Man, I love a plot of eldritch crisis in my game of chill genre

I liked the MMD renders.

I did my best to try follow the storyline but unfortunately couldn't get into it and had to stop after 10 minutes.

I think the game being completely silent also didn't help set the right mood.

I'm reading other comments here and it seems you put a lot of work into the game, which is really cool!

Congratulations on releasing your first game!

uuuu a Shiori game, I like!

Good job putting all this together!

I really like this premise for a story, the idea of dating world ending entities to save the world. 
Very "The world god only knows" like, which I see is also one of your inspiration.
This is so fitting for holoEN, since most of the talents there are far from having a normal backstory.

The MMD scenes are actually done really well! I just wish you had included some BGM, game is kinda awkwardly silent unfortunately. 

Would be cool to see this project expand into something like "Sucker for love". Good job! Thank you for making this!

I had fun, and it's impressive for a game jam.  I know how time consuming writing can be, and figuring out how to make a game as well isn't easy.  The art was nice, even for MMD, and it's always fun to see passion in a project.  

Have a bit more confidence in your work.  The writing was fun, I'd say you successfully dodged the self-insert wish-fulfillment with the debate about saving her, and I'd certainly play more of this to see how you'd handle the others.

I do recommend looking for a team next time, or if you continue this.  The Holojam Discord is full of great people who are really welcoming and encouraging, I'm sure you could find a team there.  (Note:  This is me being a hypocrite, I sent one post looking for a team late, and immediately gave up and just made my own game because that sounded easier than talking to people.)

The writing wasn't as bad as you made it out to be, even if it is a self insert
But at the same time, aren't most VNs?

I think its awesome that you put everything together in MMD and used so many expressions on the model - I haven't used MMD so I'm not 100% but I suspect it probably took a while to compile all the scenes and everything, so I think it deserves credit.

The fact that you put all this together solo within the jam timeframe is impressive, so don't hesitate to reach out to other people for the next one, more hands makes light work, after all. But good job, regardless! Hope you can come back to get in the missing images and fix any issues after the jam is done!

Shiori lap pillow ftw!

I do enjoy reading some few VNs, so I might be a bit harsh on this.

Overall, the story itself is pretty solid so that's good. However, it feels off at first, only until 1/4 did I realize there was no BGM? Or is it just me maybe? Anyways I did put my own BGM from Youtube "First Anniversary Login Menu Theme | Girls' Frontline 2: Exilium" and it does fit (Don't actually use this specific song in game lol). If there really isn't any, I would say you can take some few non-copyrighted songs from DOVA-SYNDROME and find from the top 100 playlist.

I only finished the game once, as I don't know if there are actually multiple routes here as VNs tend to have their own flowchart. Still, I would say you managed to do a great job on the story telling, I actually kinda liked it as I go further in. I can definitely feel the inspiration at first, which was The World God Only Knows, and then add in elements from Date A Live.

Respect to you also for making your own CGs using the models, although there are some few lacking as what the other comments pointed out. But still its understandable as it's a Game jam so time is short.

Interesting start but whole game feels so disconnected from Hololive.

Yeah, the world god only knows plot really shows, including the silly idea that someone can be "good" at vns. I can't say I enjoyed it, but I think the number of images was impressive for a game jam.

Finished the game, had a nice ending! But had a few missing images mentioned in Shizaru's comment. I liked how there's a lot of love put on the ending scenes. Also some parts have miss spellings and there was also a sudden language change but overall enjoyed the experience. Also not sure if at the cat cafe I'm supposed to have minus 10 points on all the options but eh, can't be successful in all VNs