Any feedback? Lemme have it!
Aw, I'm glad that the story felt different and fresh, and I'm also glad (sorry!) that you were in tears! Thanks so much for playing.
What an incredible piece of feedback! Thank you for taking the time to write so many of your thoughts -- it's no exaggeration that this kind of thing makes my whole day. :-D
On the subject of human-djinn babies, canon is canon. But, hey, that's the beauty of fanon, isn't it! ;-) And regarding MC's hair -- it's actually a deep brown, but sometimes the lighting of a scene can make it look green.
Thanks again! This made me giddy to read!
Omg you are very welcome 😊 I love your Wilder series and I hope I was able to convey that through my feed back. It makes me so happy that it made your day, because your game makes my week. Still I apologize that my feedback was a chaotic mess , I had so many thoughts and just typed them out without even ruminating over how messy it looks.
Thank you for taking the time to write such a detailed and honest criticism of Bahadur's Story.
Most things, I can see your point -- but I do stand by the story. The main character is young, and she's written to be young. She and Bahadur do have an unhealthy dependency on each other (like you mentioned, she is his "purity token", his opinions are coloured by being conditioned to feel "shameful" and "unclean") but they are supposed to be flawed, pitiful characters who, by the game's end, have at least a hope of growing together and making a better future for themselves.
Of course, if that's not the feeling you got at all, then that's my failure as a writer, and I will seek to improve -- not just in future routes and games, but by looking back at Bahadur's Story and seeing if/where I can strengthen the backbone of the narrative.
It's probably one of the hardest things I've ever read -- to have Bahadur be called "Uncle Tom". I am genuinely mortified that this is a take someone could have, and obviously the absolute last comparison I'd intend to be drawn to this character. Though I would argue that breaking free of his servility (once admitting that it is in fact his own defense mechanism against the parts of himself that scare him) is a core part of Bahadur's story and character development -- not a reinforcement of the "servile minority" stereotype. But, regardless, this teaches me to cast an even more critical eye over my own characters, to ensure that they do not come off as unintentionally offensive.
Ultimately, I can completely understand why this game does not work for you, though I stand by it. I will certainly take some of the points you've made and aim to improve in areas I feel are lacking or misaimed, but ultimately Wilder is what it is.
Thank you for your feedback. It has been very valuable.
Wow, that's high praise -- thank you! And I'll take your constructive criticism on board.
Hopefully you'll enjoy discovering how the protagonist finds herself in various different scenarios depending on the route. I'll say that, for Royo's Story, you do meet her before Umar -- in a very interesting way. ;-)
Thank you! I'm so glad that you enjoyed the drama -- and the parts where I did my best to tug at your heartstrings. ;-)
That's correct! You will be able to download the full version for free. (Also, at this stage, a Steam version has not been confirmed.)
Oh, wow. Thank you for this! You have no idea how happy it's made me on an otherwise very tense day.
I'm especially glad that you enjoy the MC. She can be difficult to write sometimes, trying to make her feel both developed but also something of a player avatar. So I'm constantly worried that she'll be considered either too blank or too unrelatable! ^^;