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Yikes, I didn't mean to obliterate your will to write, sorry about that! :I

I get a bit, uh, riled up when I see something that could be good but isn't; it frustrates me in a weird way and then I might leave critiques without pulling my punches...with that said, I'm not taking any of it back, 'cause I think my points are valid

As I said before, and I chose these words deliberately: you're "an inexperienced writer", not a talentless one. And as you're aware, you lack skill. You do, but - while outsourcing your writing may be the more sensible option - is that what you really want?

Won't you try to get better instead?

I - could assist you. I'm not ghost-writing for anyone, but I can advise you about your writing and discuss plotholes, inconsistencies, POVs, style, rhythm etc.

Keep in mind, English is my second language, so I'm less likely to be able to help you there

Hopelight2000128 days ago(+4)

Funny how you admit your “feedback” destroyed their will to write, but instead of apologizing sincerely, you double down on being “right.” Feedback isn’t just about what you say, but how you say it. What you gave wasn’t constructive—it was cruel, and it shows you care more about hearing yourself critique than about helping someone grow. You obliterated their confidence, positioned yourself as a mentor, and then admitted you weren’t even equipped to judge English writing? You don’t get to swing the wrecking ball and then pretend you’re there to hold the bricks. Critique points out flaws while still nurturing the spark that keeps a creator going. What you did wasn’t critique, it was cruelty. When the author shared how deeply your words crushed them, you didn’t take a step back and say, “Wow, maybe I came across too harsh.” No—you doubled down. And it says a lot more about your need to hear yourself sound clever than it does about the author’s talent. If this is your version of “help,” you should stop pretending it benefits anyone but your own ego.

xSai126 days ago(+4)

Thank you for your comment it helped more than you know. I would like to give it one more shot at this, especially since someone has offered to help as a guide with coding Twine.

I thank the critic for pointing out the errors, though I understand that I can't make everyone happy. So I stopped caring. Only reason I was close to giving up was because they noted the concept was really the only good thing about it. My faith in my work was already precarious since the day I posted it.

I didn't want to mention this since I felt it wasn't much of an achievement before on my behalf, but I remember that the mayor of our city personally met with me along with 4 other students after reading a prologue I once wrote for a story back in high school. We were selected out of the several in various writing classes and invited to a dinner party to receive an award. Just like this one, not everyone would have liked that story, and that's fine. All I have to say to them is this- show me your professionally Twine story I'll gladly shut the fuck up. Currently I see none on your page. English isn't my first language either, but I didn't use that as an excuse not to try. Anyways, they know that if they don't like it they don't have to return for the next update. Nonetheless I thank them for taking the time they wasted on reading this far.

I'm grateful that a very good friend of mine, Carolina, pointed this out to me. I would have never seen the responses on this since I had been avoiding it like the plague. I thank Carolina, Hopelight2000, and BeastInTheCave sincerely since they all helped to restore my motivation. The next update will be to honor you guys for encouraging me when I needed it most.

Hopelight2000125 days ago (8 edits) (+4)

Hell yeah! I’m so glad to hear this. The fact that you’re giving it another shot speaks volumes about your strength as a writer. And honestly? That “not much of an achievement” moment you mentioned — being personally invited and awarded by the mayor for your writing — that’s HUGE. Don’t downplay that. Recognition like that doesn’t happen to just anyone, and it shows that even back then, your words had real power.

That critic’s comment was absolute garbage, and I’m so glad you didn’t let it stop you. Seeing you continue in spite of that fucking asshole actually inspired me to finally start putting my own work here. You’ve got more backbone than most, and it shows in your writing. Keep doing what you do, because people like me needed to see it. And if you’re open to it, I’d love to hear what you think about a story I’ve been working on too — no pressure, I’d just be curious to get your perspective since your courage and skill have already inspired me to take the leap.

I also love how you turned it back on the critic with, “show me your professionally made Twine story and I’ll gladly shut the fuck up.” Exactly. Anyone can swing from the sidelines, but until they step into the arena and create something of their own, their demolition act means nothing. And I respect you even more for pointing out that English isn’t your first language — but you never used that as an excuse not to try. You just put your work out there, and it’s connecting with people. That’s courage.

I’m honestly honored you mentioned me by name. To know that my words helped you hold onto your passion means more than I can say. Your stories do matter, and you’ve already proven that they can move people — myself included. I’ll be here, cheering you on, ready to read every new update you share. And if you ever want someone who’s actually willing to edit and build you up instead of tear you down (cough cough fuck the critic cough cough), I’m here.

Keep going — you’ve got a community behind you, and we’re not going anywhere.

xSai121 days ago(+1)

Thank you so much, that really made my week to see this. And I'd be more than happy to see your work, I can tell you have the skill for it already. :) There needs to be more people like you in this world, you have a natural way of motivating and encouraging people even when they're at their lowest. It's those like you who deserve only the best in life.

Lalazarus87 days ago(+1)

Oh, wow? What an ego trip and utterly unemphatic comment.

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