I finished the content available right now. I must say, this game is so good that every other game I've played looks like shit in comparison. I can't wait to see what comes in the next update! Keep up the good work! :D
Marruk's my favorite character right now. I have a feeling there's more to his personality and backstory than his outwardly rude and closed-off disposition. After all, he's just trying to do what was instructed of him. He also shows hints of genuine kindness towards the MC, as well as being a fairly blunt Carain compared to Marrow. Rhoun is certainly more friendly and understanding than Marruk, thus I understand why people veer towards him. Even so, I'm less curious about his development in the story. I'll be doing both of their routes, though!
there already are many "hints" pointing towards him actually being kind, and his rough exterior being a product of his environment/circumstances more than his own personality, so he'll most likely start acting nicer towards others after spending enough time with MC and achieving some stability in his job, among other things. at least that's how stories tend to work.
The same is true for several other visual novels. I've always been into his type of character, as they're usually the most complex and really add to the storyline/plot. Let's hope that Marruk's arc isn't so different.
Thanks for getting back to me. I tried a few things including a fresh install and than coping over my saves, but with no luck. :-(
So, I've done a fresh install and will start over, (was going to try the "skip" function, but it's greyed out and does not respond) Just a suggestion/thought, something I've noticed other authors will offer is a Chapter or Day selection option in the main menu, to save the users from having to start over or go through the skip process should update or other problems occur that would require starting from the beginning.
PS. Great story and man that Doberman is an awesome character. Reminds me of a roommate (with benefits) I once had. :-)
I'm 泡澡的inko,a chinese fan of Roads Yet Traveled. Thank you for creating such an amazing game.
I want to translate it into Chinese edition to make more Chinese pups play and know about this fantastic game. (The version is 1.0 which is published in itch)
I have translated more than 40 games
Like this：↓
Please let me know If I can get your permission of translating it. （Fan made version）
It was surprise to me how MASSIVE in word count the story feels, i really was looking for another less then an hour (mark) story, buuut nope. I just cannot finish it in one go, so much to think about and theorize in here. Basicly - WOW!
I really hope to see the rest of this promising project, good work.
A pretty interesting start, although there is still work to be done. While the whole story in itself didn't feel dragged out to me, the beginning was definitely less interesting than the rest. You should also proofread what you have already since a lot of the grammar, punctuation and co. is pretty bad. One thing that did annoyed me is how you have to click after almost every comma and such, especially in the beginning. I believe this could be replaced with just something like a 2s pause before the text continues but that may just be me. Other than this I don't really have anything negative to say; I'm assuming all the other questions I have will be answered in later builds. Can't wait to see where this goes!
Had an interesting theory come to mind about "The Eye" and the system that is apparently within the emptiness of stars. After going through the VN twice and watching 1 person play through the whole way, I had a big feeling that whatever this system is, have the Carain's ever taken a proper look at this system, and if they haven't, what are the odds that "The Eye" that they're referring to is somehow our Solar System within the R.Y.T. universe? Could the dream the MC has at the end of Day 2 to this mysterious out of body experience somehow be connected to this? There's a lot to theorize that we aren't taking into consideration, especially since the Chief's "big show" is, more than likely, what ultimately led us to be taken from our campus, at the beginning of the game, and into what is, effectively, a space station that we're unfamiliar with as our new home with an entirely different species that mirrors many MANY similarities, there's a lot to think about here.
also i love how its about a " god " that believes all carain are good. as in they are all good boys. its the most adorable thing ever. worship the god who calls us good boys
So, I have to say that my favourite character is Maruk. What I like the most about this kind of character is that you can be sure that you won't have any bad surprises with them. If they have something bad to tell us, they will tell us straight away, unlike some characters who might lie or hide the truth. That's the advantage of being straight forward and direct I guess. I kind of relate to the fact that he's paranoid about security. I mean, the MC is an alien who literally comes out of nowhere. I can totally understand him being on guard. He probably lacked empathy but I don't think that's his intention. Moreover, he's not helped by the conditions (Seriously, having to stay in the same room all the time even to sleep is not very nice of the team when he's the one who retrieved the MC while not making a scratch on his memory. He did his job well and he's being punished. Poor Guy.
