I really dig the vibe!  I see other commenter's talking about David Weber and it kind of makes me want to read Honor Harrington.

I really like the characters and am glad that you found the word count to bring them through. 

Love the characterization here. Both POV characters come across as delightfully cocky in different ways. The perspective shift threw me off a bit, but really fun read overall!

I enjoyed it! What could go wrong, indeed!

I did enjoy the blurbs of the gunner's interjecting thoughts, although the use of parentheses threw me slightly off, but that's neither here nor there. All in all, very fun read!

I enjoyed it! What could go wrong, indeed!

I did enjoy the blurbs of the gunner's interjecting thoughts, although the use of parentheses threw me slightly off, but that's neither here nor there. All in all, very fun read!

Great read! I absolutely love the perspective shift! With the size constraints it’s tough but I think you pulled it off well. Obviously would have loved to see that dynamic go on a bit more, but there is something there about how abrupt the chaos tone shifts back to calmness I enjoyed. It perfectly captures a car crash. It’s all noise and scary one second, and the next your just laying on the road (or at least that was my experience hahaha). 

I enjoyed the concept of this story, but feel like the two perspectives in a 1000-word constraint lessened it for me. I think it would’ve been a lot more impactful with a full page from either character’s point of view. A few grammar/punctuation corrections, as well as the above protagonist focus, and I think this can be a super fun read!

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