Hmm, I was hoping to gather all my thoughts together and drop them all in one mega comment, but, hooh, school is probably going to gank me soon, so, I thought, what the hell might as well put what I have so far.
Unimportant comments:
1. BAHAHAHA OH MY GOD THERE’S A BASKET SUICIDE ENDING NOW THIS IS PEAK, welp I have to play the game while actually considering resource management now.
2. Also bro the sfx options are actually killing me lmao they’re so silly
3. Red in the pause menu looks like someone killed her dog or something, like damn girl what happened.
Anyways, so, some bugs I've seen in the gameplay, or just, minorly irritating things that I want to report lol. (Everything I say from here out is applying to the playable teaser. Or, rather, “Payable” teaser :P)
1. This is my first time playing with sound, so idk if this is an issue with the demo as well, but voice lines seem incredibly quiet in comparison to the rest of the game's sounds.
2. I entered the witch's house mirror, exited, then tried to go back into the mirror, but it doesn't work after leaving it. Even after unlocking the rest spot mirror, it doesn’t work.
3. The Forgotten’s sprite ninja vanishes when I talk to her from behind her.
4. Is Red supposed to have the press B phase shift that Alice has? Ah, I'm late to the chase, this has already been mentioned. Well, it can go through the locked mine gate … yeah she probably should not have this lol.
5. Why doesn’t Scan work? Is Red stupid? Lol. Actually though, I spammed Scan on the imp and slimes and it doesn't seem to do anything?
6. I have no idea when, but at some point between the Rest Spot and returning to the mirror world through the Merchant Village mirror, my memory fragments suddenly up and vanished, and I didn’t die to the Imp. It probably has something to do with how I spam reloads a lot? Idk what happened, honestly.
7. Sometimes, only, like, some of the center of the screen visually loads, and the rest just doesn’t? I have no idea why, exactly, sorry. Alt tabbing and going into menu seems to fix it. I only really noticed it in the mirror place.
8. The skip button not turning off after a dialogue choice is kind of a bruh moment. I speedrun to the option I didn't pick last time and then speedrun right past the new dialogue. The log does exist, but it's a lil irritating.
9. Speaking of things that are a lil irritating, is there a way to make it so that you can exit the prayer screen by just pressing x or escape? I always forget that you have to try to learn a skill to get access to the exit button.
- Aaaaand now for the main body of this comment! Prepare for a monstrous amount of grammar complaints and other small nitpicks, now that I'm going through everything again I'm locked in on this. And when I say monstrous, I mean it lol. This will be LONG.
- If a human can embody "nerd emoji" "pointing hand", that's me right now.
1. In the properties tab, Red's curse is said to be Partial Ressurection, which seems to be a misspelling of Partial Resurrection.
2. In Bestiary Vol. 1, when it says "In particular you're drawn to passages detailing Slime", there should be a comma between "particular" and "you're".
Also, when it says “Slime’s are often found in the wild areas of Wonderland”, “Slime’s” should be “slimes”. When it says “they breed an an exceptional pace”, the first “an” should be “at”.
When it says “However when in large numbers”, there should be a comma between “However” and “when”.
“Well those are another story entirely” is a bit of a confusing way to word things, since it’s a bit unclear if ‘those’ includes when slimes are in large numbers; “Well, those cases” is more clear.
In “Their bodies are surprisingly resiliant when matured”, “resiliant” should be spelled as “resilient”.
When it says “Fortunately these spores” and “Though they can cause”, there should be a comma between “Fortunately” and “these”, and a comma between “Though” and “they”.
There seems to be 2 spaces between “poisoning.” and “It’s”? (Hmm, looking into this 2 spaces thing more, it
With “they have a number of exploitative weaknesses”, “exploitable” seems like it would fit better than “exploitative”.
When it says “can severely cripple it’s tentacles”, “it’s” should be “its”.
When it says “They don’t often travel in packs but”, there should be a comma between “packs” and “but”.
When it says “On the bright side however”, there should be a comma between “side” and “however”.
With “You will be covered in spores and left beaten, making you easy prey for other creatures though, so it’s not much of a blessing”, it seems like the sentence would flow better if “though” was moved to the start, giving “Though, you will be covered in spores and left beaten [...]”.
When it says “Still if you can manage to survive, there are certaintly worse fates”, there should be a comma between “Still” and “if”, and “certaintly” should be “certainly”.
3. For the bookcase inspection dialogue for the bookcase in the room Red wakes up with, to the left of the bookcase with the Bestiary, when it says “books about magic and creatures”, there seems to be 2 spaces between “and” and “creatures”.
