This composition has a lot of awesome ideas, and I like how you really explored a variety of touches and velocities on your notes to create different moods. I think each idea is compelling and sounds really cool on its own, but the transitions and overall structure feels a bit disjointed to me. Maybe you could try to clarify the purpose of each section in the context of the entire composition. For example, the section from 1:00 to 1:40 is really subtle and beautiful and I like it a lot, but I'm not quite sure what it's aiming to do. Is it there to provide a contrasting atmosphere? Is it developing a previous theme? Where does it lead? Honing in on the aim of each of your sections might help better connect all of these cool ideas into an even more awesome composition. Just to clarify though, this already sounds really great, and I had a lot of fun listening to it, good job!

I liked how frantic it got at places but it ended really abruptly.