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Art's Ambition - OPR Writing Jam #10's itch.io pageResults
Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
Concepts & Originality | #29 | 3.803 | 3.958 |
Adherence to Theme | #57 | 2.762 | 2.875 |
Overall | #57 | 3.016 | 3.139 |
Flow & Clarity | #60 | 2.482 | 2.583 |
Ranked from 24 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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I really enjoyed this one - it's a fantastic concept and you executed it well. There are sections where you can't quite keep up with the flow you've established and the flow starts to stumble, but I respect every shot this story takes even if a few of them miss.
I particularly liked the way the daemon in the shop is depicted — this notion of the brain somehow subconsciously noticing that there's something not quite matching up between reality and perception gives the scene a fittingly uncanny atmosphere.
A very interesting piece, although style and theme are not as strong as the concept.
A very grotesque and grimdark story. you wrote imagery very well and there were many descriptions that I could almost see.
I such a huge sap for this level of woodcraft! It dragged a little in the 2nd quarter and I didn't quite follow the literal events, but I'm in love with the twist and the immersion and poetic-ness of it all
Interesting concept... Kinda hard to tell what race/faction the narrator was from. Love the first person perspective!
Tbf, I don't really feel like the narrator's species or affiliation is particularly relevant.
Struggled with some of the word flow here and there, but I like that this tale was a different take on the suffering artist and how it led down the road to the twist ending. Some good imagery and foreshadowing too.