Well that ain't fair, "I hate wimp protags" - I never said it shouldn't be allowed, just that it's a very cliche character arc and I hope it isn't flat, at the least lower the "wimpiness" a bit, y'know? What I did say is that I " hope his confidence improves and he's not another one-note semi-limp dick-haver who's just there to get used and get off. " Is this not a fair critique?
And what's wrong with "first lay"? I genuinely didn't know what else to write that didn't just say "sex scene" or "scene where they fuck". MB for trying to play around with my words.
And I said nothing along the lines of "I necessitate that you have it. I dont negotiate with game devs, they always give into... the alpha." "The alpha" is a gross character-type, and unless I'm reading a brain-out "MC gets ALL the ladies and has ALL the powers" story, it's just boring. And if you think of ME that way... I mean, I don't know what do say, I tried to be as nice as possible without demanding anything. If you meant the "must have", that's 100% just recommendation lingo - not "this must be in the game or else it will be DOGWATER!1!!1", if they don't have it they don't have it, I'm not gonna berate a story for some small addition like that not being included.
You're putting words in my mouth because "my vibe is off." At the very least you can help me rephrase and reorganize stuff instead of some disrespectful stuff like "work on it; you sound like a discord mod; yadda yadda" Only reason I even mentioned "Big fan of impreg (and pregnancy!" is because, quite literally, the equivalent of "Big fan of hot dogs (and bratwurst!" at a hot dog stand. A bit corny, but not an out of place comment at all - it's an impreg-central game, and I like impreg. Simple.
I like reading and I tried my best to give the best feedback I could because I'd like to see stories like this do well, and if you can ask, inquire, or suggest stuff in its early ages, now is the time to do so. They don't have to listen to me at all, I'm another drop of water in the ocean. I don't have to have my way, nor what I says matters, but this is a comment section where they asked for feedback and what you'd like to see. Now I'll sound like I'm whining, I know, but honestly out of all the spaces to be a cornball, is this not one of them?
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I'm not even trying to be right because there's nothing to be right about. But come on, man. I just like to read and they asked for feedback; I'm just bad at writing it properly. How about dropping some actual advice or good read or two, spicy or not, that I could enjoy instead, rather than insulting me?
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"I know this is a restaurant, but you're such a glutton for eating the food and critiquing it like the chef asked. Work on that."
That's you. That's what you sound like.
(I really wasn't even that raunchy with it, the majority of what was written was general story critique. I bet you didn't read it and assumed it was lustful because I wrote a lot, huh? Shame on you, learn to read lol.)
Ehhhh, that's reaching r*pe territory. I agree with the beauty of pregnancy, far more enjoyable when it's mutually consenual though. Both sides of the coin should feel the excitement of having a child, y'know? It just ain't fun feeling that your efforts are going to become a burden on someone else's behalf (with said someone doing much more work than you would.)
Big fan of impreg (and pregnancy! They are different stages that occasionally get separated, so some games only have one or the other. I'd like to see both!) here, so you already had my attention from the concept.
Alright, I can see where it's going. I wouldn't kill the wimpiness, but dial it back a bit more. It was... annoying to "hear" him complain all the time. At the least I hope his confidence improves and he's not another one-note semi-limp dick-haver who's just there to get used and get off. Of course, it's the beginning of the story, so I'm not really ragging on the character too much until I can see more of it, I'm just a bit tired of the character trope. He can still be nice - I like that trait, defo not a sadist here - but it always comes with a basically-in-tatters sense of worth.
Saw a similar comment down below that I agree on a part with: the impreg x-ray is a heavy must have; the moment of conception is very hot!
Now, depending on whether it's a pure visual novel or one of those sandbox games: being able to improve your virility would be nice. Seems like a setting where you climb the ranks, improving your worth and all that jazz, so it seems interesting!
And hey, if the story's good that's like a HUGE plus for me to come back several times rather than whack it and sack it, moving on. So take care and develop your world with respect, not that I doubt you're able to do so.
