Praise: This is a really fun and original idea for a module, and the timeline guarantees that the whole play session would stay lively. The icons indicating the presence of NPCs on the map at a given time is a stroke of brilliance.
Criticism: I think that the scope of this work is pushing the boundaries of the format. There is so much condensed 8pt type on these pages. I'd really love to see the work slightly expanded with more detailed area descriptions, and laid out in a more comfortable 12-16 pages