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Now that you explain it here, I can see where it came from. However, that explanation should have been a part of the story. I must say that it is my fault for not remembering the lore of the Dark Elves, but you also should keep in mind that people without knowledge of the official lore might read your story. 

Feels like a backstory to some kind of a sci-fi villain, which I absolutely love! The theme of the jam in not present enough, in my opinion, otherwise, good job.

The story was interesting and the flow, despite some hiccups which might cause confusion, was fine. A big working point would be adhering to the theme, or at least I don't feel a strong presence of real "consequences" in the story.

Help, dear miner, I'm stuck!

The story itself is good enough, but there are some elements which make reading it confusing. Also, I don't really see how it ties into the theme of consequenses.
I'd say, try working on on the flow of the story and don't add cursive at random or inconsistently. I'm sure you'll be able to write a very good story next time!

Almost perfect, great job

I imagined Saint Bartholomew as a Mechanicus Magus once and the image won't leave my head. Good story though

Probably one of the few stories I'd rate 5/5 for flow. Very neatly done!

Thank you very much! I'm currently in the middle of writing a short series on a self-made universe, so in case you want to read the first few chapters, you can find those on my pixiv:
https://www.pixiv.net/novel/series/11737697
I posted only 3 chapters there, but the 4th and the 5th ones are almost done, so I'll probably post them in a week or two.

Thank you! Originally it was a bit longer, but I saw that there was a limit of 1000 words and had to trim it. Glad that it didn't feel rushed because of the trimming.

Did my best, hahaha

I like the theme of this story. Well done

That's a good one. One minor hiccup when introducing the second character, but other than that, good job!

Very tense, kept me reading without skipping any parts. Very well done!

Classic case of ambushing the ambusher, but executed well. Well-paced and great with explaining the info a reader might not know.

Great! I currently try to run it on Ubuntu 20.04 with Wine, but it would definitely be a blast to have full-on support. Keep up the good work, we believe in you.

Edit: worked just fine with Wine64.

Edit 2: completed the demo and am really looking towards new developments!

Will there be any Linux support?