(This one's more personal, but if we can make the netori part optional? I see that's a possibility from Madison's character description and I'm not much of a fan of stepping through someone else's relationship unless they were an absolute dick and their partner deserved someone better. And hey, ain't saying it's me, but it's also not hard to be better than a douchebag.)
Currently, I see this version completely as a pure concept - this demo section defo needs to be fleshed out more in order to feel more compelling. I can read super fast, but I still went through it like lightning! The story hits all the notes, but it doesn't really stand and develop them that much until you get to the first lay - which pretty much was just focused on physical attributes. I can't give strong advice in that regard, I'm no writer, and with stuff like this it's more challenging than going "dick go in there, women swoon, guy fulfilled."
But yeah, that part comes with the "this is a concept" remark, so feel free to not think about that section.
Overall, very promising idea! Looking forward to it and your team's progress!
Not a big fan of detective style games, but I will admit I had a good time with this one!
You don't know how frustrating it was to have the culprit and second, no, third-guess myself out of it (Even tagged her, but was so unsure I quit and reloaded), wandering around for 30 minutes trying to figure it out and then pulling up the wiki just to see "Yeah, you were right idiot!" Still, it was a good time. Didn't like using my noggin so hard though lol
Hope the next one's less of a super-puzzle and more so the smaller puzzle beats like the other two.
Anyhow, the content? Immaculate. Wish we were playing as B. Reed, but hey, at least we got the shows, right? Well done in the animation department, and like always the girls were super cute! The stories, both big and small, were also quite fun! The ending's ending really surprised me! But yeah, in general it definitely scratches the kink itch - which is surprisingly hard to do. Keep up the good work, can't wait to see what kind of bow you put on top to end this series!
(If ya'll have any recommendations I'll take 'em! I've played games like CoC and TiTS - not to mention a good chunk of those that fulfill the breeding category (Many deal with impreg, but not your character knocking up someone) - so I'd love any that deal with this particular set of kinks if possible!)
If it's any benefit, giving them associated patterns or being able to have an indicator pop-up as a toggle-able option may be helpful! Hope this helps!
Since it'll be easier to just write one comment I'll write here: Nice work! Fun "Papers please!"-esque game but horny, quirky characters and other things! I'm not much into TF myself, but it's a fun loop with fun characters. It just needs more polish, so keep it up! If I were to make any light suggestions, it would probably just be to underline the "Apply to object" for punishing the Thief. It's not a big deal, but I was a bit confused until I reread the description (though it'll probably help once the proper texture is applied. Also, there's a following bug to where if you restart the day after applying the scroll effect (if you fail to apply it for the thief), the effect won't dissipate until the next time. Very minor, but worth noting nonetheless incase potentially similar problems come up.
I wish you luck in your endeavors!
A bit of lore misinfo with Jessie's storyline, she says she has two brothers and seven sisters at one point and three brothers and six sisters a bit later. I could be a bit foggy in the head and missed some lore to clarify that, but otherwise it feels like it should be pointed out at the least.
I'm no futa fanatic, I just like romance stories - and stories in general - so I do hope that there's more to this in the future! Good luck with this project!
I really hope this game develops more even if it may've simply been for a game jam! I'm *so* enjoying it, bewbs or not. Honestly can't even focus on them since I'm trying so hard to plan out a course of attack and future planning for the left-over potions lol
(I hate the hypnosis and eggplants, I wish they didn't stay despite overflowing. Should have an overflow limit by certain rounds or something.)
Uber cute! Definitely is fun to play! First boss is definitely fun and it's quite challenging! (I recommend changing his dash tell to a white instead of red, it's really hard to see btw) The others weren't as bad for me to handle, but they were still quite fun! Would definitely play a bigger version of this. Well done!
