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loved the build up. The little clues and foreshadowing sprinkled around where done very well.

He was more important in the earlier writes holding off the soldiers. But honestly I just wanted a rat character. Every story I have written has a rat character and I just really like ratmen. RATS!

great story. Your tone was done very well. Keeping the wood elf vibe throughout and contrasting it with the orc.

absolutely awesome story. It was fun it was thought provoking. It built up really well and the pay off at the end was hilarious. Banger story

Definitely a good use of the theme. Love how the title comes back at the end

RATS! I really enjoyed the way you wrote your characters their unique voices really add to the characters. 

awesome art. It is always a treat when someone does their own title image.

didn’t really work out for them huh. Good to see someone writing for ogres they don’t get enough love. Each payoff was built up well. 

RATS! Good story. That ending was a sucker punch to the feels. I enjoy you using almost generic combatants. It doesn’t matter who they are. Creates a good grimdark feel.

RATS and Machine guns. What else would you want out of a story. This story is a blast. There are lots of stories with action packed fight scenes but I think opening this story it’s alive not dead. 

The POV is awesome. It really felt like I was watching some twisted documentary. The way with words completely brings this story to another level. 

Great story really hits you in the feels in a completely different way than any other story so far has. Completely nailed the new orcs that OPR has created. 

I should have assumed a gold covered church would be the work of the God of lust. Really like how you subverted expectations. I wonder what they will do now without that necromancer.

+good job painting those HDF. It makes a story so much better knowing that it’s someone’s little dudes.

good story. I really find the first person POV hard to write but you seem to have done it pretty well. I enjoy the stream of conscience vibes going on. It makes it flow pretty well. It ended early unfortunately.

you really set the story up well. The characters were introduced well and set up. The setting was well put together.

It’s a really good investigation. Kept me on my toes good job. Didn’t realize he was a jackle. LOL. the ending was pretty funny too.

I could see this almost as an excerpt in the orc’s world book. I think you wrote the orcs well even as OPR has completely changed what they are. you meshed them well.

Super fun story. Love how it looks at a smaller part of OPR. Not every story needs to be big battles.

RATS! 

Great story. The soldiers and setting were very immersive. Good use of small details shows how much you know and makes the immersion that much better.

good use of theme. Having charbyis and Sylla as the ship names was really cool. Loved how you wove the title into the story. It was pretty fun when I finally figured it out. The sister said she served pandemonium is that the same as havoc?

MECHA AXOLOTLS

did expect their first debut to be in a fantasy story but it’s all good for our favorite amphibians

oof, that sacrifice was brutal.

That was a really fun story. The ending really tied it all together.

I enjoy when the plan goes right. It was really heartwarming.

That ending was hilarious and set up perfectly.

I really enjoy how this fits the theme. Heist gone wrong is fun and I wasn’t expecting that ending.

haven’t seen many Havoc dwarfs. I really like how you wrote them and their interaction with the orca.

wow, this was really cool. The form was a really good choice. There aren’t many stories with rebel guerullas and I think this once personified them perfectly. The story was written well enough that It could have been submitted without the last section but the last section was a good addition and helped wrap it up.

I enjoyed the chaos-orcs. They were fun. I also enjoyed how you wrote the DAO being dependent on AI and when it fails how they panic. It makes a lot of sense and is a good addition.

I loved the subtlety of the theme. The slow build up was great with the little details and foreshadow finishing with a beautiful ending. 

Could you please upload in PDF format as the rules state. Would love to read your story but can’t on mobile.

Robot destroyers aren't used often and I enjoy how you wrote them in comparison to the other parts of the robot legions.

I enjoy the characterization of the boss and how you wrote the orcs in a non-Warhammer way and how you worked in the dwarf-orc rivalry.

I enjoyed the report style to the story. At the beginning I was worried that it would get boring but I was proven wrong.

it took two readings but I love the action in this story. It was quick and brutal. I also like the characterization. Like how you showed that beledir never really trusted the dark elves.

I didn’t know a hammer could be used as a time travel device. LOL. I absolutely loved your writing style and the way that you wrote the dwarfs voice. I struggled a little differentiating between queen piper and master knight mir but I was reading quickly. You fit a lot in 1000 words and did it very well. Loved how it looked around at the end and tied up the time travel question.

It was a very fun setting. You don’t see many knights on ships. I enjoyed the addition of the angel. Naming the theme in the title and at the end of the story is somewhat taboo.