As a previous comment said, I think the doctor will become an antagonist. He made a good first impression on me but the longer the game went on the less confidence I had in him. The fact that he always keeps a blank stare is also quite creepy. He looks like the kind of person who will do anything to sacrifice lives for science with an "end justifies the means" logic. I wonder what role the captain will play. Is she his accomplice, his boss or does she have nothing to do with him? I'm very curious to see her and to make my opinion on her.
As for the pace, I personally don't mind it. I played the game a couple of weeks ago so my memories aren't very fresh but I don't think I remember being bored at any point.
I think it would be an interesting twist if Maruk was hiding stuff from the MC. I feel like since he is very blunt and straight forward about his concern we could assume that what he says is what he sees, but I think he would be just as ready to lie for the sake of security at the expense of the MC.
Good start! Interesting plot, great art, backgrounds and several varied characters.
Now, I want to make it clear that I DID enjoy this first release, but I did find a few issues with it as well. Thankfully, there are two comments below that highlight exactly what I wanted to say; Kallier's comment regarding the grammar, punctuation and syntax, although harsh, is probably about as accurate as I could write myself. I noticed it was often inconsistent and at times would flow awkwardly. I also noticed quite a few times that the wrong name popped up in reference to the dialogue too. You might want to consider proof-readers to remedy this? The second comment is Kentaro Manedwuff's criticism of the length; I won't say it's too long myself, but there were times when a particular scene would begin to feel very drawn out or I would start to get very bored of the MC's thoughts/rambles. I would consider condensing it a little - at least trim down the repetitive interactions perhaps (MC's complaints about the food, Marruk being a prick, etc)
Other criticisms I haven't seen mentioned include how fast we progressed from simple, single words and phrases for the "A.I's benefit" to immediately holding and understanding casual conversations within a few days. I'm also not sure if Rhoun is just constantly nervous or has a stutter.
Again, I do like what you've got there, but these issues do tend to ruin the immersion and there were times where I was just clicking through the dialogue waiting for something interesting to pop-up because I'd lost interest in a drawn out scene. If you can manage to fix these issues - which I think you can, clearly - you'll have a great VN here.
(Copied from my review of the VN. Apologies if you've already read this)
My impression of the first build is that it is long. It is very long. My friend calculated the word count as almost 100,000 words, which is already the length of a full novel. In and of itself, that's not a bad thing, but to set the majority of that time in exactly one room makes the VN unbearably slow-paced, especially when most of that time is spent in almost interminably long monologues of the main char continually asking, "Where am I? What's going to happen to me?" and repetitive character interactions (seriously, how many times must we read about Marruk being an asshole to the main char until the reader says, "Okay, Marruk is an asshole! We get it!"?). And after all of that, we still have no idea of what the main conflict of the story will be, so it feels as if nothing significant has happened yet.
If I had a suggestion, it's this: the length needs to be cut down drastically. In fact, I would go so far as to say that the VN would be twice as effective at only half the length. So what would I recommend cutting? Well, the monologues don't need to be as long and there don't need to be so many extraneous interactions with the other chars (did we, for example, need two different scenes where the main char describes his love of curry?). More specifically, cut anything out that isn't immediately relevant to the current situation. Information can always be revealed to the reader at a later point in the story.
But it's not all bad though. All of the main chars have distinct personalities and clearly indicate that they have more depth to them than they are currently letting on, and that's intriguing. But without any sense of what the main conflict of the story will be, I'm not getting a sense of how each character will be uniquely suited to solving the problems that the main char may have. Still, after finally getting through the intro, I am interested in seeing how the main char's relationship with the char on the chosen path will develop. But if I have to tell people that they have to wade through an almost insufferably long, slow-paced intro before they get to the interesting parts, they're most likely going to conclude that it's not worth their time.
Hope the MC will get a bit better soon unlike FBTW. Marruk and Rhoun are my favorite but Marruk is unique in this case. Rhoun's face reminds me a bit of Captain Dallas from Alien which is good.
I change my mind. The MC is created poorly. Another human mc that failed to be good. If they want to create a well done human MC, I recommend do research
Well I enjoyed what you have written so far and looking forward to the next updates. As it's already been pointed out in several posts now about some issues, I'm not going to get into them myself.
Just hope that our choice doesn't slow things down, as that's now three different routes you got to create. So wondering what your road plan for future updates will look like.
Amazing start of great vn, I cant believe its so huge already, it took me till 2:30 am, looking forward to next update, ,I put this on my top 3 list with soulcreek and far beyond the world.
