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I appreciate the feedback! I think with my time constraint I hadn’t even noticed, but will keep in mind for the next one!

I appreciate it, was definitely meant to be open ended to allow the reader to wonder what happened!

thank you so much!

This was pretty good, save for the punctuation and structure for me personally. Gabhammer seemed mostly unbothered by much of the situation he was in, which made the ending feel a bit unemotional, not sure if that was intentional.

This was a good read, but I feel like it could’ve been fleshed out and expanded upon further within the word limit. A way via dialogue or senses to show better how they were having to give blood, etc.

Oh my gosh, that was funny. Not at all what I expected to read in this jam, kudos!

This was quite enjoyable, very unique! Obviously this had to be condensed for the sake of the Jam’s limitations, but I certainly wish more could’ve been fleshed out with the various interactions, the pacing was definitely fast.

That was awesome! Loved the building tension and the desperation you were able to convey in such a short read!

This was an enjoyable read! I will say that the first read through was a bit confusing for me at a couple points, but re-reading it helped tie everything up.

I really like the ideas and concepts behind this one, though I do feel like it can use some additional editing passes to get it to the final draft. I feel like some of the dialogue can be reworked, as well as some exposition changes, but overall, I enjoyed this one!

I enjoyed this story for what it was; a quaint, contained, low stakes read with fun chemistry!

Whilst I enjoyed the banter and overall tone of this one, I feel like it could use a couple more editing passes to really focus in on some of the main story aspects, as well as clean up some of the punctuation/grammar. Fun read regardless!

This was great! Loved the concept and snapshot of the scene. Well written and enjoyable to follow!

Haha, I appreciate it! Those rebel chemists know what they’re doing!

I appreciate it!

Thank you!

This was fun to read, I love the beginning sequence!

This was a super fun read, I enjoyed the clever use of resources!

This was super fun to read! Loved the second person perspective and vivid telling!

I think there is something really strong in the works here. I love the thought of first personal internal monologue that this started with, though it did get wordy and hard to follow as it continued. Then the switch to third person action was really displacing. Would love to see this fleshed out and reworked a bit.

Overall, this was an enjoyable read. I could see this as a scene in something larger, but it felt a bit too safe. There was nothing that made me overtly think “One Page Rules” or “Creative Resources”.

This was a fine story, though I unfortunately did not feel truly captivated in the end. The interactions and dialogue seemed a bit forced and unnatural to me.

I love the idea of this one, and enjoyed the first person present tense aspect of it. I do think it needs some additional editing passes and expansion to really make it thrive, though. Several key elements could’ve been fleshed out a bit more for me personally.

This flowed well and was a great snapshot of a larger story! 

This was a great read! There were a few grammar/punctuation spots, but nothing that detracted from the story. I wish dialogue had been used more to convey some of the earlier moments personally. Overall, though, an enjoyable short story!

I love the idea behind this one, but it was a tough read… the dialogue felt very unnatural, the ending was unsatisfying, and the writing errors (punctuation, spelling, tense switch) took me out of the story as well. 

I think there is an awesome story here, as the thought of a human interrogator trying to get info from a Havoc Brother is titillating, but I think this needs to be edited around some more. Would love to see this given a bit more time!

I love the idea behind this one; however, I personally would’ve enjoyed it much more if the 1000 word limit was used to expand on any one of theses conquests, with allusion and dialogue to explain his battle-readiness and past escapades. 

This was a fun read! Very Prince of Persia feeling, which was great. A couple of punctuation spots tripped me up while reading, so one or two more editing passes and this will be awesome! 

This was a great story, really enjoyed the perspective! The ending was a wonderful reveal. Some punctuation issues, but nothing that detracted from the flow. 

I enjoyed the concepts and ideas of this story! There are some fun interactions at play. However, I feel like this needs some more editing passes to make it truly shine. Would love to see this after some updates!

I enjoyed the idea of this one and thought the cleverness of the story was fun overall. Though I do feel like the initial “world-building” would have been better portrayed through dialogue or character interactions. Some grammar/punctuation spots that detracted from the flow for me as well.

Chillingly brilliant! Fits well in a grimdark future!

Other than a couple of grammar/punctuation spots, I thought this was excellent! I loved the use of “creative resources” and felt like this was a great snapshot of a larger story!

This was superbly written, very intimate, and wonderful to read. I do wish the ending had gone further, maybe into mission prep with the horse or something along those lines, to drive the point home even more. Additionally, while I understand the “use what you got,” tagline was meant to state the Jam’s theme, I personally thought it didn’t explore more with ‘creative resources’.

Wonderful read, very clear flow and sequence of events!

This was a great read, loved the idea and the format!

I enjoyed the concept of this story, but feel like the two perspectives in a 1000-word constraint lessened it for me. I think it would’ve been a lot more impactful with a full page from either character’s point of view. A few grammar/punctuation corrections, as well as the above protagonist focus, and I think this can be a super fun read!

Whilst I enjoyed the humor this was going for and genuinely enjoyed the idea of rat clan craziness, the typos, sentence structuring, and exposition made it hard for me to fully get into. Would love to see this after a few more edits!

Enjoyable read!

I enjoyed the overall story that was present, and some of the ideas alluded to are thought provoking! I will say that the sentence structure and pacing were not my favorite. I would love to read this peace fleshed out a bit more and taken to its full 1000 word limit!