Definently a fun and creative little game. I like how the character is technically able to skip in line slightly. It would be funny if the player was able to do this for the entire line.
Suggestions/criticism
- I sometimes found the text bubbles to disappear too fast before I could read them. It would be nice for them to linger just a little bit longer before they disappeared.
- I felt like the ending the player could have used the directional pad or the crank to advance the little comic strip.
- it would be fun if there were little minigames that the player could play to pass the time while standing in line. Such as trying to balance a ball, but the player could lose the ball and if they go after it they would have to step out of line and then get back in the back. Alternatively someone could be kind enough to give them back their ball. Also with minigames it would be funny if the player got so engrossed in them that the line then moved forward and people started to pass you in line.
Overall a great little experience that wasted my time (much like many lines do), Great work overall and I know the wait was worth it!
Edit:
I would have also liked to see the player character having more movement like tapping their foot or just being impatient in general.