Hello there! I played through and really enjoyed your visual novel, and you asked others to share any grammatical errors that they found! Since I was bored, and because I loved your story so much, I thought why not compile a scene-by-scene heavily opinionated analysis of the style of your game, hopefully so it’s easier for you to improve it! Feel free to take this into consideration only if you want to, I’ll love your game regardless of whether you care about this feedback ☺. It is also verrrryyy nitpicky at points, and I’m not following any language or style guide, just my personal preferences. (Anyone with the link to this document can comment, so be nice, and let me know if I have a bad take lol)
I originally planned on doing more but basically only did the first introductory bit. If you want me to do more, let me know! I'll keep this updated as I go through my second playthrough each weekend. This is a love letter for version 1.0 of Roads Yet Traveled, and I can’t wait to read the following chapters! Thank you for making one of my favorite visual novels of all time.
Thank you for taking the time to give me notes! Do you think however that you could offer them up in some other manner? I am not a fan of clicking on random links, thank you!
That’s understandable! What would be the best way to contact you with these? If it’s not a document or a file (right now it’s a Google Doc) I don’t really know what other form these could take, my apologies. (I could send you an email, but I don’t know where to find an address)
It's a google drive link, also i don't think clicking a link can give you a virus. Only running an .exe file you download from a fishy link can. I checked it, there's a lot of notes there
I just want to say good job CryptidDog! Despite what other say I do believe we as human make mistakes and it isn't our entire fault and the art is great! I can' t wait to see you improving in the future <3
Okay, so, to start off with: I am genuinely amazed with how fuckin' long this first update is; 6-7 hours of content. I'm just blown away by that.
Now onto the actual review portion: The art is well drawn, all the characters are well-fleshed out, and the story kept me intrigued enough to continue reading despite the majority of the update taking place in a single room. You seem to have taken aspect of both Adastra and Far Beyond the World, but have majorly improved upon those absolutely dogshit games by making the MC actually intelligent and not a piece of stiff cardboard. Amazing.
Now on to the critical side of things (And for those idiots who think being critical of something you enjoyed is a bad thing, you need to grow the fuck up).
The grammar and punctuation, spelling and syntax is at times fucking awful. The formatting of the VN itself needs a shit ton of work put into it. There were times were no name came up for dialogue, and other times where the wrong name came up. I don't particularly like the direction the VN is going in either. Romance furry VNs are so oversaturated and they get very boring after awhile.
Overall, I enjoyed this VN quite a bit. I'll leave a link to my series on the VN:
I agree with you on almost everything, just I would not say its "fucking awful" a bit of an overstatement, but it's true that sometimes some things are out of the box but it still was pretty easy to understand what was happening (and I'm not even an English native). for the direction it is taking, I think it's a matter of taste there, I honestly like it but mostly because I'm into romance but at least is not random romance (i mean there is no romance yet which makes sense given the circumstance) and the fact the MC actually has a brain (as you said) help a lot so yeah
While being able to criticize things you enjoy is important, and I think you do a fine job of it here, would it not also be helpful to point out these grammatical errors?
Criticism is welcome, but you dont need to be rude and ignorant to give your OPINION, just like its absolutely unnecessary to disregard something to praise something else.
Do not take your opinion on something as the absolute truth. Its fine if you do not like those VNs, but insulting them (and everyone involved) is pretty stupid and childish of you, specially when they are between the top furry VNs and are used as the high quality standard and influence so many others.
Being an ass while doing a "hot take" is not cOol, get off your high horse and grow up.
i've heard of it accidentally on twitter and i decided to download it to see what it was about and BOY i was not disapointed!
all the characters are really lovely even if one of them is an ass, the scenes are beautifully drawn they all have their own unique little details, the story is catching etc etc...
But i've noted small problems too:
1- sometimes MC is speaking to a character but it looks like he's talking in his head because his name is nowhere to be seen and there's no quotation marks.
2- At one time Marruk is speaking but his name is still stuck to "doc".
So yeah there's small problems here and there but it will not ruin your reading experience.
Anyway i love this novel i'm so hype for the next update!!
PS: i was expecting like 2 days in game and then a "To be continued..." screen but i was happily surprised to see that you've wrote A LOT MORE than what i was anticipating.
