I love the idea behind this one, but it was a tough read… the dialogue felt very unnatural, the ending was unsatisfying, and the writing errors (punctuation, spelling, tense switch) took me out of the story as well.
I think there is an awesome story here, as the thought of a human interrogator trying to get info from a Havoc Brother is titillating, but I think this needs to be edited around some more. Would love to see this given a bit more time!