For the book titles, “Werewolves of legend”, legend isn’t capitalized, and “BDSM and other kinks”, other isn’t capitalized. I assume they should be, given that “Vessels and Souls” is all capitalized.
For Werewolves of Legend, when it says “perhaps the most crucial of weakness”, “weakness” should be “weaknesses”. “The inability for them to cross over bodies of water” is a somewhat unnaturally long way to word it, “their inability to cross bodies of water” is a more concise way to convey the same point.
For The Art of Necromancy, “you can’t stomach to read any more of this” is a bit of a grammatically odd way to put it, I feel like “you can’t stomach reading any more of this” or “you can’t stomach reading more of this” would be cleaner.
For BDSM and Other Kinks, hey wait a second where’s the text. Lol.
4. For the witch hat inspection dialogue, when it says “a hat that a Witch would wear. Great” there seems to be a whole tab between “Great” and the period before it, instead of just a space
5. For the witch letter inspection dialogue, when it says “I left you a present downstairs. I’ll”, there seems to be 2 spaces between “I’ll” and the period before it.
6. With the door inspection dialogue in the hallway of the witch's house, there seems to be 2 spaces between "However" and the period before it. There also seems to be 2 spaces between "or" and "hinges". Also, there should be a comma after "However".
7. With the moving broom inspection dialogue, there seems to be 2 spaces between “I’m” and “ready”.
8. In the Objects and Environment tutorial when you first enter the room in the witch's house with the mirror, Environment before the colon is misspelled as Enviornment. Also, in "Interact with these spots", there seems to be 2 spaces between "Interact" and "with".
9. In the bookshelf inspection dialogue in the same room, it says "the girls mother stitched it back together", girls should be girl's.
10. In the book tower inspection dialogue in the same room, with it saying "Was there simply no place for them, or was the owner in the midst of research you wonder?" It's kind of an awkward way to word it, and if you shift "you wonder" to be at the start, to give "You wonder, was there simply no place for them, or was the owner in the midst of research?", it would be more grammatically correct.
11. In the cup of tea inspection dialogue in the same room, when it says “A cup of tea is half full. It seems” there’s 2 spaces between “It” and the period before it.
12. The first time you interact with the witch's house mirror, when it says "It doesn't seem to", there are 2 spaces between "It" and the period before that word.
13. In the forgotten and red's first conversation, when the forgotten says "I will restore it's memory" and Red asks "restore it's memory?" it's should be its.
Also, Red seems to say in her voiceline "restore a memory" instead of "restore its memory".
14. In the forgotten's lines for About Relics, when she says "One full of happiness? Or one full of saddnes?", "sadness" is misspelled as "saddnes", and when she says "That inate power tends to attract powerful beasts," "innate" is misspelled as "inate".
15. In the forgotten's lines for What is this place?, when she says "And your accomplishments. They are all preserved here." It seems like there's 2 spaces between They and the period after accomplishments?
16. In the forgotten's lines for About Memory Crystals, it seems like when she says "I will gladly watch your memories to improve my understanding", there are 2 spaces between "my" and "understanding"?
17. In the forgotten's lines for About Lust, when she says "if there's items or skills that peak your interest", the proper word is pique, not peak.
18. In the relics tutorial, when it says "they are often guarded by a hoarde of monsters or a rare powerful monster", it should either be hoard (though, probably not what you mean) or horde of monsters. Also, when it says "Claim your relic and being it to the top left room to view it's memory", it should be its, not it's.
19. In the Statue of Eros tutorial, with "specialize in immobilizing enemies", there's 2 spaces between in and immobilizing.
20. In the SP tutorial, there should be a comma before "or SP", and after "making choices", also I think "generates" should be "generate", memory unsure on this one though.
21. In the prayer to Eros scene, "Red kneeled in front of the statue of the Lust Goddes", Goddes should be Goddess. Also, I think there are 2 spaces between "And" and the period after "Maiden". Also also, "like a lovers embrace", lovers should be lover's.
22. When going to the Witch's House using the mirror, it says "You can see the witches house reflected in the mirror" instead of "witch's house".
23. Initial encounter with the witch, "Outside of the myserious house", myserious should be mysterious.
With "not what one would normally expect of a Witch", there's 2 spaces between "would" and "normally".
"welcome back to the land of the living Red", there should be a comma between living and Red.
"You have ... unfinished business after all", there should be a comma between business and after.
In the log, after choosing "Nod", the next 2 lines clip out of the log box.
"I won't make them too hard I promise", there should be a comma between hard and I.