Ah well if you run into the issues please feel free to reach out to me so I can fix them! I have fixed a few already but I'm sure there are many more x.x And thank you! The writing has been a fun aspect for me so I enjoy making the updates as long as I can manage.
You must have been working hard on this for a long time, initial release has least 4 builds (4 to 8 months of work) worth of content. And this is all just the Prologue and Chapter One!
I look forward to meeting all the other named characters (with sprites!) and some brief bits with other random/minor role (like the one ran into in the hall, a sprite or two) (these could also be replaced with CGs in event of multiple characters too), the amenities, and finding out the cause of the story!
Really love how you made all the characters as similar as they are different from each other, doing it in this way with no clear bias even from the MC, I may just do them all!
Alright, not gonna do a full review just yet, because that'll be a few pages long and it's getting late, so here's just the shots I'm calling.
1. Chief is evil, big bad, final boss, main antagonist, hate that dude.
2. Marrow is some kind of Bio-Bot (at least, more is artificial than he's letting on). I was originally thinking full android for various reasons (no smell, immunity to disease, no monitor, "I forgot", "that's the whole point", etc. etc.) but then he ate near the very end, and genuinely does seem to sleep. At this point I think he might even have been fully bio and we have a brain-scan situation on our hands.
3. Marruk lost someone close to him in the same accident that caused Rhoun's arm to get amputated.
4. The artificial gravity generator is going to be damaged/must be turned off at some point in the story and MC is going to be the only one to fix it/do it.
5. Chief is using the neural language AI to monitor the main cast constantly. Abusing the constant uploading they're doing of MC's speech patterns to a central database he can access.
6. Chief's "grand experiment" or whatever was what brought us onto the ship, and I'd even go so far as to say it did so intentionally.
7. Finally a silly one. There will be a naughty scene where the AI learns the English words for naughty parts. Later, these words will be used by MC in passing, but since the AI learned them it will translate perfectly, rather than that odd dissonance. This will fly over most characters heads, but one will later realize that MC talked dirty with one of the others.
I just wonder what they want out of the MC. He's the only alien to them in existence. Would they really let him live a free life on their home planet or something? Or would his life be under constant "protection"?
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I'm really sad we didn't get to spend much time with rhoune :(
Just imagine. . . . next update
Leggit can't wait ahah I need to chit chat with the goodest boy
I finished the content available right now. I must say, this game is so good that every other game I've played looks like shit in comparison. I can't wait to see what comes in the next update! Keep up the good work! :D
Marruk's my favorite character right now. I have a feeling there's more to his personality and backstory than his outwardly rude and closed-off disposition. After all, he's just trying to do what was instructed of him. He also shows hints of genuine kindness towards the MC, as well as being a fairly blunt Carain compared to Marrow. Rhoun is certainly more friendly and understanding than Marruk, thus I understand why people veer towards him. Even so, I'm less curious about his development in the story. I'll be doing both of their routes, though!
I really like Marruk as well, hopefully we get more interaction with him.
Same here, Marruk feels more interesting, but all 3 are great
I've got a question; Why is Marruk such a jerk and so umpleasant? I LOVE Doberman's and I'm having such a hard time liking him...
character development incoming
How do you know?
there already are many "hints" pointing towards him actually being kind, and his rough exterior being a product of his environment/circumstances more than his own personality, so he'll most likely start acting nicer towards others after spending enough time with MC and achieving some stability in his job, among other things. at least that's how stories tend to work.
The same is true for several other visual novels. I've always been into his type of character, as they're usually the most complex and really add to the storyline/plot. Let's hope that Marruk's arc isn't so different.
Darius (from Extracurricular Activities) comes to mind; best route
Latest Android version will not update the previous android release, fail error on attempt to update.
I changed renpy versions so I am unsure if you can just update it. Then again Im not great at the technical stuff so I'm not sure
Thanks for getting back to me. I tried a few things including a fresh install and than coping over my saves, but with no luck. :-(
So, I've done a fresh install and will start over, (was going to try the "skip" function, but it's greyed out and does not respond) Just a suggestion/thought, something I've noticed other authors will offer is a Chapter or Day selection option in the main menu, to save the users from having to start over or go through the skip process should update or other problems occur that would require starting from the beginning.