Wow, you really just read my stuff and (somehow) decided I was angry, huh? Actually, don't think you even read it with how you replied. And here I thought we could have a rather decent discussion even if it started somewhat rocky. Deciding to do research, all for nothing. :/
Again, and for the last time because I'm probably just going to ignore you after this (and you should do the same if you hate dealing with me this much, I'd understand), but I have no problem with respecting others and I am not angry. But you are asking me to ignore the word's definition for the sake of feelings and I do not wish to do that. Simple as. You can't just tell me to respect others when you really aren't doing the same just because I share a different opinion than you. Well, you could, but the likelihood of me properly listening to you severely decreases, as it would with any other person. "Touch grass?" Pretty sure taking the time to look at the dictionary definition and potential meanings of the word instead of shutting out everything of the sort after arriving to my own definition would constitute getting in touch with reality. I decided to listen and change my interpretation,
Please don't ask me to respect people when you can barely even respect me. Just over a word definition, at that.
(And just in case, not to insult you or anything as I can have problems with it too, I'd like to bet that your inner voice is making this out to be worse than it actually is. Refresh yourself and re-read, softly spoken (and hopefully without attitude, if you can't, it is what it is. Ciao!)
But they aren't true derogatory terms, I thought I clarified that. Intersex is a spectrum of varying ordinances. It can include hermaphrodites, but it isn't the only part of it. Hermaphrodites specifically have both functional male and female privates. And I'm not the one offended by reality, I think it's stupid to be insulted by a word that's almost entirely used for fictional purposes nowadays, otherwise to denote special circumstances of a person, which is an extremely rare case in the first place.
Look, I'll even post some facts for you:
- Roughly 5% of all animal species are hermaphroditic, or 33% excluding insects.
- There are no hermaphroditic species among mammals or birds.
- True hermaphroditism represents 5% of all disorders of sex development.
- Estimated frequency of ovotestes is one in 83,000 births (0.0012%).
- By 1991, approximately 500 cases of true hermaphroditism had been confirmed.
Now, after further research. I've also noted evidence that it has been used as a derogatory term:
Hermaphrodite is a derogatory and outdated term for an intersex person, who is someone born with variations in their sex characteristics. The term implies that a person is both fully male and fully female, which is a physiological impossibility. The term is also stigmatizing and misleading, and should be avoided except in a medical context. Some intersex people may reclaim the word, but it does not apply to transgender people unless they are also intersex.
But in this case, it's not referring to intersex people, rather an actual hermaphrodite. It's specifically noting one situation and, especially here in erotica or +18 content, referring only to this phenomenon of gender. I'd actually put it in the same barrel as "gay" or "queer": terms that have been used as insults but also have actual non-insulting references to situations (though that's mostly just an opinion). So perhaps I should readjust my stance a bit: You are partially incorrect. If used correctly, it isn't derogatory.
(And to readjust your argument, for the sake of a future reply, the term (used in a nonfictional setting, (and in some cases including)) wouldn't be only referring to women. So instead, you should say "people" instead of just trans women. And I hope you aren't upset, I really just don't view it as a derogatory term since I've only seen it (at least in media) used in this specific application of gender.)
That's absolutely incorrect. Herms/Futas or "Hermaphrodites" are feminine bodied people who typically have both sets of genetalia. To a much broader extent, it just means any person that has both parts. Futanari is just the Japanese colloquial. This is different from being trans, and if it's being used as an "insult," it's more likely that the offender doesn't at all understand the difference. It's not derogatory, it's simply a descriptor.
It's quite annoying when it's framed like that. Same for "femboy", which are men that simply like to dress or appear as women. Literally just short for "feminine boys." They (commonly in media) aren't actually trying to be women and therefore aren't trans, and yet they are seen as such. People latched onto the word, "claimed it," and then saw it as offensive, which is so egregiously disappointing.
Honestly this digital world just seeks anger, nowadays. Ridiculous.
Not bad! Assuming that the fight's not done and it'll just hold you in an attack box indefinitely at some point, it has a reasonable difficulty level and looks pretty good!
Now a few personal hiccups: Checking Sans' stats, if this is post-attacks and his brother's the last one before the ruins, then Sans should have more than 1 ATK and DEF. I don't know the story here, however, so I wouldn't know where this fight is in your timeline. Papy could be the first victim, for all I know. Again, just a personal hiccup since I don't know the juicy lore~!
