What an immersive game. I enjoyed the background images and the banter between Moxxy and Jericho. They complimented each other well. The ending I got was a fitting one. I would have liked different text colors because I was getting pretty confused. That could just be me though.
Yeah the text colors was an issue. They were originally Orange, Yellow and Grey for a black background but once I added the image for the background the red causes visibility issues so I changed Orange to Light Blue.
This game was so stylish, i loved the way you used the visuals and the tone of the writing together to create a really compelling scifi vibe. I wish i had a bit more choices, especially because of you ever chose an uncharted path you get locked into it and don't get more choices. I loved all the weird tech and unexplained stuff and the tone is brisk enough i never felt like it was being dragged down by how many concepts you were introducing, their vibe and meaning came across really well.
Agreed on the choices. The full version had a lot more agency with more branches and a couple of additional ending versions but the word count was too high.
Super engaging story, I enjoyed that a lot! I loved the amount of world building you were able to build in such succinct passages! My piece of constructive criticism is that agency felt a little lacking. I can only recall two choices I got to make and it wasn't terribly clear what either of them meant. The first choice I remember was when you had the option to use the Divya which I hadn't figured out the significance of yet, and then didn't have an option to not use it later. Other than that, the story and dialogue were really well written, the voices of the characters were really distinct, and I liked it a lot! Great job!
Yeah I agree about the agency, the word count gutted my full version. I had to strip the agency out sadly, there was like 3-4 choices that mattered originally natural winding but it was 3100 words.
This is very beautifully written, the descriptive language really helps me to understand the world and Moxxy and Jericho. Also really love the attention to the different backgrounds and color-coded text so we know who is speaking. I thought it was super interesting how instead of the player interacting with two NPCS it was almost like we were an omniscient being, controlling their path and choices.
Honestly the only thing would be maybe to elaborate on the tech or cut down a little. Sometimes it felt like I was getting lost in all of the technical terms. Wonderful game!
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What an immersive game. I enjoyed the background images and the banter between Moxxy and Jericho. They complimented each other well. The ending I got was a fitting one. I would have liked different text colors because I was getting pretty confused. That could just be me though.
Yeah the text colors was an issue. They were originally Orange, Yellow and Grey for a black background but once I added the image for the background the red causes visibility issues so I changed Orange to Light Blue.
This game was so stylish, i loved the way you used the visuals and the tone of the writing together to create a really compelling scifi vibe. I wish i had a bit more choices, especially because of you ever chose an uncharted path you get locked into it and don't get more choices. I loved all the weird tech and unexplained stuff and the tone is brisk enough i never felt like it was being dragged down by how many concepts you were introducing, their vibe and meaning came across really well.
Agreed on the choices. The full version had a lot more agency with more branches and a couple of additional ending versions but the word count was too high.
Super engaging story, I enjoyed that a lot! I loved the amount of world building you were able to build in such succinct passages! My piece of constructive criticism is that agency felt a little lacking. I can only recall two choices I got to make and it wasn't terribly clear what either of them meant. The first choice I remember was when you had the option to use the Divya which I hadn't figured out the significance of yet, and then didn't have an option to not use it later. Other than that, the story and dialogue were really well written, the voices of the characters were really distinct, and I liked it a lot! Great job!
Yeah I agree about the agency, the word count gutted my full version. I had to strip the agency out sadly, there was like 3-4 choices that mattered originally natural winding but it was 3100 words.
This is very beautifully written, the descriptive language really helps me to understand the world and Moxxy and Jericho. Also really love the attention to the different backgrounds and color-coded text so we know who is speaking. I thought it was super interesting how instead of the player interacting with two NPCS it was almost like we were an omniscient being, controlling their path and choices.
Honestly the only thing would be maybe to elaborate on the tech or cut down a little. Sometimes it felt like I was getting lost in all of the technical terms. Wonderful game!
Agree on the tech. If I had more words I would try to provide more context to the newly introduced rules of the universe.