PS. Great story and man that Doberman is an awesome character. Reminds me of a roommate (with benefits) I once had. :-)
the saves are broken
The fix is in the devlog. Go to preferences and select "skip unseen text." That will allow you to skip everything.
Hello, you didnt put the OS corresponding to each build, so ppl using the itch app can't download the game
Ddint know that was a thing. Fixed
thank you :D
Heeeey, any idea of how many words are there in the story right now? Just curious
120k~
Love the story!
Cant wait for more!
Hi CryptidDog,
I'm 泡澡的inko,a chinese fan of Roads Yet Traveled. Thank you for creating such an amazing game.
I want to translate it into Chinese edition to make more Chinese pups play and know about this fantastic game. (The version is 1.0 which is published in itch)
I have translated more than 40 games
Like this：↓
Please let me know If I can get your permission of translating it. （Fan made version）
Rhoun is the good boy but he keep zooning out kinda cute~ keep going Its going to be a good story^^
MARROW IS THE CUTEST EVER I SWEAR I WILL OVE HIM FOR THE REST OF MY LIFE THANK YOU-
That was awesome!
It was surprise to me how MASSIVE in word count the story feels, i really was looking for another less then an hour (mark) story, buuut nope. I just cannot finish it in one go, so much to think about and theorize in here. Basicly - WOW!
I really hope to see the rest of this promising project, good work.
Да, нечасто в последнее время ВНки с таким объемом текста появляются... Отличная работа, согласен.
I know right?? For a first build, this is massive!
And I loved the surprise!
I’m love with this visual novel ahhh😍💕💕
I really enjoyed reading this
Soo excited about the upcoming updates and thank you❤️❤️
A pretty interesting start, although there is still work to be done. While the whole story in itself didn't feel dragged out to me, the beginning was definitely less interesting than the rest. You should also proofread what you have already since a lot of the grammar, punctuation and co. is pretty bad. One thing that did annoyed me is how you have to click after almost every comma and such, especially in the beginning. I believe this could be replaced with just something like a 2s pause before the text continues but that may just be me. Other than this I don't really have anything negative to say; I'm assuming all the other questions I have will be answered in later builds. Can't wait to see where this goes!
Yes another VN with a human MC and i already love the story <3
Had an interesting theory come to mind about "The Eye" and the system that is apparently within the emptiness of stars. After going through the VN twice and watching 1 person play through the whole way, I had a big feeling that whatever this system is, have the Carain's ever taken a proper look at this system, and if they haven't, what are the odds that "The Eye" that they're referring to is somehow our Solar System within the R.Y.T. universe? Could the dream the MC has at the end of Day 2 to this mysterious out of body experience somehow be connected to this? There's a lot to theorize that we aren't taking into consideration, especially since the Chief's "big show" is, more than likely, what ultimately led us to be taken from our campus, at the beginning of the game, and into what is, effectively, a space station that we're unfamiliar with as our new home with an entirely different species that mirrors many MANY similarities, there's a lot to think about here.
also i love how its about a " god " that believes all carain are good. as in they are all good boys. its the most adorable thing ever. worship the god who calls us good boys
So, I have to say that my favourite character is Maruk. What I like the most about this kind of character is that you can be sure that you won't have any bad surprises with them. If they have something bad to tell us, they will tell us straight away, unlike some characters who might lie or hide the truth. That's the advantage of being straight forward and direct I guess. I kind of relate to the fact that he's paranoid about security. I mean, the MC is an alien who literally comes out of nowhere. I can totally understand him being on guard. He probably lacked empathy but I don't think that's his intention. Moreover, he's not helped by the conditions (Seriously, having to stay in the same room all the time even to sleep is not very nice of the team when he's the one who retrieved the MC while not making a scratch on his memory. He did his job well and he's being punished. Poor Guy.
As a previous comment said, I think the doctor will become an antagonist. He made a good first impression on me but the longer the game went on the less confidence I had in him. The fact that he always keeps a blank stare is also quite creepy. He looks like the kind of person who will do anything to sacrifice lives for science with an "end justifies the means" logic. I wonder what role the captain will play. Is she his accomplice, his boss or does she have nothing to do with him? I'm very curious to see her and to make my opinion on her.
As for the pace, I personally don't mind it. I played the game a couple of weeks ago so my memories aren't very fresh but I don't think I remember being bored at any point.
