[to the tune of 'Bad and Boujee']
My bitch is sharp and shooty, raidin' worlds with the booty
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Sharp and Shooty's itch.io pageResults
Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
Concept & Originality | #2 | 4.409 | 4.409 |
Overall | #2 | 4.364 | 4.364 |
Flow & Clarity | #3 | 4.273 | 4.273 |
Adherence to the Theme | #4 | 4.409 | 4.409 |
Ranked from 22 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
This was a very well-done story and a good look at orc culture that both honours where they came from, but reinterprets it in a new way. I like it. I greatly appreciated the straightforward but eloquent descriptions of the weapons and battles, and on balance I think I like the hint that even an orc warrior was getting overwhelmed by the sheer scale of the slaughter - it further sets your orcs apart from their origins, which can only be a good thing. I appreciate that you were trying to distinguish the orc dialect as well, although there were moments the 'old speech' snuck back in! Anyway a well-written and enjoyable piece!
Thank you! Yes, the orc dialect was tough to strike a good balance with. I originally wrote the whole thing in the stereotypical monosyllables and "me want kill" style of grammar, but it was too much. It was hard to read. So I dialed it back at the last moment and didn't have enough time to thoroughly re-edit it for consistency. Thanks for enjoying it despite the inconsistencies!
Funny, unique, stick to the theme plus Orcs, that's a win - win for me! Cool story with a nice twist! :D
*slams fist on table*
lets get the HIMYM reboot going with Orcs.
the power of words... loved this story so much, from how the title ties into it and the moodboard, amazing piece of short fiction
with orcz
Heh "...armies on the ground made big booms..." nice word-building from a different point of view
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