Oh didn't see these until now, great addition! Spending time together with pinkie will have a whole different meaning later on.

Seems these S-Links are getting longer, but seems appropriate at this point since it really fleshes out her dilemma.

As for how this will continue, one thought did occur to mind. At this point twilight seems so stressed that in order to talk to her again, one needs to use bimbo magic on her. Doesn't have to change her appearance or speech pattern, but she just feels somehow more relaxed easy going. So as an idea

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S-Link 5: Twilight is not in the library, but hiding somewhere different in the school to even get away from player, tantrum ensues.

S-Link 6: A very short conversation, where she's back in the library, but doesn't want to talk (ashamed of her actions?)

At that point when meeting her again in the library, one will only get ''She won't meet your gaze, her face buried in the books'' repeated until more bimbo magic is casted.

S-Link 7: When she sees you again she apologizes, somehow feeling better and reflected upon her actions.

- From that point on the player could make the choice that changing her was wrong and proceed the game without any further changes as the mental positiveness subsides with time.

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But again just suggestions, not sure if you already have a definite story route in mind.

https://pastebin.com/SCJYU8WG

Added S-Link 5. Really liked the idea of using magic to either beef up the Player's brains, or teach Twilight to relax a little, so I tried to convey that by portraying her as high strung, while the player as not being smart enough to assist, since I've been writing options that allow the Player to skate by Charm up to this point. I figured it could be be an either-or situation, where the player could expedite the next S-Link by using the magic on her, at the cost of reducing her smarts a bit, and raising the risk of her not getting into the program as a result, or just spend a few nights/week supercharging their brain to become Twi's study buddy. Or Flash Card handler, whichever.

Either way, I thought I would lay it out there and see what people are thinking.

To start with, the Stats are: Intelligence, Fitness, Charm, Guts and Bimbo. Guts being what Courage is in Persona.

So is the idea that you go through 5 skits before you get the choice to start bimbofying in earnest? That is, you can start the process physically and make some relatively minor changes, but it caps off until you reach a decision point in skit 6, at which point the physical changes kick off and the mental ones start, too?

If so, that's a good idea. It allows even the players who decide to do a non-bimbo run to still have some sexy optional TF to spice it up a little. I guess 5 Bimbo Points would be the cutoff, with the cap rising to match your level with them from then on?

I think there should be at least 2 stats you could use to solve major problems, to sort of give the player two chances to have a high enough one to succeed. For example, if you go the "pure" route and refuse to use bimbo magic to make Twilight calm down, you can instead use Intelligence, to either reason with Twilight/help her study and make her feel like she's progressing enough that she de-stresses a little bit, or you can try to make a (perhaps slightly more difficult) Charm check to convince her that she's hurting her friends by ignoring her so that she spends some time with them and de-stresses that way (and you could have an option to flirt to trigger the "pure" romance route at this point, much like in a Persona game).

Maybe structure it so that each Social Link has one "favored stat," one that you can use to pass most (if not all) of the major decision points successfully, with the alternative being to pass slightly higher checks for 2/3 different stats throughout the Social Link. So it'll be possible to pass Twilight's SL without high Int, but only if you have at least two other high stats. That way players feel like they aren't being railroaded into grinding a particular stat to get a girl (even though they're being strongly encouraged to).

Though, to make the Good End/Bad End structure work, we might need to add a new mechanic: a unique stat for each girl that represents their progress in their personal mission, with the name changing depending on the character and their route. For Twilight on the pure route, it would be "Stress," and would measure how close Twilight is to a meltdown, and thus the goal would be to make it lower than a certain threshold by passing checks during skits (and maybe stuff like talking on the phone could do it, but by a lesser amount?). If it's too high when you reach the end of her route, Twilight collapses of exhaustion/has a breakdown and needs to be hospitalized, missing the deadline for her program and thus securing the Bad End.