I think it would be an interesting twist if Maruk was hiding stuff from the MC. I feel like since he is very blunt and straight forward about his concern we could assume that what he says is what he sees, but I think he would be just as ready to lie for the sake of security at the expense of the MC.
Your idea is interesting but I hope it won't happen because my poor heart wouldn't support it haha.
This was such a good read I loved every second
Good start! Interesting plot, great art, backgrounds and several varied characters.
Now, I want to make it clear that I DID enjoy this first release, but I did find a few issues with it as well. Thankfully, there are two comments below that highlight exactly what I wanted to say; Kallier's comment regarding the grammar, punctuation and syntax, although harsh, is probably about as accurate as I could write myself. I noticed it was often inconsistent and at times would flow awkwardly. I also noticed quite a few times that the wrong name popped up in reference to the dialogue too. You might want to consider proof-readers to remedy this? The second comment is Kentaro Manedwuff's criticism of the length; I won't say it's too long myself, but there were times when a particular scene would begin to feel very drawn out or I would start to get very bored of the MC's thoughts/rambles. I would consider condensing it a little - at least trim down the repetitive interactions perhaps (MC's complaints about the food, Marruk being a prick, etc)
Other criticisms I haven't seen mentioned include how fast we progressed from simple, single words and phrases for the "A.I's benefit" to immediately holding and understanding casual conversations within a few days. I'm also not sure if Rhoun is just constantly nervous or has a stutter.
Again, I do like what you've got there, but these issues do tend to ruin the immersion and there were times where I was just clicking through the dialogue waiting for something interesting to pop-up because I'd lost interest in a drawn out scene. If you can manage to fix these issues - which I think you can, clearly - you'll have a great VN here.
(Copied from my review of the VN. Apologies if you've already read this)
My impression of the first build is that it is long. It is very long. My friend calculated the word count as almost 100,000 words, which is already the length of a full novel. In and of itself, that's not a bad thing, but to set the majority of that time in exactly one room makes the VN unbearably slow-paced, especially when most of that time is spent in almost interminably long monologues of the main char continually asking, "Where am I? What's going to happen to me?" and repetitive character interactions (seriously, how many times must we read about Marruk being an asshole to the main char until the reader says, "Okay, Marruk is an asshole! We get it!"?). And after all of that, we still have no idea of what the main conflict of the story will be, so it feels as if nothing significant has happened yet.
If I had a suggestion, it's this: the length needs to be cut down drastically. In fact, I would go so far as to say that the VN would be twice as effective at only half the length. So what would I recommend cutting? Well, the monologues don't need to be as long and there don't need to be so many extraneous interactions with the other chars (did we, for example, need two different scenes where the main char describes his love of curry?). More specifically, cut anything out that isn't immediately relevant to the current situation. Information can always be revealed to the reader at a later point in the story. But it's not all bad though. All of the main chars have distinct personalities and clearly indicate that they have more depth to them than they are currently letting on, and that's intriguing. But without any sense of what the main conflict of the story will be, I'm not getting a sense of how each character will be uniquely suited to solving the problems that the main char may have. Still, after finally getting through the intro, I am interested in seeing how the main char's relationship with the char on the chosen path will develop. But if I have to tell people that they have to wade through an almost insufferably long, slow-paced intro before they get to the interesting parts, they're most likely going to conclude that it's not worth their time.
Wow, for a first build It has a considerable amount of text. Now I have nothing but good toughts about the project. Thank you! I loved reading this.
Absolutely love it so far. I even cried a bit. I can't wait for what's coming next 😁
Hope the MC will get a bit better soon unlike FBTW. Marruk and Rhoun are my favorite but Marruk is unique in this case. Rhoun's face reminds me a bit of Captain Dallas from Alien which is good.
i mean, lol fbtw isn't going to end any soon, as much as i think he was kinda stupid at the begining he definetly going to glow up more and more
I change my mind. The MC is created poorly. Another human mc that failed to be good. If they want to create a well done human MC, I recommend do research
Well I enjoyed what you have written so far and looking forward to the next updates. As it's already been pointed out in several posts now about some issues, I'm not going to get into them myself.
Just hope that our choice doesn't slow things down, as that's now three different routes you got to create. So wondering what your road plan for future updates will look like.
It felt short, but boy am I already liking the art and characters. :)
I don’t have much to say, but I really liked the story.
I hope your visual novel gets noticed by the community
I’m not good at drawing, but here is a fan-art I’m trying to draw.
