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I like the premise but I think you could've trimmed the wordage down really hard; it was quite a text wall of a read for a short story

Shame about the elves tho. Pesky hippies ruining a good thing. Funny take on a classic idea and some fun imagery! 

What an absolute vibe. I wonder what happened to ole Eric. Totally in love with this down right bad ass origin story and its consequences on the daemon population.

The writing and name dropping of the theme was super stiff, but I actually love the content here. You touched on some of my favorite elements here, the Zone, interspecies interaction, interesting lore, and I loved the robot's reveal!

"God wills it" is an underrated plot device that I need to see more of in this universe!!! What a fun and exciting little adventure with a unexpected twist!

Great fun! Wonderfully readable and a genuinely surprising twist!

I don't normally stay for vampiric stories but this one was a gem. I love the premise of the lord's appreciation of his own demise! The details really put me in his kingdom and fleshed out the setting!

Wow, this is the most vivid submission I've read and it STILL manages to pack in some grand-scale world building. I was entirely immersed in the visual horror but still went back to read it a second time to appreciate the twist. I love to see the ideologies of the factions explored to their extremes! 

The quotes and some of the word flow felt really jarring but the pacing was good. I think you could've maybe tied the consequence theme to the flesh vs machine theme a little tighter, but other those, a fine battle short

Great worldbuilding addition to the core GF lore! Very well executed! 

This was a really fun take on the gallows-rescue trope! It didn't really tackle the theme head on, but honestly, I prefer the ambiguity of the crimes. 

I absolutely love how you crammed a complicated scheme and so much devilish personality into such a short story! Stories like this really show off how fun and flexible the OPR universe can be in the right hands

Thanks, that means so much!

Thank you! It made me want to write more ratman lore, just so can I see how far I can push the language haha!

I such a huge sap for this level of woodcraft! It dragged a little in the 2nd quarter and I didn't quite follow the literal events, but I'm in love with the twist and the immersion and poetic-ness of it all

I liked the initial idea with the theme, but I don't think it really came full circle. No complaints with the writing, really. Fun little shoot out with a fun wind up.

I'm not personally a big fan of the edgy elf aesthetic... But my best friend is and he would have absolutely drooled over this story.

I almost typed "this just needs some neceon tripods to complete the WotW vibes" but I had only missed it on the first read. It felt a little slow in the middle but an absolute adventure, I love this use of the theme!

Brilliant, my favorite so far! Very clean, very gripping and a great thematic cohesion!

I had trouble keeping sorted through the early parts of the fight and it felt kind of slow once the dwarf took the upper hand, but I think this is one of the better implementations of the theme Ive read so far =)

The theme felt a little shoe horned but other than that, it was a smooth, clean, enjoyable chase story

Flows well, even seeing where it's going, it's still a fun ride to the end

I loved the interrogation folding into the rest of the scene, although it was kind of hard to follow.

Under appreciated faction, love to see more world building in the less favourite factions. The build up lasted a little long but it was still a fun reveal!

I was getting ready to fall asleep for the twist but it was actually really enjoyable! I'm not personally a fan of lots of banter in a story, but it's easily readable and doesn't give much more than necessary. Well done!

I'm a SAP for poetic parade scenes, and to mix that so effortlessly into a fun battle, excellent. Really fun ride with the flow!

A great glimpse into the pride of the Grim Dark genre- the never ending cycle and the micro cultures born from war

Love your flow, very comfortable and readable! I always love to find shorts that immerse you in the eatheral-ness of psychic science!

Love your flow, very comfortable and readable! I always love to find shorts that immerse you in the eatheral-ness of psychic science!

Your writing- quality and clearity- is good but I think you spent a few more words on physical descriptions than the story's idea needed. Would've loved to see more