Beautiful illustrations, they all have a lot of personality. I like your decision to keep it monochrome except for the front and back. I also like that you included useful information on the front and back.

It was helpful having separate sections for the NPCs and items rather than just in the descriptions of where they're found - I'm impressed you were able to accomplish that within the page limit with nothing feeling crowded!

The NPCs were all well described and I like their varied WANTS. I also really liked the Alchemy potions and the relic instruments , especially the Drum of Wind Control  - if I gave the drums to players I think I would cut the ability to create a wind wall, the jumping ability is already powerful and interesting.

I liked the setting presented and the culture presented has a wonderful depth. I thought it was awesome you took inspiration from a more under-represented people with a rich history. I definitely appreciated your intended message, but it was a bit jarring to read "Sensitivity is important when portraying cultures other than your own—fictitious or not. Consider: What does this character want, why are they doing what they’re doing, and what makes them unique?" followed immediately by the next section "Colonialists range from misguided fools with white savior complexes (Dexter Treadwell) to aggressors without respect for local customs (Hailey Corbett)."

All in all, I think it would be an interesting scenario for players to explore. Thank you for taking the time to add links to important topics so they were clickable to jump through the document too!

Love this. Very intersting to read.  I like the npc info and the setting is just so cool. I'd up the contrast on the pink pages though for readability.

I imagine Hailett Corbet being like Bob Peck in Jurassic Park and saying, "Clever girl" when the Owl Bear sneaks up on her (well maybe "Clever boy" in this case since the owl bear is male haha).  It's cool seeing a break from traditional gaming tropes but wrapped around a familiar creature we all know and love.  I would love to play this. Also,  you're excellent at giving people, items, and creatures great names!  Very original and creative!

P.S. Can I pretend my cheese cave gets its yak milk from Doi Gaew? :D

Very good. Inspired scenario. Great hook. Certainly useable. I honestly think the coloured pages subtract: bit of a pain to print, and also make it more difficult to actually read.

I love the firearm mechanics. Even though I like the color pallet, it did make the first page a bit rough to read. Really cool to see an adventure that's exclusively hex based.