Sorry if it’s a bit to early to draw these
I made little progress
But I’m having troubles with the body, so here is a sketch I think
I procrastinated on this way to long, but it looks very crappy, so sorry about that, but it’s better then nothing right?
Oh I just saw this sorry! So cute! Thanks for the art!
Amazing start of great vn, I cant believe its so huge already, it took me till 2:30 am, looking forward to next update, ,I put this on my top 3 list with soulcreek and far beyond the world.
I think we have the same top 3 XD.
Though i love "remember the flowers" too
(Edit : i hate having to deal with my french auto correct XD)
Soon after I sent that comment I realised it too i forgot to add Remember the flowers, so thats my top 4
Ill take top four -w-
Damn I really wasn't expecting this first build to be sooo long, that was quite a nice surprise!
Really enjoyed this first build, and I like where it's going as well, can't wait for the next update!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jBrW7ld2JtG2KV7Et_WzmXJwetvwWkUUrmldcgqlFYc/...
Hello there! I played through and really enjoyed your visual novel, and you asked others to share any grammatical errors that they found! Since I was bored, and because I loved your story so much, I thought why not compile a scene-by-scene heavily opinionated analysis of the style of your game, hopefully so it’s easier for you to improve it! Feel free to take this into consideration only if you want to, I’ll love your game regardless of whether you care about this feedback ☺. It is also verrrryyy nitpicky at points, and I’m not following any language or style guide, just my personal preferences. (Anyone with the link to this document can comment, so be nice, and let me know if I have a bad take lol)
I originally planned on doing more but basically only did the first introductory bit. If you want me to do more, let me know! I'll keep this updated as I go through my second playthrough each weekend. This is a love letter for version 1.0 of Roads Yet Traveled, and I can’t wait to read the following chapters! Thank you for making one of my favorite visual novels of all time.
Respectfully,
dvartho
Thank you for taking the time to give me notes! Do you think however that you could offer them up in some other manner? I am not a fan of clicking on random links, thank you!
That’s understandable! What would be the best way to contact you with these? If it’s not a document or a file (right now it’s a Google Doc) I don’t really know what other form these could take, my apologies. (I could send you an email, but I don’t know where to find an address)
If they are not too long feel free to send them to me in a twitter dm or send images of the notes
If that doesnt work I can figure something else out!
It's a google drive link, also i don't think clicking a link can give you a virus. Only running an .exe file you download from a fishy link can. I checked it, there's a lot of notes there
I love how you formatted these notes, fantastic work!
Got to reading the notes. They were helpful thank you. If you continue to write them I will read them heh. Thanks for enjoying my VN!
Sorry I didn't figure out a better way to get them to you, I think your twitter dms were closed :). Good luck with the next build, you are amazing!!
I just want to say good job CryptidDog! Despite what other say I do believe we as human make mistakes and it isn't our entire fault and the art is great! I can' t wait to see you improving in the future <3
Okay, so, to start off with: I am genuinely amazed with how fuckin' long this first update is; 6-7 hours of content. I'm just blown away by that.
Now onto the actual review portion: The art is well drawn, all the characters are well-fleshed out, and the story kept me intrigued enough to continue reading despite the majority of the update taking place in a single room. You seem to have taken aspect of both Adastra and Far Beyond the World, but have majorly improved upon those absolutely dogshit games by making the MC actually intelligent and not a piece of stiff cardboard. Amazing.
Now on to the critical side of things (And for those idiots who think being critical of something you enjoyed is a bad thing, you need to grow the fuck up).
The grammar and punctuation, spelling and syntax is at times fucking awful. The formatting of the VN itself needs a shit ton of work put into it. There were times were no name came up for dialogue, and other times where the wrong name came up. I don't particularly like the direction the VN is going in either. Romance furry VNs are so oversaturated and they get very boring after awhile.
