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Thanks. That is good advice. I'm looking to expand it.

Loved the cover. Interesting NPCs 

Good job.

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Very ambitious. Its a whole city. I like the idea of the city turn to make it feel alive. Cool cover.

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Great art. Awesome map. Cool setting. 

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I love the premise and the rival parties. The maps and dungeon are great.  I think you should expand it to have the maps and text on separate pages for readability.

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I like the NPCs. The idea of a ritual being done at the party is great 

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Very cool setting.  I like the factions and NPCs. There is a lot here.  The only change I would suggest is having a version with a more readable font.

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Wow what a seriously dark fantasy. It makes my skin shiver. 

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Love the setting and NPCs are awesome! Great art 

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Excellent idea. Can fit into any heist game. Would love to know more about the Gilded Palm.

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Very cool idea of having an army bearing down on the PCs.  Love the map.

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Packed with interesting locations. I like the Conan style Hyborian age adventures.

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This could be dropped into any game that PCs want a wish. Nice layout. Good job.

Thanks!

When are the judges going to weigh in. Will there be another live stream highlighting the favorite entries?

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Love the tables especially the escalation table.. very unique problem for the PCs.

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Thanks! I gotta tell you even if I wanted to mimic a retro art style from the 70s, I probably couldn't. But was definitely going for a newspaper. I ran the cover art through a filter to mimic old comics on newsprint half tone style.

Great art. I spooky storyline. Very creepy and powerful.  This could be a good start for a campaign.  I really like that each location has an interesting NPC.

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Love the cover and art. 

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I see dead people. Interesting premise.

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Wow. That's a lot of eels.  I love how you took the title and went all out.  

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There is a lot in this one pager.  Really concise. I like sin chart and the items. 

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Wow that's high praise.  Thanks!

Interesting premise. I like the questions for each encounter.  Why would the pcs believe the king in the first place?

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I like the factions. I love how the wizard's life is bound to a turtle.  I think this mod sets the PCs up for interesting choices.

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Great art and maps. Love the spinning rooms.  Would like more info on NPCs and factions. But the star is the Zephyr.

Well done.

Great art. Cool factions and story. Lots of ways to handle this. Longer than 4 pages. 

Good job. 

Cool cover. Nice map. Would like to know more of the backstory. How did the colossus get chained?

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Seems like a plot out of Star Trek. Very cool. Love the art. Would like some kind of protection for the PCs to keep from being enthralled. I like the added reading material.

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Interesting mechanic. Simple yet powerful. I could see myself using it.

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This is a really cool mod to run that is PC centric. I think it would give the players insight into each other's characters. 

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I like the setting. It would be great to have some wandering NPCs to encounter.  The final boss is really cool especially the false defeat bit.

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Cool dungeon crawl. The locations are creepy. Would like more info on the NPCs. Also maybe more of an opportunity to align with the sewer-rats. 

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Very cool item and story for the Mind Stone.  The dungeon crawl easy to run.  I would like to have some non-combat encounters and some NPCs.  It would be great to include a rival party to add some pressure.

I like that this is a new game system complete with a character sheet.  The god /godless dynamic is interesting. It needs more pages to fully flesh out the system.

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Great story setup. I think the god could fit into any campaign.  Interesting setting and locations. I think adding factions or rival searching parties would give urgency to the PCs.

Good job.