I agree with Kuro, that subs would be great for the musical sections, there's times when the English is hard to discern. Please don't fade out before "Open your eyes" the fades are great but they feel like they're just too quick, cutting off stuff at the end of the musical pieces. The game itself is very story heavy which means there's almost no mechanics. I think you could put more in to represent life's struggles. Overall, it felt a bit incomplete but that's just my opinion. Also, I walked left at the very start and fell into oblivion!
Really though, well done!