Overall, I enjoyed this VN quite a bit. I'll leave a link to my series on the VN:
https://youtube.com/playlist?list=PLs_BZI-CHxZwTbXueujDVg-Hv6SZRny1M
I agree with you on almost everything, just I would not say its "fucking awful" a bit of an overstatement, but it's true that sometimes some things are out of the box but it still was pretty easy to understand what was happening (and I'm not even an English native). for the direction it is taking, I think it's a matter of taste there, I honestly like it but mostly because I'm into romance but at least is not random romance (i mean there is no romance yet which makes sense given the circumstance) and the fact the MC actually has a brain (as you said) help a lot so yeah
While being able to criticize things you enjoy is important, and I think you do a fine job of it here, would it not also be helpful to point out these grammatical errors?
theres already a post about the grammatical errors
Criticism is welcome, but you dont need to be rude and ignorant to give your OPINION, just like its absolutely unnecessary to disregard something to praise something else.
Do not take your opinion on something as the absolute truth. Its fine if you do not like those VNs, but insulting them (and everyone involved) is pretty stupid and childish of you, specially when they are between the top furry VNs and are used as the high quality standard and influence so many others.
Being an ass while doing a "hot take" is not cOol, get off your high horse and grow up.
So good.
I loved it, what a heck of a first release you really wanted to start with a boom totally recommended loved it from the start
Omg this is so amazing hehe can't wait to see wat happens
Were the backgrounds illustrated by KaelTiger? I swear I know this artstyle...
No hah. But I was inspired by his work. Its some of my fav for sure.
You did a damn good job at recreating his artstyle, then. I love it!
alright so first that VN is SO GOOD !!!
i've heard of it accidentally on twitter and i decided to download it to see what it was about and BOY i was not disapointed!
all the characters are really lovely even if one of them is an ass, the scenes are beautifully drawn they all have their own unique little details, the story is catching etc etc...
But i've noted small problems too:
1- sometimes MC is speaking to a character but it looks like he's talking in his head because his name is nowhere to be seen and there's no quotation marks.
2- At one time Marruk is speaking but his name is still stuck to "doc".
So yeah there's small problems here and there but it will not ruin your reading experience.
Anyway i love this novel i'm so hype for the next update!!
PS: i was expecting like 2 days in game and then a "To be continued..." screen but i was happily surprised to see that you've wrote A LOT MORE than what i was anticipating.
I love this one you have no idea (>_>)
thanks again for your work !
Ah well if you run into the issues please feel free to reach out to me so I can fix them! I have fixed a few already but I'm sure there are many more x.x And thank you! The writing has been a fun aspect for me so I enjoy making the updates as long as I can manage.
You must have been working hard on this for a long time, initial release has least 4 builds (4 to 8 months of work) worth of content. And this is all just the Prologue and Chapter One!
I look forward to meeting all the other named characters (with sprites!) and some brief bits with other random/minor role (like the one ran into in the hall, a sprite or two) (these could also be replaced with CGs in event of multiple characters too), the amenities, and finding out the cause of the story!
Really love how you made all the characters as similar as they are different from each other, doing it in this way with no clear bias even from the MC, I may just do them all!
Im going to look around alittle 1st.
$, after i examine your BrainChild^^ (reviews leave me hopeful^^)
I'm hooked, waiting for more updates, very nice VN :).
Alright, not gonna do a full review just yet, because that'll be a few pages long and it's getting late, so here's just the shots I'm calling.
1. Chief is evil, big bad, final boss, main antagonist, hate that dude.
2. Marrow is some kind of Bio-Bot (at least, more is artificial than he's letting on). I was originally thinking full android for various reasons (no smell, immunity to disease, no monitor, "I forgot", "that's the whole point", etc. etc.) but then he ate near the very end, and genuinely does seem to sleep. At this point I think he might even have been fully bio and we have a brain-scan situation on our hands.
3. Marruk lost someone close to him in the same accident that caused Rhoun's arm to get amputated.
4. The artificial gravity generator is going to be damaged/must be turned off at some point in the story and MC is going to be the only one to fix it/do it.
5. Chief is using the neural language AI to monitor the main cast constantly. Abusing the constant uploading they're doing of MC's speech patterns to a central database he can access.
6. Chief's "grand experiment" or whatever was what brought us onto the ship, and I'd even go so far as to say it did so intentionally.
7. Finally a silly one. There will be a naughty scene where the AI learns the English words for naughty parts. Later, these words will be used by MC in passing, but since the AI learned them it will translate perfectly, rather than that odd dissonance. This will fly over most characters heads, but one will later realize that MC talked dirty with one of the others.
I just wonder what they want out of the MC. He's the only alien to them in existence. Would they really let him live a free life on their home planet or something? Or would his life be under constant "protection"?