it so you can roll for a random item and maybe swap out some of the weapons with things more directly plot related. Some hastily ripped open radiation sickness patches or keycard with limited security access or something. Alternatively, the radiation sickness table in the Player's Survival guide is pretty puny, I think developing something that is cranking up the pressure as the adventure goes on would be fun.
5. For the star in the legend it says Tier 1 NPC (1d10) I'm reading that as how many NPCs are there, I might change it from "NPC" to "NPCs" but I'm not sure what the proper way to do that would be.
Really fantastic stuff!
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Hey, thank you for the feedback. Some clarification and points we'll look at adding in v2 after the jam:
1. Dr Rollo and the Scientist are different people (we could make this clear by naming the Captain and the Scientist). Dr Rollo is the author of an encyclopedia on known and theorized topics and peoples across Rimspace in our home game so just a nod to him. The intent here is this is an excerpt from one of his books.
2. Will check this out and rate/feedback today!
3. That's fair! It fits into a larger story from a project we are working on for Table Jam 26 (if we hit that deadline - https://itch.io/jam/table-jam-26) that we couldn't have crammed into the trifold. Fully encourage anyone picking up RADSICK to chop and change it as they see fit, at the end of the day it's all about your group having a good time.
4. The debates we have had about this table :D :D. It has come up a few times now so I think we'll take another crack at it.
5. Tier 1 NPCs should be treated as a horde so each star location the warden should roll a d10 for the number of those Tier 1 NPCs in that location. We'll see how it reads after the jam with fresh eyes, but you may be right to make it plural.
Thanks again and if you ever do run it let us know it goes!