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A jam submission

the stars are moving, even without youView project page

submission for redline composing challenge, the theme was "one piano"
Submitted by soop — 8 hours, 38 minutes before the deadline
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Results

CriteriaRankScore*Raw Score
Challenge#54.2914.500
Creativity#93.5283.700
Composition#103.6233.800
Overall#103.5993.775
Mixing#122.9563.100

Ranked from 10 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.

Title
the stars are moving, even without you

Description
I took slight inspiration from the picture theme, i imagined a scene where a character was introduced by some godlike figure to all the knowledge of the universe, which in turn is like blowing their mind or something like that. So I made the piece all over the place, with some parts being slow and beautiful and others being chaotic and confusing. I kind of just went at it to be honest lol

Plugins used
foundations piano (clean) with the built in reverb

Link(s) to your submission
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Pjeqjb7FUDM

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Comments

Submitted

Very beautiful composition, totally succeeding in story taling

Submitted

Nice piece! I like how it's attention grabbing by having contrasting moments in terms of energy and different textures, there are a lot of good stuff going on. I think my main concern regarding the composition is that while there are a lot of good things there might be a bit too much new and less development. It's for sure possible to make the first roughly 40 seconds into a 3-minute piece alone. As it is now it feels a bit "improvisish". There are some parts where the music goes off and creates energy which is really nice and contrasting it with the slower/softer parts helps create a nice drama. However, I wish that there would be a part where you'd let the music go free. For example, at around 1:07, this part is really beautiful and I wish this part would be set free. As of now, it gets cut off almost interuptet which is not always a bad thing but maybe build up the tension again and then let the music go free. A very effective way to create a longer coherent piece is to tease the climax by starting it and interrupting it. Maybe set the music free at 1:48 and then end up in a bombastic last climax was my first thought. In that case, planning out when to let the music be free is a good way to stay coherent, get a red thread throughout the piece, and build a nice drama.

For the programming/mix/producing I think playing around a bit more with velocity/pedaling/staccato vs legato could add a lot of diversity. Don't read into my comment too much since it's just my current thoughts.

Overall a great job in creating a piece that is engaging to listen to and I love your approach to a more dramatic piece!

Developer

Thanks! Yeah, the piece is all over the place at times, I feel the same way. I plan to make multiple songs out of these little parts

Submitted(+1)

The way this composition builds drama and tension is really compelling and engaging, and I like how well it supports the narrative you set up. I also really like how you used a variety of different figurations and techniques on the piano to create a diverse palette of textures throughout the piece. The only things for me are, the volume is sometimes a bit low, and I think this piece, after all of that drama and tension you build, could have an even more impactful ending. Great job though, I enjoyed it a lot!

Developer

Thank you! I do see that I need to improve the volume, I'm going to continue writing this piece after I get feedback and will definitely try messing with the volume. I wish I could've developed the ending more but I ran out of time D:

Submitted(+1)

woah this is beautiful! especially love the part at 1:07 with that (chromatic i think) descending bassline :0
the only thing i can really say is that at times it gets too quiet/too loud, other than that great work!!

Developer

Thanks! the descending (yeah its chromatic) part is also my favorite, when I continue writing this piece I will definitely expand that part.

Submitted(+1)

I like the story you went with. That helps to understand the back and forth of the piece. I really enjoyed 1:06-1:30 - it has the running quality to it that had some dramatic energy.

Developer

Thank you for your feedback!

Submitted(+1)

Sounds like a beautiful improvisation, I liked the end, and some of the transition parts were really well done. For me the tempo automation was a bit much, it works great in some places, for me the rhythm got interrupted too often though.

Developer (1 edit)

While I love most of the transitions and the contrast of parts, I do agree that some of the transitions could be changed. Thanks for the feedback!

Submitted(+1)

I could barely hear some parts even with my volume really high which was a little annoying.

I really liked how much you toyed with the tempo. especially at 1:07 when it speeds up instantly. That also has my favorite part melodically.

Developer

Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, I never realized how quiet the youtube video was compared to the mp3. I might try to resubmit with a different video.

Developer

Resubmitted the video with better audio quality + higher volume