With how the line is said, I don't think there should be a comma in "All you have to do, is make it to the other side of the Forest" but that's subjective I guess.
"you're no longer in the world that you're used to", 2 spaces between "no" and "longer".
"Welcome to Wonderland Red", there should be a comma before Red.
"This is just a ... precaution so to speak", should be a comma between precaution and so.
"Only if you can't complete your task dear!", should be a comma between task and dear.
"the spell will wear off", 2 spaces between "will" and "wear", and with "once that sun rises", 2 spaces between "sun" and "rises".
"But see that's where that basket comes into play", should have a comma between see and that's.
"Once opened it'll cast a new spell on you", should have a comma between opened and it'll.
With "keeping you alive and well", there's 2 spaces between "alive" and "and".
Then again with "I don't get it", with 2 spaces between "get" and "it", and "what's stopping me from just opening this basket right here and now", with 2 spaces between "right" and "here".
Also, in "what's stopping me from just opening this basket right here and now", in the voiceline, I think Red says "the basket" instead of "this basket"?
"There's no cheating Red", should have a comma between cheating and Red, also the comma actually kinda matters here.
"anyone other than Grandma", 2 spaces between "than" and "Grandma", and "don't go trying anything stupid", 2 spaces between "go" and "trying". Also, there's 2 spaces between "So" and the period after "it".
When Red says "No point ignoring you and risking dying again", it seems like the voiceline says "if I'll just end up dying again" instead of "and risking dying again".
Also, spacing error returns for "no point ignoring you" with 2 spaces between "point" and "ignoring". Also also, there's 2 spaces after "Haaah", 2 spaces between "I'll" and the period after "it", and 2 spaces after "task".
With "you can use this Pocket Watch to keep track of the time", there are 2 spaces after "time".
"I've given you some gifts to help make your journey easier", there are 2 spaces after "your".
With "try not to wander off the marked path would you", 2 spaces between "path" and "would", "so the monsters in there", 2 spaces before "so", and "I doubt you'd survive", 2 spaces between "doubt" and "you'd".
With "but there'll come a point", 2 spaces between "but" and "there'll", "no choice but to do as", 2 spaces between "do" and "as", "win them over to your side", 2 spaces between "them" and "over". Also, there are two spaces between "So" and the period after "they say".
"One last thing before you head off dear", should have a comma between off and dear.
"inform them of your situation, or your destination", there are two spaces before destination.
"If it means I can get back at that f+cking Wolf, then all the better", 2 spaces between all and the.
24. In the time tutorial, in "Time however does not move on it's own", there should be a comma before and after however, and it's should be its. "Instead it moves as you progress", should have a comma between instead and it. "forge experiences and bonds with those you encounter", 2 spaces between "with" and "those".
25. In the dialogue “About Grandma” with the witch, when she says “Be sure to stay on the path Red”, there should be a comma between “path” and “Red”.
26. In the dialogue “About the Wolf” with the witch, when she says “Your potential for power is nearly limitless Red”, there should be a comma between “limitless” and “Red”. Also, when she says “You’re a special girl after all”, there should be a comma between “girl” and “after”.
27. In the dialogue “About Time” with the witch, when she says “once the sunrises”, there should be a space between “sun” and “rises”. Also, when she says “your life will be forfeit, that is of course”, there should be a period between “forfeit” and “that”, rather than a comma, and there should be a comma between “is” and “of”.
28. In the "Special Delivery" quest description, "deilver the Basket before sunrise", "deilver" seems to be a misspelling of "deliver". Also, "a Basket to a person known as Grandma", there seems to be 2 spaces between "Grandma" and "as", and "outskirts of the forest", there seems to be 2 spaces between "the" and "forest". "If I'm unable to do this before Sunrise (8AM) then I guess I just die again", there seems to be 2 spaces between "If" and the period before it, and 2 spaces between "(8AM)" and "then".
29. In the Basket suicide ending text (LMAO), “Of all the ways that Red could die on her journey to Grandma this”, should have a comma between “Grandma” and “this”.
30. In the dialogue for sticking your hand in a tree, when it says “You feel around blindly for a moment. The sensation of the unkown”, there are 2 (maybe more?) spaces between “The” and the period before it, and “unkown” should be “unknown”.
31. In the Monument inspection dialogue, when Red says it’s “not exactly on brand with the rest of the witchy vibe”, there are 2 spaces between “of” and “the”.
32. For the interaction with the sparkly mana water outside the witch’s house, when it says “Red’s Mana was recharged”, there’s no period at the end.
- Ack, character limit. Gotta split this in half.