Secondly, not too much a fan of random-fire blasters. Can't learn anything if it's just gonna be entirely up to chance, y'know? It's not like those attacks were difficult however, so it'll probably be fine in the long run.
I'd include something blocking off the MERCY button! Probably nothing happening simply because of demo or your personal choice, but I think it'd just be a nice detail. No escape, no mercy.
And finally, just a temporary measure: something to tell us when the demo's over. Doesn't have to be anything big, just like an "END OF DEMO" or something in the final text box. Or you can have fun with it! Either way, just something to stop the future players from expecting more from the current build as it's somewhat dissatisfying for nothing to happen, y'know, y'know??
Regardless, good work! Looks like you're beginning to make something fun, so I hope you enjoy as much of the process as you can! Can't wait to see what you come up with!
Being mad that someone isn't getting paid for their work, even if it's only (currently) 3$? Justifiable, understandable.
Being mad that someone won't allow you to access their work for free, even though they were kind enough to allow for just a little under the current half of the game to be played for free (and is STILL giving you another chapter)? Cope.
It's likely not even gonna stay on Patreon once they finish, storywriting just takes time; time needs money for necessities to keep making more story. The fact that they don't ask for much either is mercy enough for you to get your pebbles off, dawg. It's only 3 bucks, just pay it, download, and unsub. Or wait for the full release to get it at one full price. Either way, selfish and silly complaint, ya gooner lol
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I'm no fanboy, I just think that complaining about paying someone for their work is cringe, especially if the price is low. 🤷♂️
I know what kind of person you are from reading your next posts, and I hate Patreon as well but that's simply what the writer chose to use. From the way you phrased your original sentence, it really sounded like (to me) that you were mad that the rest of the current amount of the project was behind a paywall. Apologies if I was berating you harshly, but it's a pet peeve to see people complain about an artist getting paid. Every artist making good work deserves their kudos! So yeah, you just hit a critical spot for me, even if you didn't mean to. I mean I haven't paid for it either and I'd also rather wait for full release before paying. Would much rather one and done than paying until completion of the project, unless the project was under threat of cancellation to which I'd try to pitch in something at least if I liked it enough. And had money lol
So yeah, my bad for misunderstanding you, though it's not like I can fully gauge your thoughts over text. Hard not to be "tone deaf" if there's no tone, yaknow? Your reply to me was enough for me to go "ah, I see." (and for some reason I couldn't reply properly, so this is my workaround, I might've been blocked. Harsh, but fair and respect. Just disengage from any negativity. 🤷♂️)
Man, reading this while having an Aria Math cover going... Well, I don't know why, but it's really giving The Stanley Parable vibes. It's like I can hear the narrator, haha!
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Get this man out of my head, please.
Back to the main topic (Long rant, apologies! And I know the running gag of not acknowledging whatever this is as... whatever, but I'm a prude and I will send my compliments to the chef), this is an excellent apolitical satirical commentary on the state of identity politics. If you able to read the (quite surface level) message, it is clear that struggling with self-presence and the reality of the world is a fruitless endeavor. Things will exist, as should you. Reality is a selfish being, who has its rules laid out and the dice already rolled, rolling, or getting ready to be rolled. Trying your best to "not offend" anyone will, more than likely, end up offending someone. That's just life; it's paradoxical and cunning. All actions have consequences, and it's rather childish to try to run away from all of it. Sometimes there're results that you had no part in but affect you regardless, but that's just a part of living.
Personally, I do try my best not to step on any toes. It's more of a hassle to deal with escalatory aggressive people, but at the same time I still have my own existence to worry about. I will have my own opinions and views upon the world. If someone doesn't like them, it's unfortunate, but I'd instead rather live in avoidance and mutual peace. If someone tries to change my views, oh well I could listen at first, but in most online cases, it usually ends up being demeaning and self-serving, to which I would simply turn the other cheek... or fight them about it. Otherwise, if the person was kind about it, well it probably wouldn't change much, but it'd at least be a nice conversation. What can I say? I was raised to dissociate or retaliate if someone does me wrong, and as a person I still have my pride. I'm most always competitive with words or games, unfortunately. But that is me, and that is what I deal with.
