Hello fellow space game! :) I liked your setting a bunch, especially the greenhouse. The visual of plants in no gravity getting twined together was so vivid. I also really enjoyed the otherworldly character's speech mannerisms and how they connected with Tsumugi. Nice work!

-Anna

this was lovely. not only was the story interesting and well told, but the choices enabled real roleplay (although to be honest i can't imagine another tsumugi not doing *exactly* what i did). 

the "ocean entity" had such a fun way of speaking, and i particularly loved: "Well... I might not be when you are right now soon, but I wanted to let you know I was now." so much character and info given through word and tense choice without feeling goofy. 

i imagine the final letter changes depending on your choices, which is a very clever finale. really good!

I don't want to be offensive and say English clearly isn't the first language here when that might not be the case at all, but that's what it seems like, so I'm completely ignoring the grammatical issues. I think the story is still more than understandable and it's a fun ride. I saw in the comments that you got all this work done in just a day??? That's really impressive, you got a LOT done in a really short amount of time, even shorter than many of us had to work on our games. Your dialogue feels pretty natural, and the story seems to go along pretty smoothly. Also, I really love your thumbnail pic! I'm assuming it's yours, and if you end up illustrating your story with art like that then it'll only make it better, even though I still think this is a solid piece even without any illustrations.

My only request? Please make the window a little bigger! I have no idea how many people don't read stuff in full screen, but I'm one of those people, and you've got tons of room on the page to open up the readable area! You don't have to make it bigger of course, it's just a personal thing! 

Overall, good job :D

I really liked the rhythm and flow of the story. Well done!

The route I took was a really nice story, wistful and pensive. I think it really worked nicely with the space/tech backdrop. I wasn't sure if the stats that were in brackets (eg. [+1 laugh against adversity]) were meant to be diegetic or nondiegetic (ie. ink code), so I was a little confused how that might play into the mystery. In my second playthrough I made different choices, which gave me an ok run, but I wonder if there's a way to strengthen some of the choice outcomes, like if I choose not to dwell on the anomaly, is there maybe a stronger sense she left something behind, or does the anomaly/alien reattempt to connect, etc. In any case it's a lovely little journey, thank you.

I enjoyed it.  I like how it has a sort of folkloric/fantasy element to it in an otherwise very grounded sci-fi setting.  Not really magical realism, but sort of in that ballpark.  Very cute.  I noticed that at least some of the modifiers (e.g. "+1 temper") had noticeable effects on the narration and outcomes. Even though one ending is obviously the intended one, the others didn't necessarily feel like "bad endings," which is nice.  A solid entry overall.

For a moment in the beginning there it felt like I was fighting the story by reading it - as mentioned by others, the language / grammar is in dire need of editing - but the story itself is quite beautiful, and it captures the theme excellently. I do encourage others to push through, despite the language. By the end, I got into a kind of flow state with regards to the writing - it's beautiful in its own way :)

The narration and story concept is beautiful, if you manage to read through it by ignoring the obvious grammar issues (they are numerous). I get that English might not be your first language, but a bit more proofreading through free online tools, would have made the reading experience even more enjoyable. 

On the plus side, the interactivity was off the charts, compared with some of the other games on this jam, which shouldn't come as a surprise considering the number of endings. The choices actually mattered, even though some of them only provided flavor text.