Though it doesn't have to be really bad, it can be you visiting Twilight in the hospital, where she's happy to see you (especially if you romance her) but quickly gets depressed, confiding in you that it's both because of her failure with the program and because she's afraid she's pushed away all her friends, only to have them show up behind you (maybe at your signal?) to throw her a (small and quiet, this is a hospital!) party to cheer her up and show her that they still love and support her. Maybe end with Twilight happier (though still regretful about missing her opportunity with the program), getting ready to write a letter to Celestia and/or Cadance about what she's learned about friendship from all of this...

Whereas if you get her Stress low enough, the help and support of you and her friends keeps Twilight from blowing a gasket and she gets in with flying colors. Her friends throw a big party to congratulate her, and the two of you share a dance (as friends or as more, with "more" being a slow dance. Either way, make sure to mention that she dances like a total dork) where she tells you that she's lucky to have you as her friend. And if you romance her, add to the end a little bit by having her blush and whisper in your ear that she'd like to continue the party later, just the two of you...

As for the Violet Room, I kind of gave some thoughts on that (and other stuff) in the General Writing thread.

EDIT: Then again, implementing this might add too much to everyone's workload. I'd be willing to write some small stuff if anyone wants me to, but I can't code or draw for sh*t.

https://pastebin.com/vtqnC2mR

Finally got over the plague and got the next one done. It ended up being a little longer than I thought it would, but I'm pretty happy with at least the shape of it. Still going with responses favoring benefits for the player trying to be charming and self-assured, but working in the Intelligence angle as well. I don't know if it would be too much to include an option for the Player to get into the McGuffin as well as a sort of special end with Twilight, but If figured it'd be fun to play with a bit.

One thing I would add: You start every s-link with 'You decide to spend time with Twilight'. This is fine, and is where it will begin, but you could also open with customized pre-read first if you like.

For example, when you click on Twilight and are about to start S-Link 3, you get this message first:

"Twilight is hard at work in her usual place by the counter, with a pile of books on either side."
"She doesn't seem to notice you..."

Then you get to choose whether or not to spend time with her.

It's a nice way to let the player know 'hey, this isn't the default message, meaning story will happen here'.

But if you don't want to write them, they're only two sentences anyway, I don't mind knocking them out.

New S-Link for the normal Twilight

https://pastebin.com/phRsu02r

Trying not to add much to Twilight's character at this point as to just expand it out over this link and the next two, so they should be pretty straightforward and not have too many curves. I don't really have much to say other than that; I did do this pretty quickly, so it hasn't really had time to sink in. A fresh set of eyes would be good, just to make sure everything seems in order.

Addendum:

I did try to add an approach option like with what was discussed previously. Does that work?

https://pastebin.com/rWhA3VpK

Trying some new concepts, specifically the phone, so let me know how that works out, or what needs to change to make it work. Also introduced the Twilight Velvet (just going with Velvet for the sake of simplicity), with the thought of having two characters on screen at once. Don't know if that's too much or if we just want to stick to one at a time.

OK. So here's a rough idea of what the 10th S-Link might look like.

https://pastebin.com/PU0Z1Zx5

I'm not entirely sold on it yet, as we haven't really discussed how things ought to be wrapped up. So, for the time being, lets call this a work in progress and go over what's good, what's bad, and what's missing.

If it's really called for, I can swing  a party scene, but I was really saving that for the alternate, good, ending.  Anyway, thoughts are helpful at this point, because, well, we are putting a cap on the storyline, so we want it to end on a good or bittersweet note.

Here it is, the final S-Link!
https://pastebin.com/K8UC06Bp

You'll probably notice right away that it's pretty huge. I wanted to try something a little different, allowing the player to delay satisfaction, or bypass it completely, so I included an option selection at the end to give it some personal feeling. That might be a bit too much, especially locking the player out from pursuing Twilight [Option 2], so that one can be removed if necessary.

Otherwise, I'm thinking there should only be a couple intimate scenes [First time, Subsequent times, possibly alternate positions?] and that should wrap up the big component of Twilight's story, just leaving small and flavor texts, right?

So one thing that's unclear is what factor influences how exactly we trigger a good end.

Is it based on Twilight's Int or should it be about charm (to show she's spending more time with her friends) or fit (to show she's at least taking care of herself)?