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Honestly my favorite read so far, everything from the characterization, descriptions, and concept are just perfect!

Loved it! Agreeing with other comments that it could've used space to breathe in parts, but that's absolutely a limit of needing to be one page. Otherwise, I enjoyed the characters and bits of humor.

Loved the flavor and concept overall! There were some small grammar issues but otherwise my only critique is that I wish we got to see the two characters meet sooner! Looking forward to more!

Ooh, loved this one! Great concept, great execution, and overall very flavorful and paced really well.

Loved the concept and flavor! However, it was difficult to follow what was happening in the story due to some grammar and wording issues. Looking forward to more of your work!

Loved it! And very happy to see Ratmen Clans get some love.

Absolutely loved this, especially how the Dwarf Guilds were presented. Copying what some others said, could have used better clarity when it came to who was speaking and when, but it wasn't difficult to figure out.

My favorite so far! Loved how the Dynasty and how Koa Jeng himself was characterized.

Absolutely loved the subversion of expectations! The characterization of the goblins, having the wizard be the "brawns" and the fighter as the "brains", all of it worked really well!

Great read! Loved the world building and the characterization of the Machine Cult and Hive Lord. Everything felt seamless and immersive. Looking forward to what you'll write next!

Great read! The twist at the end was well done, and the story overall was very descriptive and well-paced.

Loved it! Very imaginative story and the characters were done super well!

Loved it! First time I've seen a Havoc Brother protagonist, and they were really well done.

Good read! I liked the jump between perspectives from Battle Brothers to Robot Legions.

It's a good read and I like how well your characterized the protagonist! The only things that might need improvement is the flow and fixing misplaced words.

This has to be one of the best I've read so far. It was a very original take on the theme while still adhering to it.

This was very well done and you do a great job when it comes to describing the environment! I love how well you characterized the main character as well.

Definitely adheres to the theme, but I think it was a bit too straightforward in doing that. Show, don't tell! It's still a good baseline and I'm looking forward to what else you might write!

Splitting the story into three titled parts was a great choice! The story flowed really well and there was a lot of flavor in how you described the environment and events.

Nice to see some Alien Hives love! Loved the originality and how you gave a very cohesive story through "show, don't tell".

I absolutely love this story! From the humor throughout to the subversion of the theme, it was creative and your writing style enhanced it further.

First story I've read with titan lords in it and it's a real good one! The character development and descriptions were especially good.

Really like this one! Love how you integrated both "fantasy" saurians and the starhost.

Loved this one! The ending was especially good.

Loved it! The description of the change daemons and the "weapon" itself were both really creative.