Personally I liked it but I wished there had been a backlog or a return button as I accidentally skipped a few scenes.  Also I found so much text overwhelming, it was basically just reading a terminal the whole time and even though I know that is the intention, I wished that maybe each text shown would be a  few lines long making it for an easier read, like a visual novel. 

Despite my criticisms I found it interesting and I  hope to see more from you 

Great story! I do think fleshing out the main character and crew a bit more would help. Love the retrospective screens. Overall a great effort. Well done!

I like the scifi setup, and the retrospective screens. To me, two turns in the story stand out: the twist at the beginning, where apparently Will's "comrades" attempt to blow him up with the ship, and the unexpected encounter with his brother. The stretches of violence aren't really my cup of tea, though.