Quite deep, very enjoyable!
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Degradation (OPR Writing Jam #5)'s itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Flow & Clarity | #1 | 4.345 | 4.471 |
| Concept & Originality | #3 | 4.402 | 4.529 |
| Overall | #5 | 4.192 | 4.314 |
| Adherence to the Theme | #17 | 3.830 | 3.941 |
Ranked from 17 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
wow. that was very deep for a thousand words. i agree that i want to learn more about this knights exile.
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The Parable of Two SwordsmenGreat writing, well done! You managed to convey emotional depth in just a thousand words, which is no small feat. I found myself wanting to read more about the character's further adventure in exile. A real pleasure to read, thank you.
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Lessons of TeaI'm really impressed with this one. The idea of unconventional weaponry was not in the novelty of the method of killing, but the outlandish and heretical nature of the device that the main character leveraged. It's an unexpected twist on the theme of the competition that works so well.
A concise work, effectively written in first person. We don't even get the name of the main character, which adds to the sense that he's been stripped of his former life.
I've tried to include at least on recommendation for improvement with each story I've read. After reading this a few times, I really don't have any recommendations. Bravo on such a well-written piece!
This was a beautiful and compelling piece of writing, and I will gladly read anything further you want to write regarding this knight and his story.
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Desperate TimesGreat main character and you can almost feel his pain. A kind of sad story, where the law seems to be unadapted for ages.
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The drunkardExcellent work! I have a deep love for stories of knights, and this really hit that spot.
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Raining Fire - OPR Writing JamA nice concise tale, that flowed very well and I greatly enjoyed this tale. Makes me think this would be a great start to a longer story.
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A Mother's Vengence
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