Felt like the MC is literally ainz from overlord in terms of improvising xD Me like!
Really funny and nice story definetly! Full Halu Energy there!
(Also there are 3 Scenes which dont have pictures for. Idk if you havent done them yet or if there are other issues but its better to point them out in case you forgot)
Music/Ambience/SFX would have done a lot in this but being solo i can understand the time constraint behind it.
Though good work on the writing! its not as bad as you said xD Have confidence! The Server is a really nice place!