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A Rocky Alliance - OPR Writing Jam #9View project page

Submitted by hydrated02 — 21 minutes, 45 seconds before the deadline
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Results

CriteriaRankScore*Raw Score
Adherence to Theme#253.7174.000
Flow & Clarity#263.3753.632
Overall#303.4403.702
Concepts & Originality#453.2283.474

Ranked from 19 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.

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Submitted

beware the orc training videos, that’s classic 👍

Submitted

The overall message is great, though a bit heavy-handed in the third column.

Had a great time with this one!

Submitted(+1)

I think you did a really good job with pacing this one - it felt like the perfect amount of content for the format. I do think that a lot of the exposition wound up being a bit unnecessary (like some of the opening paragraph, and the long one in the second column), and I think I'd have rather seen that word count spent on more dialogue. The dialogue (and positioning the orc as the knowledgable, enlightened one) was a highlight of the story to me, and I'd have liked to see more of the setting details come out organically in it. 

She Who Howls is also a great spaceship name and I'm definitely stealing it.

Submitted

I liked it, was a fun read! Felt like the exclamation marks were a bit over used, but other wise no notes! (disregard the fact that I use an exclamation mark whenever possible in this comment)

Submitted

I liked it, was a fun read! Felt like the exclamation marks were a bit over used, but other wise no notes! (disregard the fact that I use an exclamation mark whenever possible in this comment)

Submitted

'Orc and stone!'

'You spelled rock wrong.'

'Nah, I didn't.'

At last, an Orc helps something else and doesn't get betrayed for their effort. Thanks.

Submitted

Good stuff. I really liked the orc showing up to save the day--and the gentle chastisement that followed! I wonder if the irony might have been stronger if you introduced the anti-orc prejudice sooner? Great story, though, and definitely an unlikely alliance!

Submitted

Lovely stuff, really liked the pacing as the fight got underway. I liked the wholesome life lesson learned by Girra, especially after refering to the Radiance Cascade lore as a cool contrasting touchstone, great contrast to the grimdark backdrop.

Submitted

Lovely stuff, really liked the pacing as the fight got underway. I liked the wholesome life lesson learned by Girra, especially after refering to the Radiance Cascade lore as a cool contrasting touchstone, great contrast to the grimdark backdrop.