Overall, I do hope everyone can find their place in the world and not have to shove others to do it or conform to their self-beliefs. And again, apologies for the length! I just enjoy typing.
Oh man, was I sad to find out that it's just a demo! I was SO entranced, haha! Well done, just found you and started with this one after coming from Relationships 101. I found out I have a pretty strong love for these types of things, so I can't wait to enjoy more of your stories! Keep up the great work!
It's a cartoon character so it doesn't really matter (cuz y'know, not real and all), but if it's important to you than simply envision the Fionna from the Fionna and Cake subseries where she's a working adult theoretically in her mid-20's to early 30's. She still adapts the same style as her otherworld counterpart a little later in the series, so it shouldn't be a problem.
If you do still have a problem with it, then imagine this is an adult actress dressed up as Fionna. Again, they aren't real, and you're welcome to input your own view on a fictional character as well as the creator's allowed to make it. But you shouldn't force your view onto others. You chose to be here. You can choose to leave.
TL;DR: Separate reality and fiction, please. It's better for you mentally in the long run.
(You also seem a bit too young to be here. Porn rots the brain, please be aware of its consequences and take responsibility for them when you're an adult. You're still growing, and it is dangerous if you're set solely on sexual pleasure before you gain a stable foothold in society. If you are under 18, you should not be here at all. And if you are 18: grow up, it's a drawing and you chose to be here.)
(Sees shorty corgi girl)
(think she's cute and goes to talk to her; shortstack supremacy)
(friendliness noises)
(Get to chess, she's the only option since I've only gone through one "Small Talk" action with everyone I could)
(Loses, accepts scripted defeat)
(Corgi thinks I'd betray her because I'm royalty... wait, what?)
(Lewie just found out today (or yesterday idk), why would I betray you...?)
(Turns me into a hot maid, me crestfallen that she thinks this poor bastard would do whatever to her)
(I just wanted to stand up for myself D:)
I just wanted to be friends, ma'am. (I went back and figured out a better route. She's still cute tho, 10/10 story)
Pah, I knew I recognized the artstyle! Loved Spunkstock, always played every update that came out on Newgrounds and did end up getting it on Steam. This is quite the lovely project, too! StarFox-like, right? Fantastic! It'll be difficult for a newb like me to Ace them all, but I'm sure I can get it!
The only nitpick I have is MC's lines on Catiya. In other places they have a good amount of expressiveness if they're going for a mildly stoic character, but there... felt exactly how I felt first hearing Chris Pratt on Mario; it just didn't feel right. They did better on the other planets so I'm probably just being a stickler, but a simple reroll of the lines would probably do the trick. The other VAs were pretty good though, especially the antagonists!
Regardless, I can't wait to see how you guys do! I wish you luck!
Glad to see your return! I just happened by this since its recent appearance in the new & popular and I gotta say: way past fun. Didn't think a h-game would want to make me try-hard, but here we are! So, for all efforts provided, I wish you luck on creating a masterpiece you'll appreciate! May your efforts not go to waste and try to have fun!
Came here after watching the Dev's speedrun, I died at the... magical space dog god of death? Idk, it's been a bit since I've watched the animation, haha! It's really fun to explore and I admit I do like when a game pushes me to be better and better to survive and win. Going back in for round two! Great job creating this fun work of art, I bet Gooseworx is proud!
Oh neato, didn't know you had another game here.
Quick question, how heavy is the meat parasite content in this one? Cuz if I'm being personal, that gave me the willies. Not enough to dislike what you do, but enough to be... idk how to describe it, not quite weirded out. Probably unsettled? Parasite stuff always made me slightly uncomfortable, but I live with it so I can enjoy stories like this!
I'll give it a go in a few days, but if it's anything like LD+, I'm sure it'll be fun.